A Country Home
A woman had never lived in a country home before10 total reviews
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Liz,
I enjoyed your poem very much, especially that last surprise when an earwig was forced to find other accommodations. I guess we don't think how a fire might affect others. We're too busy thinking of our own displacement. But in an old farmhouse, there might be tiny bugs... spiders, ants, and earwigs. Lots of forest fires this summer... and I'll bet a lot of animals had to run for their lives. Who knows? Maybe a few Bigfoots, too.
This was almost like a Haiku moment in time, as you looked at the cans of bug repellent resting on the melted rug, or the singed mattress, or what was left of the nightstand. But then you zeroed in on that earwig. I could almost see him carrying a suitcase as he left the burnt shell of the house.
"Careful not to burn her bare feet
Looking downward, she saw it
Out of the blackened rubble
Crawled
An earwig"
This is what publishers want these days. They aren't interested in rhyming poems. They want free verse poems that paint a picture. You have surely done that here. Nice job! A great entry for the "Abandoned House" in the "Picture This" club.
Hugs,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2023
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Hi Liz,
I enjoyed your poem very much, especially that last surprise when an earwig was forced to find other accommodations. I guess we don't think how a fire might affect others. We're too busy thinking of our own displacement. But in an old farmhouse, there might be tiny bugs... spiders, ants, and earwigs. Lots of forest fires this summer... and I'll bet a lot of animals had to run for their lives. Who knows? Maybe a few Bigfoots, too.
This was almost like a Haiku moment in time, as you looked at the cans of bug repellent resting on the melted rug, or the singed mattress, or what was left of the nightstand. But then you zeroed in on that earwig. I could almost see him carrying a suitcase as he left the burnt shell of the house.
"Careful not to burn her bare feet
Looking downward, she saw it
Out of the blackened rubble
Crawled
An earwig"
This is what publishers want these days. They aren't interested in rhyming poems. They want free verse poems that paint a picture. You have surely done that here. Nice job! A great entry for the "Abandoned House" in the "Picture This" club.
Hugs,
Kimbob
Comment Written 29-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2023
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Thank you for the rave review. I'm thrilled you enjoyed so much.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
Rather an over-reaction for an earwig nest but cockroaches make me consider such methods also. Nicely written and quite understandable. I enjoyed reading it.
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2021
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Rather an over-reaction for an earwig nest but cockroaches make me consider such methods also. Nicely written and quite understandable. I enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2021
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Thank you for your enjoyable review. She'd have trouble coming into my house. The spidies are my muses.
Comment from Judy Lawless
My goodness, Liz, that was a lot of trouble to get rid of an earwig! I know they are a nuisance, but I'd have figured an infestation of mice, or at least cockroaches. lol Well done.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2021
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My goodness, Liz, that was a lot of trouble to get rid of an earwig! I know they are a nuisance, but I'd have figured an infestation of mice, or at least cockroaches. lol Well done.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2021
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Thank you for your amusing review...I enjoyed it
Comment from Pj Dennison
Excellent, intriguing, and sort of quirky and I really like your poem. I like pieces that start in midstream. After hearing stories about Earwig when I was a child they have been frightened to me. That and also I took it to heart whenever I was told Goodnight, don't let the bedbugs bite. Because of the thing under the bed, earwigs, and bedbugs I was really not very relaxed going to bed as a child. Interesting poem. I think it is a very creative entry.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2021
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Excellent, intriguing, and sort of quirky and I really like your poem. I like pieces that start in midstream. After hearing stories about Earwig when I was a child they have been frightened to me. That and also I took it to heart whenever I was told Goodnight, don't let the bedbugs bite. Because of the thing under the bed, earwigs, and bedbugs I was really not very relaxed going to bed as a child. Interesting poem. I think it is a very creative entry.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2021
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Thank you for your involved review. I remember a story on Twilight Zone about an earwig. A little scary. I remember that sayings. One of my friends who lives in a senior housing place got bed bugs from next door. She'd never visited that person. I guess those bugs can travel from room to rom...creepy.
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You are welcome.
Comment from Sally Law
FanStory fantastic in both imagery and insanity. Our madness can drive us over the edge. In this haunting poem, a match to destroy the bugs took the house. Sending you my best today as always,
Sal XOs
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2021
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FanStory fantastic in both imagery and insanity. Our madness can drive us over the edge. In this haunting poem, a match to destroy the bugs took the house. Sending you my best today as always,
Sal XOs
Comment Written 24-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2021
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Thank you for your involved review. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from Gert sherwood
A woman had never lived in a country home before
A Country Home
Liz O'Neill I like the picture of the burned home
why worry about the bugs if you don't as you said in your description---
A woman had never lived in a country home before
You will find bugs and bone dry interior made of old wood .
Gert
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2021
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A woman had never lived in a country home before
A Country Home
Liz O'Neill I like the picture of the burned home
why worry about the bugs if you don't as you said in your description---
A woman had never lived in a country home before
You will find bugs and bone dry interior made of old wood .
Gert
Comment Written 23-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2021
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Thank you for your involved review. She would have a hard time coming into my house. Spidies are my muses. Any other bugs are food for my muses or they're outta here.
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You are most welcome Liz O'Neill
Gert
Comment from Kelley Liberty1
How graphic full of rage must've been horrible could be a novel.you have a descriptive talent, a knack for words.A Great thing to work on develop.So great work.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2021
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How graphic full of rage must've been horrible could be a novel.you have a descriptive talent, a knack for words.A Great thing to work on develop.So great work.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2021
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Thank you for your fun review. I'm glad you enjoyed it. It does sound Iike a great plot, if you ever wanted to borrow it go for it.
Comment from AJ McCall
All that for a bug, lol? This is a fantastic post, Liz!! And, hiii!! I know it's been some time but I had to drop by and see what was up. And I'll be honest, I don't like bugs either especially anything that looks like a silverfish, earwig, roach, etc. But this made me laugh. Great post!!
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2021
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All that for a bug, lol? This is a fantastic post, Liz!! And, hiii!! I know it's been some time but I had to drop by and see what was up. And I'll be honest, I don't like bugs either especially anything that looks like a silverfish, earwig, roach, etc. But this made me laugh. Great post!!
Comment Written 23-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2021
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Thank you for your fun review. Good to see you. I hope you are well. I am winding down n my Traffic story. Two more chapters.
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Yay! That's great! And you're welcome! Yes, I am well!
Comment from lyenochka
Lol! Someone needs to tell her there are better ways to safe the house and get rid of those buggers. I was thinking this might be a "horror" poem but it turned out to be humorous instead. Great entry to the club challenge!
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2021
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Lol! Someone needs to tell her there are better ways to safe the house and get rid of those buggers. I was thinking this might be a "horror" poem but it turned out to be humorous instead. Great entry to the club challenge!
Comment Written 23-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2021
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Thank you for the humorous review. I cannot write horror stories. I don't like reading them either. I always have to put some humor or irony is stories.
Comment from Sherry Asbury
I love this old house. Several poets have used it lately, but I never tire of it. Very good poem and just enough off-the-wall to please me greatly. An earwig - what a notion!! Excellent presentation.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2021
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I love this old house. Several poets have used it lately, but I never tire of it. Very good poem and just enough off-the-wall to please me greatly. An earwig - what a notion!! Excellent presentation.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2021
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Thank you for your positive review. I'm glad you appreciated it.
