I stopped Wearing It!
Not a anti-mask story.17 total reviews
Comment from prettybluebirds
This story is short and to the point. It's well-written, too, and I didn't spot any errors. The artwork is more than perfect for the subject of your writing. This one should do nicely in the contest. I wish you tons of luck.
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2021
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This story is short and to the point. It's well-written, too, and I didn't spot any errors. The artwork is more than perfect for the subject of your writing. This one should do nicely in the contest. I wish you tons of luck.
Comment Written 20-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2021
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Thank you.
Comment from SimianSavant
A clever figurative take on "mask" to hint at a harrowing story. I don't think the assault ratios stated on that pic are that high in the US, unless the definition of "assault" has changed. In some parts of the world though, those stats very might be true. In poor areas, slums, they may be even higher. If you have personally experienced this sort of abuse I am very sorry to hear of it, and hope you have been able to get help and healing with people you can trust. Thank you for the stark read. -H
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2021
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A clever figurative take on "mask" to hint at a harrowing story. I don't think the assault ratios stated on that pic are that high in the US, unless the definition of "assault" has changed. In some parts of the world though, those stats very might be true. In poor areas, slums, they may be even higher. If you have personally experienced this sort of abuse I am very sorry to hear of it, and hope you have been able to get help and healing with people you can trust. Thank you for the stark read. -H
Comment Written 20-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2021
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Thank you for reviewing and commenting I appreciate it.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is a good brief story, as you note, about a problem that happens to too many children. People would rather not believe it than accept that someone they know is an abuser and has abused a child. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2021
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This is a good brief story, as you note, about a problem that happens to too many children. People would rather not believe it than accept that someone they know is an abuser and has abused a child. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 19-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2021
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Thanks.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is a good brief story, as you note, about a problem that happens to too many children. People would rather not believe it than accept that someone they know is an abuser and has abused a child. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2021
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This is a good brief story, as you note, about a problem that happens to too many children. People would rather not believe it than accept that someone they know is an abuser and has abused a child. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 19-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2021
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Thanks for your review.
Comment from royowen
I do think that girls can gain advantage of accusation, but I think that one would know if it was true or not, I know if my girls had said it, it would certainly have been true, I built as many protective walls around as I could, I think child abuse, sexual or otherwise is the most detestable of betrayals. Well done, good luck, beautifully written, blessings
Typo : star(r)ing at me...
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2021
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I do think that girls can gain advantage of accusation, but I think that one would know if it was true or not, I know if my girls had said it, it would certainly have been true, I built as many protective walls around as I could, I think child abuse, sexual or otherwise is the most detestable of betrayals. Well done, good luck, beautifully written, blessings
Typo : star(r)ing at me...
Comment Written 19-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2021
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Thank you very much appreciate the review and help.
Comment from LisaMay
I'm pleased you went down a different track for your story, to be original and also to carry your strong message about sexual abuse, especially of children, who are then judged and disbelieved. We often mask our pain but for some people everything shows on their faces.
A couple of punctuation suggestions:
I told them everything (add a dash here to show the 2 parts of the sentence) the whole painful truth.
I told them everything - the whole painful truth.
These people were my closest confidants, (add comma) but their eyes were starring (staring) at me in such a judgemental way. "You are such a drama Queen,(add comma)" they said.
I was just a young girl when it happened - (add dash to separate the 2 parts) why would I lie?
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reply by the author on 19-Nov-2021
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I'm pleased you went down a different track for your story, to be original and also to carry your strong message about sexual abuse, especially of children, who are then judged and disbelieved. We often mask our pain but for some people everything shows on their faces.
A couple of punctuation suggestions:
I told them everything (add a dash here to show the 2 parts of the sentence) the whole painful truth.
I told them everything - the whole painful truth.
These people were my closest confidants, (add comma) but their eyes were starring (staring) at me in such a judgemental way. "You are such a drama Queen,(add comma)" they said.
I was just a young girl when it happened - (add dash to separate the 2 parts) why would I lie?
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Comment Written 19-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2021
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Thank you for your helpful review I am changing it now ^_^
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Remember to change 'starring' to 'staring' as well. The word only needs one 'r' . :))
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Thank You done ^_^
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Should probably capitalize the "d" in "drama".
Tough when you are a child and no one believes you, especially in a situation like this one.
Should be a stong entry in this contest.
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reply by the author on 19-Nov-2021
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Should probably capitalize the "d" in "drama".
Tough when you are a child and no one believes you, especially in a situation like this one.
Should be a stong entry in this contest.
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Comment Written 19-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2021
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Thank you for reviewing and the suggestion, much appreciated.
