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Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "The Foreshadowing"Adventures around & upon a hill
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Comment from Mary Shifman
Well, I can certainly sympathize with them. Several years ago we were driving to WV and trying to avoid the big cities such as NYC. We took the wrong exit and it led us right into NYC and we had a time finding out way back to the interstate in the direction we wanted. I can't imagine if we had been driving on the right side of the car and in a different direction, too.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2022
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Well, I can certainly sympathize with them. Several years ago we were driving to WV and trying to avoid the big cities such as NYC. We took the wrong exit and it led us right into NYC and we had a time finding out way back to the interstate in the direction we wanted. I can't imagine if we had been driving on the right side of the car and in a different direction, too.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2022
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Thank you for your enthusiastic review. What a nightmare, driving right into NYC. Unknown areas certainly can be stressful. I had clear direction how to get to my friends in Brooklyn. The problem was the name of my chosemn road was on the other side of the underpass, so unless you l knew that, you would never find that street. I drove looking for the name & of course, it was raining. I called (payphone)my friend & told her the name of the street I'd come to & she said I needed to get out of there immediately. So I turned around & some how I found my way back to the road I originally needed.
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You are welcome. I really hate driving someplace I haven't been before especially when it isn't well marked.
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***hugs***
Comment from aryr
Wow, this was interesting Liz. I am really enjoyed the adventures of Madeline and Cordelia. Poor Cordelia definitely should not a navigator, I am sorry but she couldn't read 'Up from Down', lol. Oh the poor guys never did get their meal as promised, bad flying weather took care of that. Very well done and greatly enjoyed, I look forward to the next continuation chapter.
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2021
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Wow, this was interesting Liz. I am really enjoyed the adventures of Madeline and Cordelia. Poor Cordelia definitely should not a navigator, I am sorry but she couldn't read 'Up from Down', lol. Oh the poor guys never did get their meal as promised, bad flying weather took care of that. Very well done and greatly enjoyed, I look forward to the next continuation chapter.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2021
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Thank you for your endearing review. I'm glad you are enjoying this. Much of this is based on fact. It was horrible, fortunately wasn't driving, but feeling quite helpless. There is only one part of this whole story that did not happen when 3 of us went to England.
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Wow, that is amazing. I really do look forward to reading more. You are so very welcome Liz.
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Comment from Melodie Michelle
Excellent story my friend! The characters interact nicely together and the storyline is interesting and held my attention;-)
Thanks for sharing and may God bless you and your family;-)
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2021
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Excellent story my friend! The characters interact nicely together and the storyline is interesting and held my attention;-)
Thanks for sharing and may God bless you and your family;-)
Comment Written 30-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2021
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Thank you for your endearing review. I appreciate. Blessings afloat for you & yours
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Check out my EROTICA poetry! I think you will like it;-)
Hugs;-)
Comment from Jay Squires
I like the concept of this story, Liz. It has something of the flavor of the last novel: two girls on their own getting into one trouble and out of it and into another.
Here are some notes of what I read:
With Madeline as the narrator we are following her and her harpist friend, Cordelia. Cordelia has invited Madeline to accompany her to where she is having her harp therapist course. [Why do you have the same thing in this paragraph that you have in the preceding one? I don't believe that's what you intended.]
I noticed there is a lot of digression going on in the narrative. A little of it is good. It adds to the warmth of the narrator's voice. Occasionally it goes overboard, like when you mentioned getting lost driving in the rain: "I do not like driving in the rain. I got terribly lost driving by myself in New York, headed for Brooklyn. My friend Marty said I was in an area where I could have gotten my face ripped off." You digressed from England to New York, then to a friend, Marty. It just got very complicated.
Overall, though, I enjoyed today's adventure, and the broader concept of the narrator following a friend who uses her harp in a most mysterious fashion. I think there'll be some magic ahead.
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2021
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I like the concept of this story, Liz. It has something of the flavor of the last novel: two girls on their own getting into one trouble and out of it and into another.
Here are some notes of what I read:
With Madeline as the narrator we are following her and her harpist friend, Cordelia. Cordelia has invited Madeline to accompany her to where she is having her harp therapist course. [Why do you have the same thing in this paragraph that you have in the preceding one? I don't believe that's what you intended.]
I noticed there is a lot of digression going on in the narrative. A little of it is good. It adds to the warmth of the narrator's voice. Occasionally it goes overboard, like when you mentioned getting lost driving in the rain: "I do not like driving in the rain. I got terribly lost driving by myself in New York, headed for Brooklyn. My friend Marty said I was in an area where I could have gotten my face ripped off." You digressed from England to New York, then to a friend, Marty. It just got very complicated.
