Left To the Elements
2,10,2 poem8 total reviews
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello,
Your entry for the 2-10-2 writing prompt contest is pretty good. I like the reference to trees and season.
Good syllables count but the connection between lines can be improved.
Good luck in the contest.
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Hello,
Your entry for the 2-10-2 writing prompt contest is pretty good. I like the reference to trees and season.
Good syllables count but the connection between lines can be improved.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2021
Comment from SimianSavant
A visceral, gorgeously contrasted picture that pairs as equal partner with your prose. Nice work. Just an idea: what if you connected the last word more to the middle line? Since you are already ending with "until", a deliberately hanging word, what if you changed it to: *til it's*
And then you would have a full sentence.
Thanks for the lovely read and good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2021
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A visceral, gorgeously contrasted picture that pairs as equal partner with your prose. Nice work. Just an idea: what if you connected the last word more to the middle line? Since you are already ending with "until", a deliberately hanging word, what if you changed it to: *til it's*
And then you would have a full sentence.
Thanks for the lovely read and good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 30-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2021
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Thanks for the review and suggestion. Poem now changed.
Comment from Tina Crute
This is such a dramatic presentation, to me, because it details the feelings of the cold, bare trees. There is a lot of meaning under this, as it begs the reader to consider what other things Mother Nature dresses.
Well done!
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2021
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This is such a dramatic presentation, to me, because it details the feelings of the cold, bare trees. There is a lot of meaning under this, as it begs the reader to consider what other things Mother Nature dresses.
Well done!
Comment Written 30-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2021
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Thanks very much for your review.
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You are very welcome!
Tina
Comment from E. Denison
An interesting take on nature here, mystery writer. You do an excellent job of making impactful statements with only a few words. This poem appears to meet all the requirements of the contest and has a captivating image paired with it, which really catches the reader's attention. Well done - good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2021
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An interesting take on nature here, mystery writer. You do an excellent job of making impactful statements with only a few words. This poem appears to meet all the requirements of the contest and has a captivating image paired with it, which really catches the reader's attention. Well done - good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2021
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Thanks very much for your review.
Comment from Jumbo J
Hi,
great presentation, both in words and imagery.
Well done, and a definite contender in this contest me thinks.
In conjures up some interesting views in one's mind.
With our thoughts we create...
nature's covering.
Kind regards,
James.
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2021
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Hi,
great presentation, both in words and imagery.
Well done, and a definite contender in this contest me thinks.
In conjures up some interesting views in one's mind.
With our thoughts we create...
nature's covering.
Kind regards,
James.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2021
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Thanks for your review. Glad you enjoyed.
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My pleasure... and yes i did.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This General Poetry, 2-10-2 writing prompt entry, speaks today's naked states of the trees that signs change in season to redress the trees; well said, well done, thanks 4 sharing this, write more, fast, time is limited, I, DR, wrote 114 books, R 123600/N21. ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2021
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This General Poetry, 2-10-2 writing prompt entry, speaks today's naked states of the trees that signs change in season to redress the trees; well said, well done, thanks 4 sharing this, write more, fast, time is limited, I, DR, wrote 114 books, R 123600/N21. ALCREATOR
Comment Written 29-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2021
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Thanks for your review. Glad you enjoyed.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
The trees undergo such a transformation in the winter and I hate seeing them undressed as they look so pretty when they have leaves and I mourn for them, a fine 2-10-2 poem, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2021
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The trees undergo such a transformation in the winter and I hate seeing them undressed as they look so pretty when they have leaves and I mourn for them, a fine 2-10-2 poem, love Dolly x
Comment Written 28-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2021
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Thanks for your review. Glad you enjoyed.
Comment from zanya
Great use of the prompt here with effective use of language and imagery and the sentiments are so seasonal at this time - great visual to illustrate -thanks for sharing
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2021
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Great use of the prompt here with effective use of language and imagery and the sentiments are so seasonal at this time - great visual to illustrate -thanks for sharing
Comment Written 28-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2021
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Thanks for your review. Glad you enjoyed.