Grandma Bessie & Thanksgiving
A Family Thanksgiving with cornbread dressing.51 total reviews
Comment from CL Huth
This was a cute little story that I could totally see happen at my granny's house! Thank you for sharing. Good luck in the contest.
Technical thoughts:
- Dialogue needs to be separated by speaker, so here:
I ask her, "Grandma, after being your boyfriend for twenty five years why are marrying him now?" She said, "his wife died three months ago."
'She said' should be a separate paragraph.
There are several instances of this occurring throughout, and it jarred me out of the story for a minute.
And there are some comma issues, but those didn't take me out as hard. If you're interested, let me know. Otherwise, I enjoyed the story.
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reply by the author on 16-Nov-2021
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This was a cute little story that I could totally see happen at my granny's house! Thank you for sharing. Good luck in the contest.
Technical thoughts:
- Dialogue needs to be separated by speaker, so here:
I ask her, "Grandma, after being your boyfriend for twenty five years why are marrying him now?" She said, "his wife died three months ago."
'She said' should be a separate paragraph.
There are several instances of this occurring throughout, and it jarred me out of the story for a minute.
And there are some comma issues, but those didn't take me out as hard. If you're interested, let me know. Otherwise, I enjoyed the story.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2021
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Thank you reading. I apologize for jarring you out of the story. That is just my style. I do appreciate your thoughts.
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Not a problem. Thank you for not yelling at me. :-)
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LOL, you are way too dang educated for me to yell at you. I did try to clean up some it. Thanks again.
Comment from damommy
I can just imagine the tension around that table. Women who cook sometimes get a little testy about things. Up until the 1990s, I made everything from scratch, three times a day. Now, I nuke everything. lol. Looking forward to more stories like this. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2021
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I can just imagine the tension around that table. Women who cook sometimes get a little testy about things. Up until the 1990s, I made everything from scratch, three times a day. Now, I nuke everything. lol. Looking forward to more stories like this. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2021
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Thank You so much for reading!
Comment from Alaskastory
"Grandma Bessie & Thanksgiving" gives an interesting background story that is filled with facts. That is what I really enjoyed most, the build up to telling about the yellow cornmeal dressing. Well done.
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2021
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"Grandma Bessie & Thanksgiving" gives an interesting background story that is filled with facts. That is what I really enjoyed most, the build up to telling about the yellow cornmeal dressing. Well done.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2021
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Thank you very much, I am so glad you "got" what I was trying to do.
Comment from MFerg4084
I really liked your story. I had the pleasure of growing up through the 50's and 60's so I understand the significance of family and Thanksgiving. My mother and her mother-in-law (my Grandma "Maws") got along great until it came to certain dishes served at Thanksgiving. The memories that your story brought back were great. Your story telling was superb.
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2021
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I really liked your story. I had the pleasure of growing up through the 50's and 60's so I understand the significance of family and Thanksgiving. My mother and her mother-in-law (my Grandma "Maws") got along great until it came to certain dishes served at Thanksgiving. The memories that your story brought back were great. Your story telling was superb.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2021
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I am humbled by your rating!
Comment from Anne Johnston
A delightful story about Thanksgiving and your Grandmother, and her cornbread dressing. I especially liked the paragraph: "My mother once told me she was going to the store to get some ingredients for supper. I said, "but mommy, I don't like ingredients!" She explained that there were good ones and bad ones, and she was only going to get the good ones, and I would like them. Turns out she was right."
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2021
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A delightful story about Thanksgiving and your Grandmother, and her cornbread dressing. I especially liked the paragraph: "My mother once told me she was going to the store to get some ingredients for supper. I said, "but mommy, I don't like ingredients!" She explained that there were good ones and bad ones, and she was only going to get the good ones, and I would like them. Turns out she was right."
Comment Written 15-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2021
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Thank you for your review and reading!
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You are very welcome
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Of course, it has to be yellow corn meal without food coloring. One can't live in Texas, or the south, without yellow cornbread and/or dressing. I enjoyed your contest entry. Your did a good job with the back story, too. Your Grandma Bessie sounded like a fun person.
Best wishes in the contest.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2021
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Of course, it has to be yellow corn meal without food coloring. One can't live in Texas, or the south, without yellow cornbread and/or dressing. I enjoyed your contest entry. Your did a good job with the back story, too. Your Grandma Bessie sounded like a fun person.
Best wishes in the contest.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 15-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2021
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Thank you for your kind comments, Bessie was indeed a Hoot!
Comment from Annmuma
I like the 'family' feeling of this story and feel almost as if I know them. You did really well with the characters and making them come alive for the reader. Each of the primary characters got just a little extra personality point i.e. Grandma Bessie's 25 year affair, your mom's middle-child syndrome causing her to want to out do Grandma Bessie (I suffer from the same syndrome) and your dad's enjoyment of a good glass of wine was thrown for good measure.
As an aside, I had an Aunt 'Minnie' and the grandmother who died many years before I was born was also named 'Minnie'. I never knew it was rather common name.
ann
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2021
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I like the 'family' feeling of this story and feel almost as if I know them. You did really well with the characters and making them come alive for the reader. Each of the primary characters got just a little extra personality point i.e. Grandma Bessie's 25 year affair, your mom's middle-child syndrome causing her to want to out do Grandma Bessie (I suffer from the same syndrome) and your dad's enjoyment of a good glass of wine was thrown for good measure.
As an aside, I had an Aunt 'Minnie' and the grandmother who died many years before I was born was also named 'Minnie'. I never knew it was rather common name.
ann
Comment Written 15-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2021
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Thank you!
Comment from moongirlwriter
Very cute. . .never mess with an old (er) lady. . .she'll get even, for sure. People are so funny and the older we get the more set in our ways we get. I've discovered those older folk can really be grumpy and have no filter on what they think or say. . .that's just the way life is. I'm hoping when I get there, I plan for it to totally different. Ya right, but I can hope I'm not that way. :)
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2021
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Very cute. . .never mess with an old (er) lady. . .she'll get even, for sure. People are so funny and the older we get the more set in our ways we get. I've discovered those older folk can really be grumpy and have no filter on what they think or say. . .that's just the way life is. I'm hoping when I get there, I plan for it to totally different. Ya right, but I can hope I'm not that way. :)
Comment Written 15-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2021
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Thank you very much!
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:)
Comment from Modee
Interesting story telling. I love the memories of old times and the households of the years in the past. No TVs on, nobody looking at the phone at the table, fewer interruptions. Good story. :)
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2021
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Interesting story telling. I love the memories of old times and the households of the years in the past. No TVs on, nobody looking at the phone at the table, fewer interruptions. Good story. :)
Comment Written 15-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2021
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Thank You very much!
Comment from Sally Law
Ah, this is great! I loved dressing and as you said, homemade is best.
My mother, bless her sweet heart, was not the best cook in the world. She was single with four kids in the 60s and did the best she could with store bought helps: Pepperridge Farm Stuffing Mix. That was all I knew until a church potluck when I ate the real thing. Heaven exploded in my mouth. I was converted.
Sending you my best today as always, and best wishes for the upcoming contest. In the bag for the win,
Sal XOs...
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2021
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Ah, this is great! I loved dressing and as you said, homemade is best.
My mother, bless her sweet heart, was not the best cook in the world. She was single with four kids in the 60s and did the best she could with store bought helps: Pepperridge Farm Stuffing Mix. That was all I knew until a church potluck when I ate the real thing. Heaven exploded in my mouth. I was converted.
Sending you my best today as always, and best wishes for the upcoming contest. In the bag for the win,
Sal XOs...
Comment Written 15-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2021
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Thank you very much!
