Where is My Desire?
On aging -54 total reviews
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Senyai,
Nice piece of poetry having impressive phraseology, smooth flow throughout from the beginning to the end with lovely rhyming scheme, and beautifully depicting human life - Then and Now!.
4th stanza is particularly noteworthy.
Here, if you don't mind, 'Where' may be replaced by 'When.' I think so.
Good Luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2021
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Hello Senyai,
Nice piece of poetry having impressive phraseology, smooth flow throughout from the beginning to the end with lovely rhyming scheme, and beautifully depicting human life - Then and Now!.
4th stanza is particularly noteworthy.
Here, if you don't mind, 'Where' may be replaced by 'When.' I think so.
Good Luck in the contest.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2021
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Hi, RP Sexena,
Oh, yes? I appreciate the suggestion for the edit. Thanks for such an insightful and astute review and thoughts on my work. So appreciate your time to read and assess as it is always a treat to hear from you!
Have a great Friday and upcoming weekend :))
Senyai
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Hi, RP Sexena,
Oh, yes? I appreciate the suggestion for the edit. Thanks for such an insightful and astute review and thoughts on my work. So appreciate your time to read and assess as it is always a treat to hear from you!
Have a great Friday and upcoming weekend :))
Senyai
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Senyai, Most Welcome!
You are a good poet/writer. Keep writing, please.
With best wishes,
~ RP
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Thank you, sir! ❤️
Comment from PoemsOfDD
This is a great entry for the rhyming poem contest, as well as the photo. I like that it leads the reader down the path of young love and reckless abandon to mellowing with age and gentle embraces. Patience and love over time - holding on to the fragrance of life. Nicely done. A reflective read. Best of luck in the competition and thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2021
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This is a great entry for the rhyming poem contest, as well as the photo. I like that it leads the reader down the path of young love and reckless abandon to mellowing with age and gentle embraces. Patience and love over time - holding on to the fragrance of life. Nicely done. A reflective read. Best of luck in the competition and thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2021
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Hi DD,
Wow, your marvelous review deserves six stars, truly! It far exceeds my poem. I am being serious. Beautifully put and just felt you needed to know that :))
Thank you so very much. You sweet words made me smile from ear to ear.
Your thoughts are most appreciated! Take care.
Have a great Friday and coming weekend,
Senyai
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Senyai, than YOU for your beautiful response to my review. I'll take your virtual six stars. It made me smile :-). Happy weekend back at you. ~DDxo
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You are very welcome :))
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Same to you :))
Comment from Wendy G
A lovely, well-written and reflective poem, looking back at life, and the changing perspectives as one grows older. Very relevant! Beautiful presentation. I liked the information about the Goldenrod in the Author's Notes as well. Best wishes for your entry in the Rhyming Poem contest as well.
Wendy
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2021
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A lovely, well-written and reflective poem, looking back at life, and the changing perspectives as one grows older. Very relevant! Beautiful presentation. I liked the information about the Goldenrod in the Author's Notes as well. Best wishes for your entry in the Rhyming Poem contest as well.
Wendy
Comment Written 11-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2021
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Hi Wendy,
Oh my?bless you for a most delightful review. I am very happy you felt my poem worthy. Your input is always welcome. Thanks for the well wishes, too :))
Always,
Senyai
Comment from Jasmine Girl
This is an interesting poem about aging yet it uses a plant called "Goldenrod" as a metaphor. I found the poem was soothing instead of sad. I like quiet and peaceful life in the old age.
Well done.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2021
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This is an interesting poem about aging yet it uses a plant called "Goldenrod" as a metaphor. I found the poem was soothing instead of sad. I like quiet and peaceful life in the old age.
Well done.
Comment Written 11-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2021
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Hi Lisa,
Yes! Quiet and peaceful is good at any age:)) The "sinking in" wasn?t necessarily being 6 feet under but frolicking up to our ears in blooms by sinking playfully into them. Goldenrod are kind of a tall flower, LOl? Thanks for your insight as I indeed didn?t intend this poem to be sad.
Thank you, Lisa. You were spot on with your interpretation.
All the best :))
Senyai
Comment from amahra
I love your artwork, and though I prefer the city now, I love pictures of rural areas. They always make my heart in memories of my childhood home.
Where the sky was our limit, now our desire is subtle cuddles
Where our emotions were oceans, now are little muddle puddles [love these lines]
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2021
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I love your artwork, and though I prefer the city now, I love pictures of rural areas. They always make my heart in memories of my childhood home.
