The Show Must Go On
Every night...16 total reviews
Comment from Wendy G
How very imaginative and creative. A beautiful story in a poem, with smooth metre and flow, and great rhyme. It's an excellent entry for the contest, so best wishes.
Wendy
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How very imaginative and creative. A beautiful story in a poem, with smooth metre and flow, and great rhyme. It's an excellent entry for the contest, so best wishes.
Wendy
Comment Written 08-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2021
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Thanks so much for this terrific review, I really appreciate it. :)
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
The Show Must Go on
Nice entry for the Write a poem using these words... writing prompt contest. In my opinion, It's an eerie tale of an actress ghost that remains in the theater, doing what she loves.
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The Show Must Go on
Nice entry for the Write a poem using these words... writing prompt contest. In my opinion, It's an eerie tale of an actress ghost that remains in the theater, doing what she loves.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2021
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Thank you, this great review means a lot. :)
Comment from Frank Malley
An unexpected cost of passion, of obsession, is presented in this poem. The fast moving stanzas of four iambs followed by three iambs and a pause have a lyrical energy that does not portend the surprising ending of death and the actress's enchanted, endless confinement to the stage she loved more than her life. Lines 9 and 10 seem awkwardly joined, seeming to state that the script was nervous rather than the actress; I think this would be easy to fix. In my opinion there are lines where the meter is slightly warped, but these are fixable. A skilled reader could make children shudder at the revelation of this poem.
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An unexpected cost of passion, of obsession, is presented in this poem. The fast moving stanzas of four iambs followed by three iambs and a pause have a lyrical energy that does not portend the surprising ending of death and the actress's enchanted, endless confinement to the stage she loved more than her life. Lines 9 and 10 seem awkwardly joined, seeming to state that the script was nervous rather than the actress; I think this would be easy to fix. In my opinion there are lines where the meter is slightly warped, but these are fixable. A skilled reader could make children shudder at the revelation of this poem.
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Comment Written 08-Nov-2021
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Thank you for this great review and your helpful suggestions.....both are appreciated. :)
Comment from Anne Johnston
Great entry for this contest. These words certainly present a challenge, and you have met it well, combining the words "beautiful" and "horror" into the same poem
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Great entry for this contest. These words certainly present a challenge, and you have met it well, combining the words "beautiful" and "horror" into the same poem
Comment Written 08-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2021
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Thank you so much, I'm always glad to hear from you. :)
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You are welcome Hope this does well in the contest
Comment from Wils
The meter is a little off in parts but this poem tells an intriguing yet tragic tale that held my attention throughout. This would make a good short story. Good luck in the contest, should do well.
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The meter is a little off in parts but this poem tells an intriguing yet tragic tale that held my attention throughout. This would make a good short story. Good luck in the contest, should do well.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2021
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Thank you for this fine review. I don't pay attention to meter as much as I should, I just enjoy writing. Thanks again. :)
Comment from RodG
Wow! Do you pack a lot of narrative into this poem while smoothly using the required words. An excellent job of characterizing the actress obsessed with seeing her name in lights. Lots of drama with the fire and the tragic death of an actor. The plot--though melodramatic--is believable. One small error: "broke" should be "broken." Rod
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Wow! Do you pack a lot of narrative into this poem while smoothly using the required words. An excellent job of characterizing the actress obsessed with seeing her name in lights. Lots of drama with the fire and the tragic death of an actor. The plot--though melodramatic--is believable. One small error: "broke" should be "broken." Rod
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Comment Written 08-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2021
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Thank you for catching my error and for this great review....it's always nice to hear from you. :)
