Galvanize
could. would. should.12 total reviews
Comment from Word Junkie
This is amusing and the rhyme scheme is solid for the most part. One suggestion: Make the last line a separate one-line stanza without parentheses, capitalize and wrap it up with an exclamation mark.
I can't see the benefit of not left-aligning the entire poem but I suppose you have your reason. One thing about this I particularly like is all the (implied) exclamation marks. They're not on the page, but they're there when the poem is read.
Great job! This was a thoroughly enjoyable read.
Best to you,
~Lana
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reply by the author on 24-Oct-2021
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This is amusing and the rhyme scheme is solid for the most part. One suggestion: Make the last line a separate one-line stanza without parentheses, capitalize and wrap it up with an exclamation mark.
I can't see the benefit of not left-aligning the entire poem but I suppose you have your reason. One thing about this I particularly like is all the (implied) exclamation marks. They're not on the page, but they're there when the poem is read.
Great job! This was a thoroughly enjoyable read.
Best to you,
~Lana
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Comment Written 24-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2021
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heavens, it was left aligned when i wrote it. I've been gone so long, I forgot to check it. thanks for the heads-up and suggestions.
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just checked it and it is left-aligned. Don't know why it's not, on your screen.
Comment from lyenochka
Katharine!! Thank you for this fun and humorous post. But did you mean you had Covid?? I'm so sorry. You had been missing for a while but I wasn't sure if you were doing more creative things in your yard our drawing. Thanks for the fun poem and yes, let's galvanize and get our exercise!
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reply by the author on 24-Oct-2021
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Katharine!! Thank you for this fun and humorous post. But did you mean you had Covid?? I'm so sorry. You had been missing for a while but I wasn't sure if you were doing more creative things in your yard our drawing. Thanks for the fun poem and yes, let's galvanize and get our exercise!
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Comment Written 24-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2021
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yep, had Covid - bad. my daughter came down from Austin, and stayed with me, got the needed meds, and saved my life! it's just taking awhile to get strength back.