Where the sky was our limit, now our desire is subtle cuddles
Where our emotions were oceans, now are little muddle puddles [love these lines]
Comment Written 11-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2021
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Hi Amahra,
Oh, thank you kindly for a warm and delightful review and am so pleased you enjoyed my poem! Yes, older age should have some special pleasures without all the angst of youth. You input is always very welcome :))
Have a great Friday,
Senyai
Comment from Raul1
This poem meets the requirements for the contest. It is interesting and unique. I really did enjoy reading your poem. Excellent work! Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2021
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This poem meets the requirements for the contest. It is interesting and unique. I really did enjoy reading your poem. Excellent work! Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 11-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2021
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Hi Raul,
Thanks for a sweet review and well wishes! I am pleased you enjoyed it. Have a great Friday and coming weekend :))
All the best, Raul
Senyai
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a good job with your rhyming contest entry, Senyai. I enjoyed reading it. I like the end rhymes and the touches of internal rhymes. Your well thought out words create great imagery of the times of youth compared to aged years. I like the positive ending that proves age is just a number. The image is beautiful, and your notes informative. Best wishes in the contest.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2021
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You did a good job with your rhyming contest entry, Senyai. I enjoyed reading it. I like the end rhymes and the touches of internal rhymes. Your well thought out words create great imagery of the times of youth compared to aged years. I like the positive ending that proves age is just a number. The image is beautiful, and your notes informative. Best wishes in the contest.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 11-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2021
I may look a bit older but feel a lot younger in my spirit :)) I have one important aspect though, that I really need to improve on and that?s more exercise. Lol.
Thanks for your input, Jan as I am always glad to hear from you.
Happy Friday, Jan :))
Senyai
Comment from nomi338
The passing of time has a way of bringing into perspective things that were cloudy and undetermined when we were children. Most of the things we thought were earth shattering in their supposed importance, are reduced to objects for laughter and ridicule through adult eyes able to clearly see. A soothing cup of tea with an old friend can make the shock of sudden realization much more palatable.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2021
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The passing of time has a way of bringing into perspective things that were cloudy and undetermined when we were children. Most of the things we thought were earth shattering in their supposed importance, are reduced to objects for laughter and ridicule through adult eyes able to clearly see. A soothing cup of tea with an old friend can make the shock of sudden realization much more palatable.
Comment Written 11-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2021
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Hi Nomi,
What a delightfully insightful review! You are spot on, Nomi :)) Time puts its own perspective on everything, doesn?t it? Love this review, my friend! Thanks for reading and assessing my work.
Have a good Friday,
Senyai
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Reading your outstanding work is a particular delight for me. I look forward to your next post.
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Thank you, dear Nomi :))
Comment from prettybluebirds
lovely photographs with this poetry. WE have goldenrod in Michigan too. One often sees vast fields of it growing. It is not the favorite flower for some farmers as it's tenacious and likes to grow in pastures and hayfields. I think they have more modern methods of controlling it than they used to. I just remember my father fighting with it back in the fifties. This is a nicely done poem and it should do well in the contest. Good luck
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2021
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lovely photographs with this poetry. WE have goldenrod in Michigan too. One often sees vast fields of it growing. It is not the favorite flower for some farmers as it's tenacious and likes to grow in pastures and hayfields. I think they have more modern methods of controlling it than they used to. I just remember my father fighting with it back in the fifties. This is a nicely done poem and it should do well in the contest. Good luck
Comment Written 11-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2021
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Hi PrettyBluebirds,
Such a warm and eloquent review! I appreciate your insight and enjoyed your comments! Yes, free growing goldenrod can be a pest in some cases.
Thanks for your time to read and assess my work :))
Have a great Friday,
Senyai
Comment from Ric Myworld
I don't think I've ever tasted Goldenrod tea and ever even knew that anyone drank it, but you sure have my curiosity up and its time to give it a try. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2021
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I don't think I've ever tasted Goldenrod tea and ever even knew that anyone drank it, but you sure have my curiosity up and its time to give it a try. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 11-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2021
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Hi Ric,
Thanks for an enjoyable review and thoughts. I have heard goldenrod has quite a reputation for healing inflammation as well as tasting good as a tea. I think it has a spicy astringent flavor.
So appreciate your time to review and assess my work, Ric. Always so good to hear from you :))
Have a great Friday and coming weekend,
Senyai
