Running Blind
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24 total reviews
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Aw, that was so lovely, Sal, not only did the Blind Girl have a sensory vision of the wedding, we had a glorious visual scene, too. Well done, my friend, lovely wedding. I'm still catching up, and will read the rest tomorrow. Bed time now! Warm hugs, my friend. Love Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2021
Aw, that was so lovely, Sal, not only did the Blind Girl have a sensory vision of the wedding, we had a glorious visual scene, too. Well done, my friend, lovely wedding. I'm still catching up, and will read the rest tomorrow. Bed time now! Warm hugs, my friend. Love Sandra xxx
Comment Written 13-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2021
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Thank you for the lovely review and for catching up. It means so much to me. Love and blessings,
Sal XOs
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
good luck in the contest! Your story about marriage is such a keepsake. I will always remember how the beginning of a new life, as man and wife, can either be happy or sad; there are always trials and temptations that occur.
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2021
good luck in the contest! Your story about marriage is such a keepsake. I will always remember how the beginning of a new life, as man and wife, can either be happy or sad; there are always trials and temptations that occur.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2021
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Thank you for the lovely review and kind well wishes. Sending you my best today as always,
Sally XOs
Comment from robyn corum
Sally,
WHAT???? $500 for a wedding that has over 500 attendees? WOWZER! That's pretty awesome -- errr... --or horrifying. I'm not sure which. I'll have to get back to you. *smile*
Another well-written chapter - but of course, I'm gonna sling some stuff at you for consideration. Hope that's okay! haha
1.) "I do."
--> actually the answer to those questions would be 'I will'. Maybe consider phrasing it like:
--> Do you promise/commit to love her, comfort her, honor, and keep her in sickness and in health...
3.) Will you love her, comfort her, honor, and keep her in sickness and in health,
--> no comma after 'honor' - honor and keep her go together
3.) "A mystery, and picture of Christ and His church,"
--> curious here - what does the 'mystery' part mean?
4.) Also - I'm sorry but I have some pretty bad news. It seems that every single chapter you've posted of this novel has also posted straight to the Internet. Evidently you have your 'sharing' option button turned to 'off'. This means that instead of anyone having to BUY your book, it's there for free, every word, online. All you - or anyone else - has to do is Google 'Running Blind' and/or 'Sally Law'. If you're good with that, no harm, no foul. But I wanted to mention it, jic.
Thanks!
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2021
Sally,
WHAT???? $500 for a wedding that has over 500 attendees? WOWZER! That's pretty awesome -- errr... --or horrifying. I'm not sure which. I'll have to get back to you. *smile*
Another well-written chapter - but of course, I'm gonna sling some stuff at you for consideration. Hope that's okay! haha
1.) "I do."
--> actually the answer to those questions would be 'I will'. Maybe consider phrasing it like:
--> Do you promise/commit to love her, comfort her, honor, and keep her in sickness and in health...
3.) Will you love her, comfort her, honor, and keep her in sickness and in health,
--> no comma after 'honor' - honor and keep her go together
3.) "A mystery, and picture of Christ and His church,"
--> curious here - what does the 'mystery' part mean?
4.) Also - I'm sorry but I have some pretty bad news. It seems that every single chapter you've posted of this novel has also posted straight to the Internet. Evidently you have your 'sharing' option button turned to 'off'. This means that instead of anyone having to BUY your book, it's there for free, every word, online. All you - or anyone else - has to do is Google 'Running Blind' and/or 'Sally Law'. If you're good with that, no harm, no foul. But I wanted to mention it, jic.
Thanks!
Comment Written 24-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2021
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Thank you for the excellent review and comment so. This is true, $500. Possibly a miracle. I know my dress was. Husbands
?31"For this reason a man will leave his father and mother and be united to his wife, and the two will become one flesh." 32This mystery is profound, but I am speaking about Christ and the church.
The mystery: Nevertheless, let each one of you also must love his wife as he loves himself, and the wife must respect her husband.?
I do stands.
Sending you my best today as always,
Sally XOs...
Comment from BethShelby
I loved the wedding chapter. I just went through the marriage of my son two weeks ago and of course you can't read about a wedding without remembering your own. I had a limited but for Don the sky was the limit. I anxiously awaiting more of you mystery/crime story.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2021
I loved the wedding chapter. I just went through the marriage of my son two weeks ago and of course you can't read about a wedding without remembering your own. I had a limited but for Don the sky was the limit. I anxiously awaiting more of you mystery/crime story.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2021
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Thank you so much, dear Beth. I have a lot of non-published romance stories. I thought I'd take a little longer and add this. I'm glad to please. Sending you my best today as always and Happy Thanksgiving!
Sal XOs...
Comment from Liz O'Neill
Reflecting on past times can certainly bring mixed emotions: "I took a few minutes to reflect on my own wedding day" This is so hopeful to hear: "I wouldn't trade our wedding day for anything." I love your touch of humor: "For the life of me, I couldn't imagine Miles line dancing. My brain rejected the very thought." This little detail is exceptional. It will definitely draw the reader in: "I understand we have canine ring bearers." Nicely done.
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2021
Reflecting on past times can certainly bring mixed emotions: "I took a few minutes to reflect on my own wedding day" This is so hopeful to hear: "I wouldn't trade our wedding day for anything." I love your touch of humor: "For the life of me, I couldn't imagine Miles line dancing. My brain rejected the very thought." This little detail is exceptional. It will definitely draw the reader in: "I understand we have canine ring bearers." Nicely done.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2021
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Thank you so much, dear Liz! Sal XOs
Comment from Mary Kay Bonfante
This is such a lovely chapter in your book. It's a beautiful wedding between Suzy and Miles -- and I hope I got it right this time! I enjoyed your sense of humor: reading about Bobbi Jo's Salon and Chainsaw Repair, followed by your statement that you felt like some kind of frosted confection -- that was hilarious. I enjoyed that.
