Wind to the leaves.
cascade14 total reviews
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Lovely cascade--gorgeous imagery and graceful flow--a fine cascade!
Sugg omit all ' marks--they are superfluous--you aren't quoting anything. (Are you using UK punctuation? In US, periods go inside double " marks.)
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2021
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Lovely cascade--gorgeous imagery and graceful flow--a fine cascade!
Sugg omit all ' marks--they are superfluous--you aren't quoting anything. (Are you using UK punctuation? In US, periods go inside double " marks.)
Comment Written 16-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2021
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Yes UK punctuation.i am trying to change it.
Thank you very much for the suggestion.I think I will remove the quotemarks
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your club entry reads well. I enjoyed reading it. I love the image, the color scheme, and the personification of wind, summer, and winter. Your repeated lines fit in well to carry your little story along.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2021
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Your club entry reads well. I enjoyed reading it. I love the image, the color scheme, and the personification of wind, summer, and winter. Your repeated lines fit in well to carry your little story along.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 16-Oct-2021
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Thank you very much for stopping by.
Comment from lyenochka
I love your Cascade poem about autumn and the great personification of the Wind, which is talking throughout the poem. (I had to look carefully to see that there were quotes in all the stanzas.) That wind is very good at convincing!
There was a slight modification of this line:
Wind is gently tempting the leaves (In the first stanza)
wind is gently prodding the leaves. (In the second stanza)
This is completely okay. If you intended the slight variation, you could call it a "modified Cascade." I thought the "tempted" worked better since the Wind continues to talk in the poem.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2021
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I love your Cascade poem about autumn and the great personification of the Wind, which is talking throughout the poem. (I had to look carefully to see that there were quotes in all the stanzas.) That wind is very good at convincing!
There was a slight modification of this line:
Wind is gently tempting the leaves (In the first stanza)
wind is gently prodding the leaves. (In the second stanza)
This is completely okay. If you intended the slight variation, you could call it a "modified Cascade." I thought the "tempted" worked better since the Wind continues to talk in the poem.
Comment Written 16-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2021
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I wrote 'prodding ' in the beginning .while posting it struck me that 'tempting 'is a better word.but forgot to change it in the second line!
Getting old! Or the pressure of my 'duties,' is getting a bit too much.
Thank you for stopping by
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That's happened to me, too! It's a byproduct of revising! 😊
Comment from karenina
It's a lovely form, really. Soft and flowing, like the rustle of an autumn colored skirt, on a windy day! Nice photo and color background for this theme. Seems you wrote a very nice ode to autumn in the Cascade form!
I think I'd like to try this...
Karenina
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2021
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It's a lovely form, really. Soft and flowing, like the rustle of an autumn colored skirt, on a windy day! Nice photo and color background for this theme. Seems you wrote a very nice ode to autumn in the Cascade form!
I think I'd like to try this...
Karenina
Comment Written 16-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2021
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Thank you very much for you encouraging words
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Love your take on the Cascade form!
Karenina
Comment from royowen
I thought the last three verses needed to be mon rhymes, not that it matters, but this is still beautifully written my friend Sanku, a well crafted and sweetly written cascade poem, well done my friend, blessings Roy
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I thought the last three verses needed to be mon rhymes, not that it matters, but this is still beautifully written my friend Sanku, a well crafted and sweetly written cascade poem, well done my friend, blessings Roy
Comment Written 16-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2021
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Thank you very much. In the rules rhymes were not specified.
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Most welcome
Comment from Sherry Asbury
Lovely and filled with grace. Leaves dancing always make me happy - they are like waves from angels and so colorful. Your artwork is wonderful and brought me a smile! Everything technical is perfect.
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Lovely and filled with grace. Leaves dancing always make me happy - they are like waves from angels and so colorful. Your artwork is wonderful and brought me a smile! Everything technical is perfect.
Comment Written 16-Oct-2021
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Thank you very much.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I saw the falling leaves in this poem as they weave their way to the ground and gather in the rustling on the ground, an ambient write . . . . love Dolly x
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I saw the falling leaves in this poem as they weave their way to the ground and gather in the rustling on the ground, an ambient write . . . . love Dolly x
Comment Written 16-Oct-2021
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Thank you for your lovely words
Comment from Seshadri_Sreenivasan
What a beautiful poem you have penned. There are many reasons to love autumn. We don't have this season in India, but I have experienced this season in Germany and America. Exhilarating experience. The wind will be doing the tango with the leaves. I enjoyed the imagery you have painted with your words! Well done!
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2021
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What a beautiful poem you have penned. There are many reasons to love autumn. We don't have this season in India, but I have experienced this season in Germany and America. Exhilarating experience. The wind will be doing the tango with the leaves. I enjoyed the imagery you have painted with your words! Well done!
Comment Written 16-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2021
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Yes I have never seen autumn .my few trips abroad were all in May. Thanks a lot God the lovely stars
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this poem with us. I enjoyed the imagery of the picture you painted with words. The rhyming and near rhyming worked until the final stanza. Maybe that was on purpose,
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Thank you for sharing this poem with us. I enjoyed the imagery of the picture you painted with words. The rhyming and near rhyming worked until the final stanza. Maybe that was on purpose,
Comment Written 16-Oct-2021
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Thank you for your encouraging words
Comment from Mary Shifman
This is a charming poem about my favorite season. I particularly like the first stanza; "a dancing pattern under the trees," is especially lovely. Your picture is perfect for this poem. Nicely done.
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This is a charming poem about my favorite season. I particularly like the first stanza; "a dancing pattern under the trees," is especially lovely. Your picture is perfect for this poem. Nicely done.
Comment Written 16-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2021
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Thank you very much.
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You are very welcome.
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You are very welcome.