Overall, though, I enjoyed today's adventure, and the broader concept of the narrator following a friend who uses her harp in a most mysterious fashion. I think there'll be some magic ahead.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2021
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Thank you for your involved review. The first paragraph was supposed to be separate from the rest. Readers here want a little introduction. So we do risk repetition. The deviation contributes to the understanding the personality of the characters. There will be more to come.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
It sounds like they had a typical trip and then discovered they couldn't read a map or drive on the wrong side of the road. That's pretty much the way it went for us. When travelling a sense of humor helps, although smelling their meals burning up would be disaster to me. Your story was well edited and very interesting.
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2021
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It sounds like they had a typical trip and then discovered they couldn't read a map or drive on the wrong side of the road. That's pretty much the way it went for us. When travelling a sense of humor helps, although smelling their meals burning up would be disaster to me. Your story was well edited and very interesting.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2021
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Thank you for your involved review. I sorry you had to identify with similar chaos.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Your chapter in the book The Tor??
The Foreshadowing
Liz O'Neill
You had me laughing when you were in fear of what side of the road you should drive
Your whole experience was fun to read. Well done.
Gert
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2021
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Your chapter in the book The Tor??
The Foreshadowing
Liz O'Neill
You had me laughing when you were in fear of what side of the road you should drive
Your whole experience was fun to read. Well done.
Gert
Comment Written 27-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2021
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Thank you for your amused & amusing review
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Liz O'Neill
You are most welcome
Gert
Comment from Tina Crute
Ok...so those girls are braver than I am! The scenario of different driving rules, steering wheels, in the rain, not knowing where you are going in the dark...reminds me of those stories my mom used to tell... We had to walk to school, miles and miles, in the dark, in the snow, barefoot,lol...
I hope they get where they need to go without any mishaps, but somehow I think there will be some! You have me intrigued!
Tina
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2021
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Ok...so those girls are braver than I am! The scenario of different driving rules, steering wheels, in the rain, not knowing where you are going in the dark...reminds me of those stories my mom used to tell... We had to walk to school, miles and miles, in the dark, in the snow, barefoot,lol...
I hope they get where they need to go without any mishaps, but somehow I think there will be some! You have me intrigued!
Tina
Comment Written 27-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2021
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Thank you for your involved & amusing review.
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Welcome!
Tina
Comment from Judy Lawless
This is a fun chapter to read, Liz. I know how scary and frustrating it must have been at the time, but in the telling it's quite humourous. I'll be waiting to see how long it took them to reach their destination.
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2021
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This is a fun chapter to read, Liz. I know how scary and frustrating it must have been at the time, but in the telling it's quite humourous. I'll be waiting to see how long it took them to reach their destination.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2021
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Thank you for your amused review. I just thought, if you've ever seen It's a Mad Mad Mad World, we could have that music playing for this scene...lol
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I have, Liz, and you could be right! Lol
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***Bwaaa***
Comment from country ranch writer
Oh my gosh it is unsettling to find out afteralmyou was going the wrong. At.mwhen you are in a strange town and country Things have a way of becoming confusing.Direction to get going the right might be a hasselmfor the laungemisnt like ours.
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2021
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Oh my gosh it is unsettling to find out afteralmyou was going the wrong. At.mwhen you are in a strange town and country Things have a way of becoming confusing.Direction to get going the right might be a hasselmfor the laungemisnt like ours.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2021
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Thank you for your involved review. I'm sure many of us have missed the turn repeatedly.
I just thought, if you've ever seen It's a Mad Mad Mad World, we could have that music playing for this scene...lol
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Comment from country ranch writer
Oh my gosh it is unsettling to find out afteralmyou was going the wrong. At.mwhen you are in a strange town and country Things have a way of becoming confusing.Direction to get going the right might be a hasselmfor the laungemisnt like ours.
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reply by the author on 27-Nov-2021
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Oh my gosh it is unsettling to find out afteralmyou was going the wrong. At.mwhen you are in a strange town and country Things have a way of becoming confusing.Direction to get going the right might be a hasselmfor the laungemisnt like ours.
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Comment Written 27-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2021
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I just thought, if you've ever seen It's a Mad Mad Mad World, we could have that music playing for this scene...lol
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Smile but never seen it.
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Smile but never seen it.
