Duck For Cover
An earthquake is coming16 total reviews
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Ha ha ha, I just adore ducks and the hide under the bushes in the rain but on the whole they enjoy the refreshing rain as they wash their feathers in the raindrops, a fun write, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2021
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Ha ha ha, I just adore ducks and the hide under the bushes in the rain but on the whole they enjoy the refreshing rain as they wash their feathers in the raindrops, a fun write, love Dolly x
Comment Written 16-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2021
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Not doing well in the contest.
Comment from Patty Palmer
A cute pun on words here. This contest has been about the funniest and enjoyable time-wasting contest I've seen in a long time. All of the entries are so funny, your's included. Good luck with the contest!
Patty
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2021
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A cute pun on words here. This contest has been about the funniest and enjoyable time-wasting contest I've seen in a long time. All of the entries are so funny, your's included. Good luck with the contest!
Patty
Comment Written 16-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2021
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Not doing well.
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Awwww
Patty
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I wish it would do well!
Comment from writer723
I really enjoyed reading your intriguing poem. It drew me in and held my attention throughout. Your description of this scenario was quite thought-provoking and emotional. Your writing skills are excellent and you have a wonderful gift of expression.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2021
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I really enjoyed reading your intriguing poem. It drew me in and held my attention throughout. Your description of this scenario was quite thought-provoking and emotional. Your writing skills are excellent and you have a wonderful gift of expression.
Comment Written 16-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2021
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Thanks, not doing well.
Comment from Mary Kay Bonfante
This is quite clever, and the cute picture of the duck makes it appealing. You have the right count of 5-7-5 syllables, and an attractive presentation for your poem.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2021
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This is quite clever, and the cute picture of the duck makes it appealing. You have the right count of 5-7-5 syllables, and an attractive presentation for your poem.
Comment Written 16-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2021
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Thanks, not doing well.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent entry for the Witty, Animal 5-7-5 writing prompt contest. Good syllables count and connection between lines.
I like the play on words with duck for cover... very clever.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2021
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Excellent entry for the Witty, Animal 5-7-5 writing prompt contest. Good syllables count and connection between lines.
I like the play on words with duck for cover... very clever.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 16-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2021
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Thanks.
Comment from papa55mike
That reminds me of the old 'Duck and Cover' films from the past. Where the kids were to duck their heads when the Bomb went off. What a wonderfully written poem.
Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2021
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That reminds me of the old 'Duck and Cover' films from the past. Where the kids were to duck their heads when the Bomb went off. What a wonderfully written poem.
Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 14-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2021
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Thanks
Comment from PoemsOfDD
This is a fun 5-7-5 short piece.
I like the play on words with - duck.
It got a 'quack' out of me... lol.
I enjoyed reading this lighthearted write.
Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2021
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This is a fun 5-7-5 short piece.
I like the play on words with - duck.
It got a 'quack' out of me... lol.
I enjoyed reading this lighthearted write.
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2021
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Welcome.
Comment from lyenochka
That's cute! I like how you used the "duck for cover" for the word play and the bird which amuses all of us. When I lived in California, we were always told to go under something heavy like desks.
Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2021
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That's cute! I like how you used the "duck for cover" for the word play and the bird which amuses all of us. When I lived in California, we were always told to go under something heavy like desks.
Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 13-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2021
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Thanks.
Comment from Wendy G
Clever and witty little 5-7-5. Lovely photo to accompany your poem. I do like the play on words in this one with "duck". Best wishes for your entry in the contest.
Wendy
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2021
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Clever and witty little 5-7-5. Lovely photo to accompany your poem. I do like the play on words in this one with "duck". Best wishes for your entry in the contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 13-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2021
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Thank you.
Comment from LisaMay
You have cleverly used 'duck' to introduce a pun into your poem, but perhaps you could have used a poetic device to make it more dramatic or effective, such as rhyming. I'm not saying rhyming is always better than unrhymed poetry, but in such a short form, I feel there needs to be something more to catch the readers' eye.
As an example below, I have played around with your idea, to put it in my own words with the introduction of 2 rhymes.
Here's an earthquake shake!
Pluck courage as we all duck
Before it's too late.
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2021
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You have cleverly used 'duck' to introduce a pun into your poem, but perhaps you could have used a poetic device to make it more dramatic or effective, such as rhyming. I'm not saying rhyming is always better than unrhymed poetry, but in such a short form, I feel there needs to be something more to catch the readers' eye.
As an example below, I have played around with your idea, to put it in my own words with the introduction of 2 rhymes.
Here's an earthquake shake!
Pluck courage as we all duck
Before it's too late.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2021
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I am keeping it the way it is.
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Of course you are and rightly so. It's your poem, expressed the way you want it to be.
