Family Affair
When Police Work Becomes A Family Affair9 total reviews
Comment from Wendy G
I am glad your story is fiction! Well written - you maintained the interest throughout, and it was a different way of offering a family story. Best wishes for this entry in the contest.
Wendy
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2021
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I am glad your story is fiction! Well written - you maintained the interest throughout, and it was a different way of offering a family story. Best wishes for this entry in the contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 23-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2021
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Glad you enjoyed this posting. Appreciate the review..
Comment from Mary Shifman
Well, this was a good story: intense, fast-paced and well written. The only problem I have with it is the fact that it's just too darned short! I know, I know, the 500 word limit but I want to know more. Like who he was and what lead up to his actions and why he was crazy. Sigh. I guess I'll just fill in the blanks. Well done.
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2021
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Well, this was a good story: intense, fast-paced and well written. The only problem I have with it is the fact that it's just too darned short! I know, I know, the 500 word limit but I want to know more. Like who he was and what lead up to his actions and why he was crazy. Sigh. I guess I'll just fill in the blanks. Well done.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2021
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Glad you enjoyed this posting. Appreciate thr review.
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I did enjoy it. Thanks.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I enjoyed reading this contest entry. I never expected Burlington to still be in the apartment. Good twist. Good luck with the contest.
"More so," i replied opening the master bedroom door. (capital 'I' is needed on I)
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2021
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I enjoyed reading this contest entry. I never expected Burlington to still be in the apartment. Good twist. Good luck with the contest.
"More so," i replied opening the master bedroom door. (capital 'I' is needed on I)
Comment Written 22-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2021
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Appreciate the catch and the review.
Comment from Judy Lawless
When I saw "Family Story" I was shocked for a minute, thinking it was your own true story, Brett! I thought maybe you were a detective in another life. lol This is a well-written short story that keeps the readers interest. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2021
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When I saw "Family Story" I was shocked for a minute, thinking it was your own true story, Brett! I thought maybe you were a detective in another life. lol This is a well-written short story that keeps the readers interest. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2021
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Another much appreciated review. Thanks.
Comment from Ric Myworld
I've been doing way too much reading these days and don't have the time to read those I enjoy most or the stars to reward them properly. But, it doesn't mean I like them any less. Great job! And thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2021
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I've been doing way too much reading these days and don't have the time to read those I enjoy most or the stars to reward them properly. But, it doesn't mean I like them any less. Great job! And thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2021
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Always appreciate your support and kind reviews.
Comment from country ranch writer
Jobs like this mKes rpthe hair stand up on the back of your neck for sure. The man had no hear feelings, or emotions. All he could feel was toward smart. How she ended up with him wemay never know, but we know this he will hurt no one else!
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2021
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Jobs like this mKes rpthe hair stand up on the back of your neck for sure. The man had no hear feelings, or emotions. All he could feel was toward smart. How she ended up with him wemay never know, but we know this he will hurt no one else!
Comment Written 21-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2021
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Glad you enjoyed this posting. Appreciate the review.
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Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This Mystery and Crime Fiction, ~ Family Story ~ writing prompt entry speaks about family affair, and particularly when police work becomes a family affair, even if when one performs his duty honestly, confidently to achieve a mission, and when one is not wanted to be part of the service; well said, well done; thanks for sharing, happy reviewing this; God Bless you, my good writer, post more, dear. October, Festive, Flood Fearing, Watery Month Here! ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2021
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This Mystery and Crime Fiction, ~ Family Story ~ writing prompt entry speaks about family affair, and particularly when police work becomes a family affair, even if when one performs his duty honestly, confidently to achieve a mission, and when one is not wanted to be part of the service; well said, well done; thanks for sharing, happy reviewing this; God Bless you, my good writer, post more, dear. October, Festive, Flood Fearing, Watery Month Here! ALCREATOR
Comment Written 21-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2021
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Okey-dokey
Comment from dellsworthpoet
This story is well paced. The vocabulary fits the situation. The dialogue is believable. It rings true because the outcome is not a full resolution.
A good read. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2021
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This story is well paced. The vocabulary fits the situation. The dialogue is believable. It rings true because the outcome is not a full resolution.
A good read. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2021
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Glad you enjoyed this posting. Appreciate the review.
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You are welcome.
Comment from Sherry Asbury
Interesting story - I live in the city of Roses...I suppose we have that kind of excitement here, but not at my house. Since this is fiction, I feel safe... you did a fine job with this...enjoyed it a lot.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2021
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Interesting story - I live in the city of Roses...I suppose we have that kind of excitement here, but not at my house. Since this is fiction, I feel safe... you did a fine job with this...enjoyed it a lot.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2021
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Glad you enjoyed this posting. Appreciate the review. Like Portland. Nice place.
