Japanese Poetry 2021
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "Contemplation"Japanese poetry club submissions
16 total reviews
Comment from Lulube
powerful, creative with strong imagery! and in so few words. We overlook our physical and mental inheritances, but subtle approving nods or guilt flushes speak loud and clear.
lulube
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2021
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powerful, creative with strong imagery! and in so few words. We overlook our physical and mental inheritances, but subtle approving nods or guilt flushes speak loud and clear.
lulube
Comment Written 02-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2021
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Hi Lulube,
Thank you for your fine feedback and generous star rating. I appreciate it!
Stay well, Debra x
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welcome, hope you are not getting these torrential rains like here?
lulube
Comment from Val Crisson
Sorry I am late to review, but sometimes I take breaks. Like this one a lot, in fact I have often had the same feeling. I am curious as to what kind of Japanese short form this is? I like Japanese short forms also, and have never seen this form. The piece has such a nostalgic feel, and the presentation mirrors this perfectly. Good job.
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2021
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Sorry I am late to review, but sometimes I take breaks. Like this one a lot, in fact I have often had the same feeling. I am curious as to what kind of Japanese short form this is? I like Japanese short forms also, and have never seen this form. The piece has such a nostalgic feel, and the presentation mirrors this perfectly. Good job.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2021
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Hello Val, Thank you for your lovely feedback. I believe that this is a form that Gypsy Blue Rose has created...?
Best wishes as always,
Debra
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Debra,
Every so often, I notice certain traits of my father. Not so much facial expressions, but more how I move or laugh, cross my arms... things like that. But I can imagine eyes are a common similarity. Or a smile.
Nicely penned for the 12/5 form of Japanese poetry. You catch that moment in time in front of the mirror.
Hugs,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2021
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Hi Debra,
Every so often, I notice certain traits of my father. Not so much facial expressions, but more how I move or laugh, cross my arms... things like that. But I can imagine eyes are a common similarity. Or a smile.
Nicely penned for the 12/5 form of Japanese poetry. You catch that moment in time in front of the mirror.
Hugs,
Kimbob
Comment Written 28-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2021
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Hi Kimbob,
Sorry for the lateness in my reply to your review.
I appreciate your feedback as always,
Stay well, Debra :)
Comment from Shirley McLain
A very lovely poem, Debra. It brought back memories of my mother looking in the mirror. I can see her eyes in my minds eye. You did a wonderful job. Have a great day. Shirley
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2021
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A very lovely poem, Debra. It brought back memories of my mother looking in the mirror. I can see her eyes in my minds eye. You did a wonderful job. Have a great day. Shirley
Comment Written 27-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2021
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Thank you so much, Shirley :) I appreciate your lovely feedback. Best wishes as always, Debra
Comment from dragonpoet
Debra,
This poem shows someone looking in the mirror and remembering when she was young. We all wonder about how quick life passes and how we have changed.
Nicely chosen artwork
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2021
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Debra,
This poem shows someone looking in the mirror and remembering when she was young. We all wonder about how quick life passes and how we have changed.
Nicely chosen artwork
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
Comment Written 27-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2021
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Thank you so much, Joan :) I appreciate your lovely feedback. Best wishes, Debra
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Don't mention it, Debra.
Have a great day and week.
Joan
Comment from Mary Shifman
This poem is brilliant and it's only two lines. I see my own mother every time I look in the mirror. I imagine many people do. Sometimes I see my grandmother, too. Lovely poem.
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2021
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This poem is brilliant and it's only two lines. I see my own mother every time I look in the mirror. I imagine many people do. Sometimes I see my grandmother, too. Lovely poem.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2021
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Thank you so much, Mary :) I appreciate your lovely feedback. Best wishes, Debra
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You are welcome.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a good job, Debra, with your club poem. Your syllable count is correct per line. The image is beautiful. I like the way you referred to mother's eyes. You poem gives readers something to think about in a good way--hopefully.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2021
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You did a good job, Debra, with your club poem. Your syllable count is correct per line. The image is beautiful. I like the way you referred to mother's eyes. You poem gives readers something to think about in a good way--hopefully.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 26-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2021
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Thank you so much, Jan :) I appreciate your lovely feedback. Best wishes as always, Debra
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice artwork
and presentation, Debra.
-The syllable count is good,
along with the topic.
-You show what the daughter
is doing, and follow it well
when her 'mother's eyes gaze back.'
-Well done.
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2021
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-Very nice artwork
and presentation, Debra.
-The syllable count is good,
along with the topic.
-You show what the daughter
is doing, and follow it well
when her 'mother's eyes gaze back.'
-Well done.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2021
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Thank you so much, Pam :) I appreciate your lovely feedback. Best wishes as always, Debra
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You are very welcome, Debra.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Contemplation
by Debra White
Hello, Debra,
Good syllables count!
Con/tem/pla/ting her re/flec/tion in the mi/rror -
Mo/ther's eyes gaze back
I love the presentation. I think most daughters turned into their mom's when they grow old. LoL ð??? well done!
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2021
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Contemplation
by Debra White
Hello, Debra,
Good syllables count!
Con/tem/pla/ting her re/flec/tion in the mi/rror -
Mo/ther's eyes gaze back
I love the presentation. I think most daughters turned into their mom's when they grow old. LoL ð??? well done!
Comment Written 26-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2021
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Thank you so much, Gypsy :) I appreciate your lovely feedback. Best wishes as always, Debra
Comment from Sally Law
A lovely reflection is motherhood. I love that about myself most of all. My middle son just turned 40 today. Still feeling it. Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the challenge, dear Debra,
Sal XOs
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2021
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A lovely reflection is motherhood. I love that about myself most of all. My middle son just turned 40 today. Still feeling it. Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the challenge, dear Debra,
Sal XOs
Comment Written 26-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2021
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Thank you so much, Sal :) I appreciate your lovely feedback. Best wishes as always, Debra x
