FALLen leaves
5-7-5 contemporary haiku (Fall leaves pirouette)6 total reviews
Comment from June Sargent
Congrats! This is a great tribute to the performance of dancing leaves in the fall. Nice imagery and perfect artwork to highlight your words. Well done!
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2021
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Congrats! This is a great tribute to the performance of dancing leaves in the fall. Nice imagery and perfect artwork to highlight your words. Well done!
Comment Written 04-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2021
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Thanks June! I think this is the first contest that I had double digit votes. I too liked the FanArt illustration.
Mark
Comment from C. Gale Burnett
A stunning overall presentation. Love the background color and font color your chose to accompany the artwork. Like that 'FALL' was capitalized in the word 'fallen'.
I had to look up the word 'pirouette' and found it to be the prettiest picturesque word you could have chosen to describe the dance of the fallen leaves.
Great job! Beautiful :)
Gale
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2021
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A stunning overall presentation. Love the background color and font color your chose to accompany the artwork. Like that 'FALL' was capitalized in the word 'fallen'.
I had to look up the word 'pirouette' and found it to be the prettiest picturesque word you could have chosen to describe the dance of the fallen leaves.
Great job! Beautiful :)
Gale
Comment Written 02-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2021
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Thanks Gale for your ?spin? on my post. I am most pleased you liked my overall presentation.
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LOL :) You had my vote. Awesome job!
Comment from lyenochka
Great use of personification! I do love seeing the autumn leaves twirling in the wind. Good word choice in "pirouette." Hope you do well in the contest!
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2021
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Great use of personification! I do love seeing the autumn leaves twirling in the wind. Good word choice in "pirouette." Hope you do well in the contest!
Comment Written 02-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2021
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Thanks for your encouraging words for my contest entry.
Comment from tempeste
Ciao Marco !
As you know Autumn is my favourite season.. much is written about it so it's not easy to describe it in a new fresh way.
When I read your wee poem it delighted me.
Your are so right . Autumn is a wondrous spettacolo ..
It is their last dance of the year but it is nothing less than breathtaking.
I love your art choice too ..
I don't understand people that just feel autumn as dead season..
it's obvious they live in the city because there is really lots going on .. do you have chestnuts and mushrooms where you live?
Do you know what yummy polenta and pizzoccheri are?
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2021
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Ciao Marco !
As you know Autumn is my favourite season.. much is written about it so it's not easy to describe it in a new fresh way.
When I read your wee poem it delighted me.
Your are so right . Autumn is a wondrous spettacolo ..
It is their last dance of the year but it is nothing less than breathtaking.
I love your art choice too ..
I don't understand people that just feel autumn as dead season..
it's obvious they live in the city because there is really lots going on .. do you have chestnuts and mushrooms where you live?
Do you know what yummy polenta and pizzoccheri are?
Comment Written 30-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2021
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Yes polenta I know and helped prepare the dish in Calalzo in the Dolomites in 1972 !
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Ciao!
Yes , it?s a dish from the north. But have you prepared it since at home?
Pizzoccheri is from the Valtellina valley where my father was born ..near the Alps.. it s so tasty and so easy to make.
It s Halloween soon .. are you going to celebrate with your granddaughters?
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They will be Athena and Artemis!
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Greek goddesses .. I?m sure they will look divine ..( smile)
Hope the weather holds up.
Keep safe!
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Ciao ! You now have 6 votes now.
Honestly, I get the feeling some just write the first nonsense that comes in their head .. no kidding ( sigh)
Comment from Marykelly
I love the graceful image in the first two lines of the haiku. The leaves pirouetting is a creative and effective image. For such a brief poem though the words year and yearly seem too close together to me.
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2021
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I love the graceful image in the first two lines of the haiku. The leaves pirouetting is a creative and effective image. For such a brief poem though the words year and yearly seem too close together to me.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2021
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You are absolutely correct! I gave my daughter several alternative text options. I went with her choice and forgot about my previous line. I really liked masterpiece but can?t use annual masterpiece - too many syllables (6).
Comment from T B Botts
This is a delightful poem about the leaves falling. How very imaginative. I'm always impressed by the diverse ways the various artists can describe the same scene. What a pleasure to take in. Well done.
Blessings
Tom
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2021
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This is a delightful poem about the leaves falling. How very imaginative. I'm always impressed by the diverse ways the various artists can describe the same scene. What a pleasure to take in. Well done.
Blessings
Tom
Comment Written 30-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2021
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Thanks Tom,
I edited my original last line to avoid the year and yearly wording. Annual masterpiece does not work because it has six syllables. Thanks for your review of my original post.
