* Moongazing *
4/8/4 Modern Haiku15 total reviews
Comment from J. Dennis
Thank you for explaining the rules of the modern haiku.
Your work does lead one into calm feelings.
But since it is highlighting a child, I think that he/she might remember the statements heard about the moon, ie...made of green cheese, a man in the moon, or making a wish.
Yes there is a certain 'slender.'
Nice work.
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2021
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Thank you for explaining the rules of the modern haiku.
Your work does lead one into calm feelings.
But since it is highlighting a child, I think that he/she might remember the statements heard about the moon, ie...made of green cheese, a man in the moon, or making a wish.
Yes there is a certain 'slender.'
Nice work.
Comment Written 10-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2021
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Thank you very much for your exceptional review, six stars, and kind words. I appreciate your time and feedback.
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Comment from Senyai
Hi Gypsy,
Phenomenal, Gypsy! Beautiful presentation, too in soothing graceful colors that brilliantly highlight your words.
You are such a master to learn Haiku from. Very impressed with this one that leaves such a quiet sense of awe. Childlike and pristine. An enviable satori :))
Always,
Senyai
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2021
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Hi Gypsy,
Phenomenal, Gypsy! Beautiful presentation, too in soothing graceful colors that brilliantly highlight your words.
You are such a master to learn Haiku from. Very impressed with this one that leaves such a quiet sense of awe. Childlike and pristine. An enviable satori :))
Always,
Senyai
Comment Written 10-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words, Senyai. I appreciate that you took the time to read it.
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Simply lovely!
Comment from Aspiring2Write
This is a great poem. Perfect for the Haiku contest. Love the beautiful scenery that God made for this earth. Wishing you the best in your future writing.
Yours Truly,
Joshua Law
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2021
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This is a great poem. Perfect for the Haiku contest. Love the beautiful scenery that God made for this earth. Wishing you the best in your future writing.
Yours Truly,
Joshua Law
Comment Written 10-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words, Joshua. I appreciate that you took the time to read it.
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Thanks
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Yes, Gypsy, the wonder of a child is awesome. Great job with your haiku. Love the picture though your words create a great picture for readers, too. I like the use of different colored fonts. The satori is well thought out. I could see a young child doing just as your haiku stated.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2021
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Yes, Gypsy, the wonder of a child is awesome. Great job with your haiku. Love the picture though your words create a great picture for readers, too. I like the use of different colored fonts. The satori is well thought out. I could see a young child doing just as your haiku stated.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 09-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words, Jan. I appreciate that you took the time to read it.
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Comment from Janice Canerdy
You have made excellent use of your sixteen syllables in this lovely haiku. It conveys a powerful message about seeing magnificence through the eyes of a child.
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You have made excellent use of your sixteen syllables in this lovely haiku. It conveys a powerful message about seeing magnificence through the eyes of a child.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2021
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Thank you very much Janice.
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Comment from Dolly'sPoems
The moon always fascinates me and I often look at it in wonderment, the moon is illusive and transient and magical, I enjoyed your Haiku, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2021
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The moon always fascinates me and I often look at it in wonderment, the moon is illusive and transient and magical, I enjoyed your Haiku, love Dolly x
Comment Written 08-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
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Comment from Theodore McDowell
out of sixes. A very well-crafted haiku. I love the last words "a natural." It has many layers of meaning, such as a child living natural and a natural in the talent of moongazing.
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2021
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out of sixes. A very well-crafted haiku. I love the last words "a natural." It has many layers of meaning, such as a child living natural and a natural in the talent of moongazing.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
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Comment from Seshadri_Sreenivasan
We should keep your children wild- don't make them grow up too fast. Let them be with muddy and grassy feet as they explore the wonders of nature. Your short poem amply explains it in a few words. Much enjoyed.
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We should keep your children wild- don't make them grow up too fast. Let them be with muddy and grassy feet as they explore the wonders of nature. Your short poem amply explains it in a few words. Much enjoyed.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
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Comment from duchessofdrumborg
* Moongazing * , is short, succinct and deftly descriptive. With a minimum
of words this talented poet has told it as she sees it. I look forward to seeing your next post.
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* Moongazing * , is short, succinct and deftly descriptive. With a minimum
of words this talented poet has told it as she sees it. I look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
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Gypsy, you definitely deserved both.
Hugs, the Duchess
Comment from Hitcher
If one was gazing at it from the vantage point of the the person taking the photo we'd all be in Awe of its splendor, what a picture!
We used to see similar moons in Israel, rising over the Jordanian mountains.
Children are sponges and awesome to watch discover new things.
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2021
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If one was gazing at it from the vantage point of the the person taking the photo we'd all be in Awe of its splendor, what a picture!
We used to see similar moons in Israel, rising over the Jordanian mountains.
Children are sponges and awesome to watch discover new things.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2021
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Yes, children know how to live. Too bad we forget when we grow older.
Thank you very much for your review and kind words, Hitcher.
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