Heart Crafted Poems -2021
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Comment from Janet Foor
There is a profound message in this well written eight word poem. Some introspection gives one pause to reflect our own mortality.
Well done.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2021
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There is a profound message in this well written eight word poem. Some introspection gives one pause to reflect our own mortality.
Well done.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 01-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2021
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Janet, thank you 🙏
Comment from Saria/Shreyamsi
Deep! A few words capture an emotion that perhaps and essay wouldn't have conveyed. I did look up the meaning of bemoaning which made it a bit easier to understand the poem. The words were well chosen and the poem flowed smoothly. Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2021
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Deep! A few words capture an emotion that perhaps and essay wouldn't have conveyed. I did look up the meaning of bemoaning which made it a bit easier to understand the poem. The words were well chosen and the poem flowed smoothly. Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 01-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2021
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Saria, thank you for making the effort to understand the poem by seeking definitions. Be well, :)
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Ur Welcome!
Comment from Boogienights
This is another short poem that packs an emotional wallop. Deep down we all fear death and what comes after, but we don't talk about it...you have very succinctly put those feelings into eight words. Best of luck in the contest. :)
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2021
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This is another short poem that packs an emotional wallop. Deep down we all fear death and what comes after, but we don't talk about it...you have very succinctly put those feelings into eight words. Best of luck in the contest. :)
Comment Written 01-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2021
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Thank you! I appreciate your review.
Comment from palmart
Nice 8-word poem that reflects the inner, deep dialogues before that transcendental moment of "leaving this life". Artwork you have chosen is simple and with no colours but message is implicit in just straight lines. Great writing and great artwork!! All recognitions were really deserved. Good luck!
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2021
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Nice 8-word poem that reflects the inner, deep dialogues before that transcendental moment of "leaving this life". Artwork you have chosen is simple and with no colours but message is implicit in just straight lines. Great writing and great artwork!! All recognitions were really deserved. Good luck!
Comment Written 01-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2021
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Palmart, thank you🙏🎶
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You are really welcome, JLR! Have a wondeerful week!
Comment from Patty Palmer
None of us knows for sure what happens when we die. I read the Bible and I believe in God and Heaven and Jesus. But if we're honest. no one has ever come back to tell us. Therefore, it leaves us to our own faith. I believe I'm going to Heaven, but? Therefore it's never too early nor to late to prepare for death. I believe Jesus is my savior. Also since no one knows their time of death ahead of time, I believe that you are always prepared for it. It could happen in the blink of an eye. You said all you had to say in eight words, I took a few more. LOL Good luck with the contest!
Patty
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2021
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None of us knows for sure what happens when we die. I read the Bible and I believe in God and Heaven and Jesus. But if we're honest. no one has ever come back to tell us. Therefore, it leaves us to our own faith. I believe I'm going to Heaven, but? Therefore it's never too early nor to late to prepare for death. I believe Jesus is my savior. Also since no one knows their time of death ahead of time, I believe that you are always prepared for it. It could happen in the blink of an eye. You said all you had to say in eight words, I took a few more. LOL Good luck with the contest!
Patty
Comment Written 01-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2021
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Patty, thank for expanding on my words. We come in on a first breathe and we leave on our last breath. In between, we laugh, love, cry, dance, and some pray. We each have a promise to have Eternal life?.
Comment from DeboraDyess
A very profound statement in only eight words, J.
It made me think of a Rich Mullins song,
"The Jordon is waiting for me to cross...'
And it waits for us all. I hope to be at a point not to be bemoaning my life choices, but rather celebrating them when it's my turn to cross. Excellent entry for the contest.
Blessings,
Deb
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2021
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A very profound statement in only eight words, J.
It made me think of a Rich Mullins song,
"The Jordon is waiting for me to cross...'
And it waits for us all. I hope to be at a point not to be bemoaning my life choices, but rather celebrating them when it's my turn to cross. Excellent entry for the contest.
Blessings,
Deb
Comment Written 30-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2021
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Deb, thank you! From beginning to end, we live with Free Will it?s what we do with that free will that matters, however, we are promised Eternal life through out.
Comment from MissMerri
I would have to say this is a very well-constructed and meaningful eight-word poem, JLR. I really liked the way you described the approach to end-of-life concerns, calling it "death's unknown rivers," and I thought the word "quivers" was a genius word choice. It says so much about the speaker's uncertainty and fear of the unknown. Not everyone can make a meaningful eight-word poem that also rhymes, but you've done a splendid job of it. Good luck in this contest. You have a great entry. MM
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2021
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I would have to say this is a very well-constructed and meaningful eight-word poem, JLR. I really liked the way you described the approach to end-of-life concerns, calling it "death's unknown rivers," and I thought the word "quivers" was a genius word choice. It says so much about the speaker's uncertainty and fear of the unknown. Not everyone can make a meaningful eight-word poem that also rhymes, but you've done a splendid job of it. Good luck in this contest. You have a great entry. MM
Comment Written 30-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2021
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Thank you Miss Meri, I have enjoyed the variety of comments that these eights words evoked. I appreciate the good wishes 🙏🙏🎶
Comment from Aprelle Johnson
Poetry of life and death is very normal and wrote about often, one might think this would make me tired of reading them but on the contrary. I love reading poems like these and even though it is short, I enjoy the unknowingness of death and the expectations of life.
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2021
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Poetry of life and death is very normal and wrote about often, one might think this would make me tired of reading them but on the contrary. I love reading poems like these and even though it is short, I enjoy the unknowingness of death and the expectations of life.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2021
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Thank you Aprelle! We, everyone has a first and last breath in our lifetimes, it?s how we live, love, laugh and pray in between that provides a sum total of our end times.
Comment from Earl Corp
I have to give a six star rating to anybody that can write an eight word poem and make it rhyme. Kudos to you. Good luck in the contest. Have a blessed holiday season. Stay safe and stay healthy.
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2021
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I have to give a six star rating to anybody that can write an eight word poem and make it rhyme. Kudos to you. Good luck in the contest. Have a blessed holiday season. Stay safe and stay healthy.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2021
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Earl, thank you so much🎶🎶👍 Good tidings to you and yours also.
Comment from Melodie Michelle
Excellent poem for the 8 words or less poem contest! The poem reads well and makes sense! A lot of short poems do not;-)
Thanks so much for sharing and many blessings to you and your family;-)
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2021
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Excellent poem for the 8 words or less poem contest! The poem reads well and makes sense! A lot of short poems do not;-)
Thanks so much for sharing and many blessings to you and your family;-)
Comment Written 30-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2021
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Thanks Melodie Michelle, I sure appreciate it.
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