Life is All About Change
My younger brother leaves Tioga to join the military36 total reviews
Comment from K.L. Rockquemore
I enjoyed this true family story. This is well written and well presented. Your descriptive writing painted clear images of the scenes as they played out. Well done, thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2022
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I enjoyed this true family story. This is well written and well presented. Your descriptive writing painted clear images of the scenes as they played out. Well done, thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2022
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Thanks for your time in reading and commenting on my story. I appreciate your encouraging review. ann
Comment from joann r romei
I can feel the pain for you and your brother, did he have some sort of learning disability, back then no one understood there are different ways to learn, and most kids just gave up out of frustration. very sad
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2022
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I can feel the pain for you and your brother, did he have some sort of learning disability, back then no one understood there are different ways to learn, and most kids just gave up out of frustration. very sad
Comment Written 23-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2022
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Thanks for reading and commenting on my story. ann
Comment from LJbutterfly
This is great storytelling, from the beginning when you waved goodbye, to the ending when your brother drove away. I especially liked the way you started the story by putting the reader into the main event, and then gave back story to let the reader know what led up to you brother waving farewell. The sequence was perfect, and dialogue authentic. I wish you the best in the contest.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2022
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This is great storytelling, from the beginning when you waved goodbye, to the ending when your brother drove away. I especially liked the way you started the story by putting the reader into the main event, and then gave back story to let the reader know what led up to you brother waving farewell. The sequence was perfect, and dialogue authentic. I wish you the best in the contest.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2022
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Thanks so much!! I will need some luck -- the contest has some really good entries. ann
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Good story. Well written. Good work.
You write a convincing relationship and paint a realistic picture. I can see Dad making his decision.
"Bye, John. I love you. Please write. Don't forget to write every day." I yelled and waved until the car was out of sight. John leaned out the back window to return my wave.
"Don't worry, Olevia." He shouted. - a comma after Olevia would work better.
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2022
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Good story. Well written. Good work.
You write a convincing relationship and paint a realistic picture. I can see Dad making his decision.
"Bye, John. I love you. Please write. Don't forget to write every day." I yelled and waved until the car was out of sight. John leaned out the back window to return my wave.
"Don't worry, Olevia." He shouted. - a comma after Olevia would work better.
Best wishes.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2022
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I will repair the spag and thanks for noting it! I appreciate your time in reading and commenting. ann
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
It can be sad looking back at how our life fragments and people we were very close to have gone on with their life and we lose touch, I can identify with your story here, an entertaining write, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2022
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It can be sad looking back at how our life fragments and people we were very close to have gone on with their life and we lose touch, I can identify with your story here, an entertaining write, love Dolly x
Comment Written 22-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2022
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Thanks so much for reading and reviewing. I'm blessed in that my brother and I re-connected and remain close through this day. ann
Comment from the13thpoet
Hello Annmuma a wonderful Wednesday to you. I hope this finds you well.
I liked your Non-fiction writing contest entry it was a good read. Good job and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2022
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Hello Annmuma a wonderful Wednesday to you. I hope this finds you well.
I liked your Non-fiction writing contest entry it was a good read. Good job and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2022
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I appreciate your reading my work. Would you be kind enough to tell me what caused it to be a 4 rating, good, rather than a 5 rating, excellent? I have gotten only 5's and 6's on this piece and I am always looking to improve. Was it content, presentation, grammar or what shortcoming did it have Thanks so much for your time. ann
Comment from prettybluebirds
This is an interesting family story. It is too bad John didn't finish high school. The world is tough and not education makes it tougher. Did john actually enlist? Your story is nicely done and I wish you a ton of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2021
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This is an interesting family story. It is too bad John didn't finish high school. The world is tough and not education makes it tougher. Did john actually enlist? Your story is nicely done and I wish you a ton of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2021
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Thank you for reading and commenting. John did enlist and he got his GED. I hope you read the next chapter - My Brother is Back in Town. We all have our individual paths to follow and they are unique to us. John continues to follow his. Appreciate your comments. ann
Comment from royowen
It's tough when siblings are so close, it does my old heart good to see my daughters relate so well, to sit with each other and not say a word, but everything is right with the world, my grands are so fortunate to have mums like that, and dads of course. Beautifully written my friend, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2021
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It's tough when siblings are so close, it does my old heart good to see my daughters relate so well, to sit with each other and not say a word, but everything is right with the world, my grands are so fortunate to have mums like that, and dads of course. Beautifully written my friend, blessings Roy
Comment Written 24-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2021
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Thank you for the kind words. I couldn't agree more -- family relationships that go deep are valuable and especially so as we grow older and need those people in our lives who really know us and still love us! ann
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You?re so right,
Comment from Soledadpaz
What an upheaval for you. To lose your closest friend and confidant plus your sister and her family. To be left alone, as it were, even though you had your father and stepmother, it's not the same.
Your writing flows so smoothly and you have a knack for unique phrasing. It's absolutely a pleasure to read your stories.
Sol
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2021
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What an upheaval for you. To lose your closest friend and confidant plus your sister and her family. To be left alone, as it were, even though you had your father and stepmother, it's not the same.
Your writing flows so smoothly and you have a knack for unique phrasing. It's absolutely a pleasure to read your stories.
Sol
Comment Written 24-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2021
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I am so glad you enjoy my work. I enjoy reliving those memories! I hope you will read 'My Brother Comes Home' as a follow up to Life is All About Change. thanks again. I appreciate you. ann
Comment from Alaskastory
"Life is All About Change" gives a clear understanding as you so vividly share details to tell about how your 'younger brother leaves Tioga to join the military'. I'm sure every reader is anxious to know what happens to him and especially Olevia next. So interesting to read.
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2021
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"Life is All About Change" gives a clear understanding as you so vividly share details to tell about how your 'younger brother leaves Tioga to join the military'. I'm sure every reader is anxious to know what happens to him and especially Olevia next. So interesting to read.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2021
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More stories to come! Thank you for reading and commenting. ann
