"The Gift of Life."
Viewing comments for Chapter 58 "And, All the Stars Stood Still"True storiesof life loss and tragedy in this world
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Comment from mermaids
I like the analogy of life in the stars, they die but their material transform into others. You show here in your words how life does go on in other forms. Excellent poem that gives the reader much to think about.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2021
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I like the analogy of life in the stars, they die but their material transform into others. You show here in your words how life does go on in other forms. Excellent poem that gives the reader much to think about.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2021
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Now I will admit with this one Elaine I cheated and googled to learn about stars dying in the creation and everything.
But the whole thing is quite beautiful don't you agree?
Ricky
Comment from -Joy-
Well written, the idea is very strong and visible. Personally, I think you would find more success and opportunity if you were to break this poem into a few works.
I genuinely respect the overall poem and see you going places as a writer. Continue the good work, you will find great success.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2021
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Well written, the idea is very strong and visible. Personally, I think you would find more success and opportunity if you were to break this poem into a few works.
I genuinely respect the overall poem and see you going places as a writer. Continue the good work, you will find great success.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2021
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I'm currently publishing the two major publishing houses my material which they call manuscripts are over 850 right now in the 18 year period of writing.
But thank you for your advice.
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment from Sally Law
Ah, such a beautiful poem, Dr. Ricky. I see the day approaches of Jason's birth, the star in your universe. My favorite line:
I loved you so...
'twas Heaven
here with you...
Sending you my best today as always, and comfort and peace in our Lord Jesus Christ,
Sally XOs...
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2021
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Ah, such a beautiful poem, Dr. Ricky. I see the day approaches of Jason's birth, the star in your universe. My favorite line:
I loved you so...
'twas Heaven
here with you...
Sending you my best today as always, and comfort and peace in our Lord Jesus Christ,
Sally XOs...
Comment Written 26-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2021
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I thank you so much Sally for your time and review.
Your favorite line that you quoted?
'twas Heaven
here with you...
That was actually written by my oldest daughter Nicole who added it on to the obituary.
Ricky
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That is beautiful regardless. Blessings to you all. Sal XOs
Comment from Mary Shifman
This is a powerful and poignant poem and it is as moving as a prayer. The last three stanzas are particularly beautiful. Organ donors are a blessing.
You and your family are in my thoughts and prayers.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2021
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This is a powerful and poignant poem and it is as moving as a prayer. The last three stanzas are particularly beautiful. Organ donors are a blessing.
You and your family are in my thoughts and prayers.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2021
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I thank you so very much Mary for sharing your time to read my work and also you're wonderful comments at the end!
Doctor Ricky 1024
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You are welcome.
Comment from Paul McFarland
I could almost see this coming from the start. A tragic ending of a life that was dear to you. But parts of him now live on in another body, and his spirit will always be with you.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2021
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I could almost see this coming from the start. A tragic ending of a life that was dear to you. But parts of him now live on in another body, and his spirit will always be with you.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2021
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Thank you so very much Paul for your time and review and your wonderful comments at the end!
Ricky
Comment from Sherry Asbury
You have a very special poetic voice that is yours alone. Somehow you write in a way that I would know without your name being on it. This is very sweet and I can feel the emotion in it.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2021
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You have a very special poetic voice that is yours alone. Somehow you write in a way that I would know without your name being on it. This is very sweet and I can feel the emotion in it.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2021
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Thanks for your thoughts and comments Sherry.
And, I have learned that each and every one of us?
Yes, has their own special styles!
And, I don't consider mine any better than anybody else's!
Ricky