Football - A Novel
Viewing comments for Chapter 58 "Football Chapter 31 part 2"A mother faces life's struggles.
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Comment from Sankey
What a lovely read. Well done. You are doing great even in spite of your injury. I guess the dramas are coming. I look forward to where this is going. No spags.
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2021
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What a lovely read. Well done. You are doing great even in spite of your injury. I guess the dramas are coming. I look forward to where this is going. No spags.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2021
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Thank you for the encouraging review. Yes! I can promise drama.
Comment from amahra
Wow, a man speaking marriage to a woman he's only kissed about a dozen times. Where can you get one of those these days? :)) Another interesting chapter, Barbara. Wedding bells soon I hope.
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2021
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Wow, a man speaking marriage to a woman he's only kissed about a dozen times. Where can you get one of those these days? :)) Another interesting chapter, Barbara. Wedding bells soon I hope.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2021
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Thank you for the encouraging review.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Barb Your chapter in the book Football - A Novel
Football Chapter 31 part 2
Is great,I like how are slowly will have a serious romance brewing between Kay and Gabriel. And I will be waiting to see what take place at the Homecoming.
Gert
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2021
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Barb Your chapter in the book Football - A Novel
Football Chapter 31 part 2
Is great,I like how are slowly will have a serious romance brewing between Kay and Gabriel. And I will be waiting to see what take place at the Homecoming.
Gert
Comment Written 24-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2021
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thank you for the kind review!!!!!!!!!!!!
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You are welcome Barb
How is your hand doing.
Gert
Comment from Judy Lawless
This is a beautiful chapter, Barbara. It's wonderful the way Gabriel is slowly integrating into the family and the boys are happy about it. I'm also glad he and Katherine are now officially dating. He is a sweetheart.
"I really want you (to) take it easy."
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2021
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This is a beautiful chapter, Barbara. It's wonderful the way Gabriel is slowly integrating into the family and the boys are happy about it. I'm also glad he and Katherine are now officially dating. He is a sweetheart.
"I really want you (to) take it easy."
Comment Written 24-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2021
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Thank you for the catch. I have a bad habit of leaving out small words.
Comment from Shirley McLain
I've started another one of your great stories in the middle. I have some catch up work to do. I did not find any errors, and I look forward to reading more of your work. Have a wonderful evening. Shirley
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2021
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I've started another one of your great stories in the middle. I have some catch up work to do. I did not find any errors, and I look forward to reading more of your work. Have a wonderful evening. Shirley
Comment Written 24-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2021
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Welcome back.
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Another optimistic interaction--the M-word!--they've turned a corner, but still have much to discuss and you have them do so realistically. Fine chapter!
point of view (not hyphenated in this context--only when it has special meaning as a literary term)
Don't assume OMIT COMMA she does.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2021
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Another optimistic interaction--the M-word!--they've turned a corner, but still have much to discuss and you have them do so realistically. Fine chapter!
point of view (not hyphenated in this context--only when it has special meaning as a literary term)
Don't assume OMIT COMMA she does.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2021
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Taken care of. LOL I appreciate you.
Comment from lancellot
The story is moving according to the world where your characters exist. I like that you had Katherine address her issue of feeling not so special. Gabe thinks it a sign of low self-esteem, but story wise, she is correct. We haven't been given much to show she is special, or deserving all that attention and constant help.
I would suggest to help in world building. The reader is also shown more of why such PG-13 behavior is needed in that world. Maybe show a couple showing PDA and losing their jobs or run out of town. Something to explain the oddness.
She turned to walk away. "I'll set the table.["]
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reply by the author on 24-Oct-2021
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The story is moving according to the world where your characters exist. I like that you had Katherine address her issue of feeling not so special. Gabe thinks it a sign of low self-esteem, but story wise, she is correct. We haven't been given much to show she is special, or deserving all that attention and constant help.
I would suggest to help in world building. The reader is also shown more of why such PG-13 behavior is needed in that world. Maybe show a couple showing PDA and losing their jobs or run out of town. Something to explain the oddness.
She turned to walk away. "I'll set the table.["]
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Comment Written 24-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2021
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Too many people this is not odd behavior, only to a few. Really! Just because our society has become immoral doesn't make morality wrong. Thank you for the kind review and the catch. I appreciate your comments, I just don't always agree.
Comment from royowen
You've got the relationship between male and female completely sorted, and you take your cue from God. Despite His overwhelming right to take possession of us He doesn't, He takes the lead and shows us how it's done. You have apprehended this in your story, He treats us with the utmost respect, this is why we find God the consummate lover, all other relationships should be like this, even disciplining our own children, well done, blessings Roy
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reply by the author on 24-Oct-2021
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You've got the relationship between male and female completely sorted, and you take your cue from God. Despite His overwhelming right to take possession of us He doesn't, He takes the lead and shows us how it's done. You have apprehended this in your story, He treats us with the utmost respect, this is why we find God the consummate lover, all other relationships should be like this, even disciplining our own children, well done, blessings Roy
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Comment Written 24-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2021
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Thank you. I need to be reminded. I take heat every week, at least from one reviewer who feels I'm out of touch.
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You inspire me with your willingness not to compromise, I support you. Keep going.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Barbara, what a lovely chapter. Gabriel and Katherine are getting ever closer , aren't they? It's about time as well, I dare say. Now we'll see what will happen at the ball. I really like this. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2021
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Hi Barbara, what a lovely chapter. Gabriel and Katherine are getting ever closer , aren't they? It's about time as well, I dare say. Now we'll see what will happen at the ball. I really like this. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 24-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2021
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Thank you for the kind review. I can promise you some issued coming up.
Comment from AJ McCall
I've never been to homecoming but it looks and sounds like a lot of fun. Gabriel is too much sometimes, really, LOL. Katherine needs to stop beating up on herself. Gabriel's the one. Can't wait for the next chapter!! And I'm glad your wrist is getting better, slowly, but better. ;)
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2021
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I've never been to homecoming but it looks and sounds like a lot of fun. Gabriel is too much sometimes, really, LOL. Katherine needs to stop beating up on herself. Gabriel's the one. Can't wait for the next chapter!! And I'm glad your wrist is getting better, slowly, but better. ;)
Comment Written 24-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2021
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Thank you for the kind review. I can promise you some issued coming up.
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You're welcome. ;)
