Comment from Terry Broxson

Exceptional

This is an outstanding poem for this contest! I wish you good luck, and if I get a chance to vote, you get it. Great story, wonderful rhymes, the whole thing just flows like lava down a volcano. Beautiful, destructive, final. Great job!

 Comment Written 11-Nov-2021

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reply by the author on 11-Nov-2021

Thank you for this exceptional review. I actually came in 3rd in the contest! This terrific review means a lot....thanks again. :)

Comment from Carol Hillebrenner

Excellent

this is good, really great as a ghost story. Obsession takes many forms, but hers was tragic and you made the reader feel for her even while disagreeing with her decision.

 Comment Written 11-Nov-2021

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reply by the author on 11-Nov-2021

Thank you so much for this great review. :)

Comment from Aspiring2Write

Excellent

This is a great poem. It is an amazing entry for the writing contest you are in. Hope you win. Wish you the best in your future writing.

Yours Truly,
Joshua Law

 Comment Written 10-Nov-2021

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reply by the author on 10-Nov-2021

Thank you, I'm so glad you liked it. I appreciate this positive review. :)

reply by Aspiring2Write on 10-Nov-2021

You are welcome.

Comment from WriterHeather

Exceptional

I always find these "Use These Words" contests so intriguing but also really hard! You have a done and amazing job of writing a complex story poem that include all the required words!

 Comment Written 10-Nov-2021

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reply by the author on 10-Nov-2021

Thank you for this fantastic review and the six shining stars. :)

Comment from Patty Palmer

Excellent

This sounds like a good entry for the contest. You used all of the words specified in the prompt. Your words read easily and the rhyme and rhythm go well together. She had her name up in lights finally. Good job! Good luck with the contest!
Patty

 Comment Written 10-Nov-2021

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reply by the author on 10-Nov-2021

Thank you, it's always nice to hear from you. :)

Comment from Mrs. KT

Excellent

Holy Toledo, Mystery Writer!
Your offering gave me goosebumps!
The graphics alone may prompt me to keep the lights on tonight!
Loved what you did with the selected words.
A mesmerizing story!

Best Wishes!
diane

 Comment Written 09-Nov-2021

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reply by the author on 09-Nov-2021

Thank you for this wonderful, encouraging review. It's really appreciated. :)

Comment from Hitcher

Excellent

The story telling and rhyme were very good and offered up some excellent visuals for the minds eye to enjoy. I like the ending, her obsession to preform eclipsing her memory of her demise.
Not sure if you intended it put the meter was bouncing around a bit and stunted the flow in places, it did for me anyway, just thought I'd mention it.

 Comment Written 09-Nov-2021

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reply by the author on 09-Nov-2021

Thank you, I've actually heard that from several reviewers. Meter has never been my strong point, but I did make some changes and wondered if you could take another look and let me know what you think. Thanks so much for reading my poem. :)

reply by Hitcher on 09-Nov-2021

Meter is mostly about syllables and creating a poem that flows _
one line my have 8 syllables the next 6, that's your couplet, you repeat that in your next to lines and you have your stanza... metered.
You choose the meter, 9 and7 3and 5 etc and sust keep repeating it.
There is a site called _ Syllable Counter - poem and syllable workshop - copy and paste your poem onto the check/count syllable page and it will show you line for line how many syllables per line.
It will help you hone your meter skills friend : ))

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

A spiritual dance as this ghost will not wait in the wings but wants to display her talent and scare the audience with her moves, a well rhymed poem for the contest, much enjoyed, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 08-Nov-2021

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reply by the author on 09-Nov-2021

Thank you, I'm glad you liked it. :)

Comment from Mary Shifman

Excellent

This is a sad and haunting poem. The young woman was certainly obsessed if not possessed by the desire to act. There are many stories about theaters haunted by devoted actors and actresses, or just those who loved the theater. There is a haunted theater in Skowhegan, Maine called The Strand which is reputed to have several active ghosts. You did a fine job with this. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 08-Nov-2021

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reply by the author on 08-Nov-2021

Thanks so much. I truly believe that ghosts exist and I've actually seen one. I appreciate you reading my poem. :)

reply by Mary Shifman on 08-Nov-2021

You're welcome. I believe in ghosts, too. I have heard them and felt them, even smelled them, but I saw one for the first time in my life in early October. It was amazing.

reply by Mary Shifman on 10-Nov-2021

You are welcome.

Comment from LisaMay

Excellent

What dedication to her role - consumed by her passion! Your story in a poem flows very well and carries the reader along through the dramatic turn of events. You've integrated the words seamlessly and I think you'll probably win with this entry.

 Comment Written 08-Nov-2021

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reply by the author on 08-Nov-2021

Thank you for this encouraging review and for taking the time to read my poem. :)