Comment from karenina

Excellent

Not a form that warms my heart, I'll admit.
Still, given the constraints of the form you've succeeded in addressing the painful reality of so many "happily ever afters" being anything but!

You've got my vote!

Karenina

 Comment Written 07-Nov-2021

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reply by the author on 07-Nov-2021

Thanks very much for your review.

reply by karenina on 07-Nov-2021

Good luck!

K

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

A clever Tyburn with a very sad and melancholy message here as this marriage is torn apart by disagreement and dying love, how very sad, a skilful write, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 06-Nov-2021

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reply by the author on 06-Nov-2021

Thanks for your review. Glad you enjoyed.

Comment from T B Botts

Excellent

I don't believe I've ever read, much less heard of a Tyburn poem. When I saw the examples and then looked at your handiwork, I was greatly impressed. I'd say you hit the nail on the head. Well done!
Good luck in the contest.
Blessings
Tom

 Comment Written 04-Nov-2021

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reply by the author on 06-Nov-2021

Thanks for your review. Tyburns are sometimes not easy to write but I enjoy the challenge.

Comment from Janice Canerdy

Excellent

Your tyburn is very skillfully written and powerfully worded, with expressive details that send a message about marriages that crash and burn, sometimes after many years or marriage. The artwork strongly implies what may transpire!

 Comment Written 04-Nov-2021

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reply by the author on 06-Nov-2021

Thanks very much for your review.

Comment from Annette R.

Good

The poem tells the story of divorce even in this Tyburn poetry writing style. 2,2,2,2,9,9 sounds eclectic and hard however this poem seems to have pulled it off.

 Comment Written 04-Nov-2021

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reply by the author on 06-Nov-2021

Thanks very much for your review.

Comment from royowen

Excellent

I this is an excellent post and a great entry in this tyburn poetry contest. Some folk should never have kids, how could we allow this? Yes, but then, folk are free to make even gigantic mistakes like this, well done, good luck, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 04-Nov-2021

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reply by the author on 06-Nov-2021

Thanks for your review. Glad you enjoyed.

Comment from lancellot

Excellent

This is well made. I counted the syllables in each line and you got them all right. The rhyme choices reads smoothly and show no signs of being forced. You also chose a theme that will resonate with many people. Good idea and execution.

 Comment Written 04-Nov-2021

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reply by the author on 06-Nov-2021

Thanks very much for your review.