Bright Horizons
Amphibrach meter33 total reviews
Comment from Jasmine Girl
What a challenging poem you are trying to write, Amphibrach meter. It's so beautifully written and I can tell you are using a few three syllables Amphibrach metered words like "Whenever, awaken, confirming."
You are an exceptional poet. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2021
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What a challenging poem you are trying to write, Amphibrach meter. It's so beautifully written and I can tell you are using a few three syllables Amphibrach metered words like "Whenever, awaken, confirming."
You are an exceptional poet. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2021
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Hello Lisa. Thank you for your encouraging comments on this poem. I appreciate your words and hope they uplift others as they read. I do enjoy writing in the amphibrach meter. Hugs!!
Melissa
Comment from June Sargent
You've done a beautiful job of painting with well
chosen words the joy and grace of daybreak. I can hear the cooing doves, feel the gentle breeze and see the dewdrops glistening in the sun. You've captured every precious moment in this piece. Should do well in the contest.
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You've done a beautiful job of painting with well
chosen words the joy and grace of daybreak. I can hear the cooing doves, feel the gentle breeze and see the dewdrops glistening in the sun. You've captured every precious moment in this piece. Should do well in the contest.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2021
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Hi June. Thank you for your encouraging comments on this poem. I appreciate your words and hope they uplift others as they read. Hugs!!
Melissa
Comment from Irish Rain
Wow, just so very pretty Miss Melissa, and
the perfect picture to go with it. Best of luck
to you in this contest!
Blessings...
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2021
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Wow, just so very pretty Miss Melissa, and
the perfect picture to go with it. Best of luck
to you in this contest!
Blessings...
Comment Written 17-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2021
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Hello there Judy. Thank you for your encouraging comments on this poem. I appreciate your words and hope they uplift others as they read. Hugs!!
Melissa
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Have a lovely week!!
Comment from zanya
A great title leading the reader to reflect upon the dawning of a new day together with the awakening of Nature leading to the realisation that 'each moment is precious'-
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2021
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A great title leading the reader to reflect upon the dawning of a new day together with the awakening of Nature leading to the realisation that 'each moment is precious'-
Comment Written 17-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2021
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Hi Zanya. Thank you for your encouraging comments on this poem. I appreciate your words and hope they uplift others as they read. Hugs!!
Melissa
Comment from judiverse
You've included beautiful details in this. The imagery of the sounds of the wrens and doves and the fog as the darn is breaking reflects the beauty of the scene. These are small blessings that make the day count and make us realize how precious each moment is. Beautifully expressed, with great rhyme. Best of luck in the contest. judi
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2021
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You've included beautiful details in this. The imagery of the sounds of the wrens and doves and the fog as the darn is breaking reflects the beauty of the scene. These are small blessings that make the day count and make us realize how precious each moment is. Beautifully expressed, with great rhyme. Best of luck in the contest. judi
Comment Written 17-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2021
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Hello Judi. Thank you for your wonderful review and comments. I love writing about the experiences we have that are "moments of blessings". Too many times we speed by them and they go unnoticed. So glad you liked this one. Hugs.
Melissa
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You're welcome. In times like these, it's good to hole on to the little things. judi
Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
This is a beautifully written poem it has a great flow and rhyme scheme. Beautiful
Photo to compliment your words as well. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2021
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This is a beautifully written poem it has a great flow and rhyme scheme. Beautiful
Photo to compliment your words as well. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2021
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Hi Joanne. Thank you for your encouraging comments on this poem. I appreciate your words and hope they uplift others as they read. Hugs!!
Melissa
Comment from Jesse James Doty
I like the first and third stanzas, my favorite stanza is the third! It flows so well and says it best about the horizon and each moment is precious...These speak to me very well.
The picture is wonderfully suited to this poem.
I like the way the title and line above it go.
The second stanza is a little rough around the edges if I can be honest with you about that.
That is the only criticism I have to give you.
Thanks for allowing me to be honest, if you don't like it please let me know!
Have a wonderful day,
Jesse
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2021
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I like the first and third stanzas, my favorite stanza is the third! It flows so well and says it best about the horizon and each moment is precious...These speak to me very well.
The picture is wonderfully suited to this poem.
I like the way the title and line above it go.
The second stanza is a little rough around the edges if I can be honest with you about that.
That is the only criticism I have to give you.
Thanks for allowing me to be honest, if you don't like it please let me know!
Have a wonderful day,
Jesse
Comment Written 17-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2021
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Hi Jesse. Thank you for your encouraging comments on this poem. I appreciate your words and did rework the second stanza. You were right that it didn't flow well. Much appreciated, my friend.
Melissa
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Bright Horizons
by Sugarray77
Excellent entry for the No Rules Poetry Contest.
Nice imagery and personification with Amphibrach meter. Good alliteration. Well done!
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2021
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Bright Horizons
by Sugarray77
Excellent entry for the No Rules Poetry Contest.
Nice imagery and personification with Amphibrach meter. Good alliteration. Well done!
Comment Written 17-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2021
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Hi Gypsy. Thank you for your encouraging comments on this poem. I appreciate your words and hope they uplift others as they read. Hugs!!
Melissa
Comment from Debbie Pope
What lovely images and message, Melissa. I like the last stanza best. It stands as a poem unto itself. "Whenever the sun breaks upon your horizon" makes it sound as though the sun shines for each and everyone of us as individuals.
Very inspirational. I expect to see this one on the leader board for sure.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2021
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What lovely images and message, Melissa. I like the last stanza best. It stands as a poem unto itself. "Whenever the sun breaks upon your horizon" makes it sound as though the sun shines for each and everyone of us as individuals.
Very inspirational. I expect to see this one on the leader board for sure.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2021
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Hi Debbie. Thank you for your lovely words about this poem. I really like writing about the "small moments of blessings" that we have. So many of us speed right by them and they go unnoticed. When I was looking for a photo to match the poem, that one stood out to me and took my breath... a small moment for me :). Thanks again!
Melissa
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I loved your photo, too. I could spend all day looking at pretty photos and I appreciate when Fan Story writers pick nice ones. I seldom mention it because it looks like I like the photo better than the poetry.
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello Melissa!
What a beautifully-rendered poetic offering written in amphibrach meter!
Beautiful rhythm and visual imagery. I also appreciate your concluding message, for I do believe it is important to cherish the small blessings that come our way...
Thank you for sharing!
diane
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2021
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Hello Melissa!
What a beautifully-rendered poetic offering written in amphibrach meter!
Beautiful rhythm and visual imagery. I also appreciate your concluding message, for I do believe it is important to cherish the small blessings that come our way...
Thank you for sharing!
diane
Comment Written 17-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2021
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Hi Diane. Thank you for your encouraging comments on this poem. I appreciate your words and hope they uplift others as they read. Hugs!!
Melissa
