Past days
Childhood memories.8 total reviews
Comment from Patty Palmer
It looks like this could have been when childhood dreams for sure. No masks! LOL Good luck with the contest. I admit that your picture brings some memories back to me as well.
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2021
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It looks like this could have been when childhood dreams for sure. No masks! LOL Good luck with the contest. I admit that your picture brings some memories back to me as well.
Comment Written 01-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2021
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Good syllables count. The connection between lines can be improved for better flow. The presentation is pretty good. Haiku is better without punctuation and in present tense.
Suggestion:
dear Rockaway Beach,
I Feel your waves hit my skin --
memories relived
Good entry for the Thank You Haiku contest
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2021
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Good syllables count. The connection between lines can be improved for better flow. The presentation is pretty good. Haiku is better without punctuation and in present tense.
Suggestion:
dear Rockaway Beach,
I Feel your waves hit my skin --
memories relived
Good entry for the Thank You Haiku contest
Comment Written 01-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2021
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Thank you for you review.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A wonderful happy holiday beach where the waves touch our skin and memories are relived, I can identify with these words more than you could know, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2021
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A wonderful happy holiday beach where the waves touch our skin and memories are relived, I can identify with these words more than you could know, love Dolly x
Comment Written 30-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2021
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Thank you for your encouraging review.
Comment from Annette R.
Reminds me of the beach my parents took me to every other weekend. Nice picture too. Admire poets as I am not one, especially these poems with requirements.
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2021
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Reminds me of the beach my parents took me to every other weekend. Nice picture too. Admire poets as I am not one, especially these poems with requirements.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2021
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Thank you for your wonderful review.
Comment from Carlos' girl
Oh yeah once a New Yorker always a New Yorker. Im assuming this is Rockaway Beach in bklyn? Nice Haiku. So well done. Great entry for the thank you haiku contest... The illustration is great. Nice work. You struck just the right chord of sentimental.and wistful.
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2021
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Oh yeah once a New Yorker always a New Yorker. Im assuming this is Rockaway Beach in bklyn? Nice Haiku. So well done. Great entry for the thank you haiku contest... The illustration is great. Nice work. You struck just the right chord of sentimental.and wistful.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2021
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Yes it is, I have many fond memories from there. Thank you for your wonderful review.
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Love it. Im a former new yorker now living in new jersey lol
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I live in Massachusetts now.
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Good for you. My old neighbor from the East Village, ny moved back home to Massachusetts. Its all good.
Comment from MSJVClarke
A very nicely written Haiku. You have met the criteria and I like the place you chose to write about. Your syllable count is correct and your artwork is certainly appropriate.
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2021
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A very nicely written Haiku. You have met the criteria and I like the place you chose to write about. Your syllable count is correct and your artwork is certainly appropriate.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2021
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Thank you for your encouraging review.
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Welcome!
Comment from dellsworthpoet
A good poem. Simple, concise, clear, redolent of da javu. The poem meets the rules for the contest. The flow is good. It paints a cameo.
Thanks for sharing and good luck.
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2021
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A good poem. Simple, concise, clear, redolent of da javu. The poem meets the rules for the contest. The flow is good. It paints a cameo.
Thanks for sharing and good luck.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2021
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Thank you for your wonderful review.
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You are welcome.
Comment from Modee
This one reminded me of the Chicago song 'Old Days', which is one of my favorites. I have nothing but good memories - mostly - of my past, so I can see why you'd like to relive yours. Cool poem. Thanks.
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2021
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This one reminded me of the Chicago song 'Old Days', which is one of my favorites. I have nothing but good memories - mostly - of my past, so I can see why you'd like to relive yours. Cool poem. Thanks.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2021
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Thank you for your wonderful review.
