Taking the Blame
a loop poem20 total reviews
Comment from Spitfire
Very clever. You played by the rules, but didn't forget to add poetic devices such as alliteration and end rhyme and metaphor. How sweet of the narrator to take all the blame and suffer the consequences.
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2021
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Very clever. You played by the rules, but didn't forget to add poetic devices such as alliteration and end rhyme and metaphor. How sweet of the narrator to take all the blame and suffer the consequences.
Comment Written 19-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2021
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Thank you, Shari
Comment from Mary Vigasin
An Excellent and skillful loop poetry submission.
Rather than highlight the loop as the point of your poem, you let the words carry through to take responsibility and blame to make the loop seems effortless.
Good luck in the contest.
Best wishes,
Mary
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2021
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An Excellent and skillful loop poetry submission.
Rather than highlight the loop as the point of your poem, you let the words carry through to take responsibility and blame to make the loop seems effortless.
Good luck in the contest.
Best wishes,
Mary
Comment Written 19-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2021
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Thank you, Mary
Comment from Wendy G
Bill, this is very skilfully done, and the Loop poem suits your theme perfectly. Taking blame and responsibility for another's pain is a big deal, and you have likened it to being responsible for the way you single-handedly make decisions (and wear the cost) in a card game, like the game of life. A clever analogy. Best wishes for your entry in the Loop contest.
Wendy
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2021
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Bill, this is very skilfully done, and the Loop poem suits your theme perfectly. Taking blame and responsibility for another's pain is a big deal, and you have likened it to being responsible for the way you single-handedly make decisions (and wear the cost) in a card game, like the game of life. A clever analogy. Best wishes for your entry in the Loop contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 19-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2021
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Thank you, Wendy, for the kind and encouraging review. Bill
Comment from Mary Kay Bonfante
This Loop poem is very well written, and is also intriguing, leading the reader to speculate as to what the hurts were that the author felt responsible to bear the blame for, through his poem. This is in recognition of the fact that the situation itself may be imaginary; yet the truth of the matter resides in the mind of the author.
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2021
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This Loop poem is very well written, and is also intriguing, leading the reader to speculate as to what the hurts were that the author felt responsible to bear the blame for, through his poem. This is in recognition of the fact that the situation itself may be imaginary; yet the truth of the matter resides in the mind of the author.
Comment Written 19-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2021
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Thank you, Mary Kay, for the positive review. Bill
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You're very welcome, Bill. I hope you and the Mrs. are feeling better. May God bless you and protect you.
- Mary Kay
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
' Taking the Blame ' , is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. Good luck with the contest. My fingers are crossed for you!
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2021
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' Taking the Blame ' , is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. Good luck with the contest. My fingers are crossed for you!
Comment Written 19-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2021
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Thank you, Duchess, for the great review. Bill
Comment from Jesse James Doty
This is an excellent loop poem! It speaks of dealing cards metaphorically and I have yet to play a hand of cards that I have bet on so, it is hard for me to relate. Yet I wish you all the best for the loop poem contest and I hope you win, winner takes home all!
Jesse
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2021
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This is an excellent loop poem! It speaks of dealing cards metaphorically and I have yet to play a hand of cards that I have bet on so, it is hard for me to relate. Yet I wish you all the best for the loop poem contest and I hope you win, winner takes home all!
Jesse
Comment Written 19-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2021
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Thank you, Jesse, for giving this a look. Bill
Comment from Gert sherwood
Bill Schott yourloop poem
Taking the Blame
I like your Loop Poem. I like the quote
When we assign blame we are pointing the finger to who or what is responsible for a fault or for a wrong doing. We are trying to make others accountable. Blaming does not solve a problem it usually only makes people defensive."
Catherine Pulsifer
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2021
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Bill Schott yourloop poem
Taking the Blame
I like your Loop Poem. I like the quote
When we assign blame we are pointing the finger to who or what is responsible for a fault or for a wrong doing. We are trying to make others accountable. Blaming does not solve a problem it usually only makes people defensive."
Catherine Pulsifer
Comment Written 18-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2021
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Thanks, Gert
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You are welcome Bill
Gert
Comment from damommy
Very good loop poem. It made perfect sense. You made the "loops" seem effortless. It does one's conscience good to take the blame even when it's not deserved. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2021
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Very good loop poem. It made perfect sense. You made the "loops" seem effortless. It does one's conscience good to take the blame even when it's not deserved. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2021
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Thank you, Yvonne
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This is an excellent loop poem, where you have managed to have certain of the repetitions being alternative meanings of the same word (mind and resolved in particular stand out for this) - I am a sucker for this additional twist in the loop (once managed to do it for every repetition).
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2021
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This is an excellent loop poem, where you have managed to have certain of the repetitions being alternative meanings of the same word (mind and resolved in particular stand out for this) - I am a sucker for this additional twist in the loop (once managed to do it for every repetition).
Comment Written 18-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2021
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Thank you, Katherine, for the great review. Bill
Comment from Jerome Goldberg
Bill - this is an interesting loop poem that touches on both shared responsibility and gallantry. Or am i reading to much into it? Stay well and enjoy the eclipse tonight - Jerry
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2021
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Bill - this is an interesting loop poem that touches on both shared responsibility and gallantry. Or am i reading to much into it? Stay well and enjoy the eclipse tonight - Jerry
Comment Written 18-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2021
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Thank you, Jerry. Eclipse? Guess I better go take a look.