My suggested revisions:
"I do."
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"I will."
[For both the bride's and the groom's response, unless you're going to rephrase the minister's questions to both.]
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I was actually quite curious about whether the details described about your wedding to Jackson matched the real event, and I'm so happy to know that they did! I think it's so completely romantic, and it's awesome that you could see then, and can remember all of those sweet details. It's also wonderful that your guests were so generous and showered you with money for a great honeymoon! But we will let the rest of that story be something for you to cherish between yourselves.
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2021
This is such a lovely chapter in your book. It's a beautiful wedding between Suzy and Miles -- and I hope I got it right this time! I enjoyed your sense of humor: reading about Bobbi Jo's Salon and Chainsaw Repair, followed by your statement that you felt like some kind of frosted confection -- that was hilarious. I enjoyed that.
My suggested revisions:
"I do."
-->
"I will."
[For both the bride's and the groom's response, unless you're going to rephrase the minister's questions to both.]
***
I was actually quite curious about whether the details described about your wedding to Jackson matched the real event, and I'm so happy to know that they did! I think it's so completely romantic, and it's awesome that you could see then, and can remember all of those sweet details. It's also wonderful that your guests were so generous and showered you with money for a great honeymoon! But we will let the rest of that story be something for you to cherish between yourselves.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2021
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Thank you for the lovely review and starry gift, it is always so appreciated. These are the vows we typically use here in the south, and the ?I dos? as well. We don?t say ?I will? down here. Jackson and I said I do. I took this from the traditional Methodist wedding vows ceremony along with the response. I put in their names, everything else is the same.
Sending you my best today as always,
Sal XOs
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Sally,
You set this wedding up perfectly, and I just have to share this song by Phil Keaggy. It would cap a wonderful day. I'm guessing you were describing your own wedding. The song is called "The Two Of You" from 1983. Phil recently retired. He is an extraordinary guitarist, singer, and songwriter. Please enjoy.
https://youtu.be/10aIViSH6RY
Love and Blessings,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2021
Hi Sally,
You set this wedding up perfectly, and I just have to share this song by Phil Keaggy. It would cap a wonderful day. I'm guessing you were describing your own wedding. The song is called "The Two Of You" from 1983. Phil recently retired. He is an extraordinary guitarist, singer, and songwriter. Please enjoy.
https://youtu.be/10aIViSH6RY
Love and Blessings,
Kimbob
Comment Written 22-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2021
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Thank you for the lovely gift of the stars. It means so much. I appreciate the link. I will check it out right now. Sending you my best today as always, dear Kim,
Sal :))
Comment from lyenochka
A lovely wedding scene! And it's natural to reflect on one's own wedding when we attend one. We made our own reception foods the day before. Lol. Life was simpler then. But no matter how it's presented, the main thing is the covenant of love between and man and woman before God. Well told! I loved the bits of humor about the chainsaw repair across from the beauty salon and the "frosted confection" and the line dancing with our favorite Texan witness.
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2021
A lovely wedding scene! And it's natural to reflect on one's own wedding when we attend one. We made our own reception foods the day before. Lol. Life was simpler then. But no matter how it's presented, the main thing is the covenant of love between and man and woman before God. Well told! I loved the bits of humor about the chainsaw repair across from the beauty salon and the "frosted confection" and the line dancing with our favorite Texan witness.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2021
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Thank you so much! Sal XOs
Comment from Tina Crute
I loved this read. Thanks for the rundown of chapter 26, so I could fully enjoy this chapter.. Seems I've missed lots while I've been gone! What stands out to me in your writing is the details you include...for example...you described pinning your hair back...then elaborated on what the looked like and what you fished them out from. And it's not too much detail. It makes it more comfy and personal, telling us things you would tell a girlfriend.Hope that makes sense:) Well done and interesting. Please tell me no man will separate them....
Hugs!
Tina
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021
I loved this read. Thanks for the rundown of chapter 26, so I could fully enjoy this chapter.. Seems I've missed lots while I've been gone! What stands out to me in your writing is the details you include...for example...you described pinning your hair back...then elaborated on what the looked like and what you fished them out from. And it's not too much detail. It makes it more comfy and personal, telling us things you would tell a girlfriend.Hope that makes sense:) Well done and interesting. Please tell me no man will separate them....
Hugs!
Tina
Comment Written 22-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021
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Thank you for the lovely review and for catching up! I feel so blessed. Sending you my best today as always,
Sal XOs
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Sally Law,
Nice piece of Mystery and Crime Fiction beautifully depicting the wedding of Miles and Suzy as well as the writer's own reminiscences; lucid plus perfectly matching the theme phraseology; captivating flow throughout from the very beginning up to the end.
[In spite of my skipping some part of the story, I'm able to swim in the mainstream due to your impressive style of writing.]
Interesting, Indeed!
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021
Hello Sally Law,
Nice piece of Mystery and Crime Fiction beautifully depicting the wedding of Miles and Suzy as well as the writer's own reminiscences; lucid plus perfectly matching the theme phraseology; captivating flow throughout from the very beginning up to the end.
[In spite of my skipping some part of the story, I'm able to swim in the mainstream due to your impressive style of writing.]
Interesting, Indeed!
Comment Written 22-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021
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Thank you for the wonderful review and generous compliments. Both mean so much to me! Blessings for your week, RP! Sal :))
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Sally, Most Welcome!
With best wishes,
~ RP