Devotion
How a husband and wife should be devoted to each other.39 total reviews
Comment from Paul McFarland
This is a very good job with an acrostic form, especially with the rhyming. "Never forget that we are one instead of two" is a great last line. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2021
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This is a very good job with an acrostic form, especially with the rhyming. "Never forget that we are one instead of two" is a great last line. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2021
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Comment from lyenochka
A lovely acrostic poem spelling "Devotion" not only in the first letters but in the actions in the lines - to love and treasure the beloved one just as God treasures us. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2021
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A lovely acrostic poem spelling "Devotion" not only in the first letters but in the actions in the lines - to love and treasure the beloved one just as God treasures us. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 13-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2021
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Thank you.
Comment from SMASH52
Absolutely lovely. The first seven lines are heartfelt, passionate, and sincere. However, the last line is a bit self-serving. "Don't forget about all the things I do for you." How about - Never forget He made one from us two."?
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2021
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Absolutely lovely. The first seven lines are heartfelt, passionate, and sincere. However, the last line is a bit self-serving. "Don't forget about all the things I do for you." How about - Never forget He made one from us two."?
Comment Written 13-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2021
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Thanks for the suggestion. I changed it to Never forget that we are one instead of two.
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May I suggest that you read the poem aloud? "See" if it sounds and feels right to you, the poet.
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I changed the last line, and I am pleased with it now.
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I'm happy for you. The poet must love their own work first.
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Right back 'atcha.
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Right back 'atcha!
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your rhyming acrostic poem is very well-written--creative and moving, conveying a powerful, lovely message about enduring love and how it is maintained.
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2021
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Your rhyming acrostic poem is very well-written--creative and moving, conveying a powerful, lovely message about enduring love and how it is maintained.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2021
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Thanks.
Comment from Cristine22
This reminds me of the way my husband treats me and of how lucky I am. It's very uplifting with a good message. Well done, and good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2021
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This reminds me of the way my husband treats me and of how lucky I am. It's very uplifting with a good message. Well done, and good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 13-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2021
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Thanks.
Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
This is a beautifully written acrostic romance poem. Very well put together. Great flow and rhyme. Beautiful photo to compliment your words. Well done. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2021
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This is a beautifully written acrostic romance poem. Very well put together. Great flow and rhyme. Beautiful photo to compliment your words. Well done. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2021
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Thank you
Comment from royowen
I love the definition of giving. It is the act of giving without the thought of reward or return for the investment, but of course it's simply gratitude that creates a giver anyway. This is a beautifully scripted and written acrostic, well done, excellent post, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2021
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I love the definition of giving. It is the act of giving without the thought of reward or return for the investment, but of course it's simply gratitude that creates a giver anyway. This is a beautifully scripted and written acrostic, well done, excellent post, blessings Roy
Comment Written 13-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2021
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Comment from dragonpoet
This is a nice poem that could be a good Anniversary card or Valentine's Day card. It should be a mutual feeling. But the last line sounds like he/she is keeping score on who does more for the other.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2021
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This is a nice poem that could be a good Anniversary card or Valentine's Day card. It should be a mutual feeling. But the last line sounds like he/she is keeping score on who does more for the other.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
dragonpoet
Comment Written 13-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2021
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Thanks.
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My pleasure.
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Comment from Sally Law
I love this poem of marriage and devotion. I have this with my husband of 46 years. A wonderful life. Beautiful offering for the upcoming contest. I wish you my best.
Sal :))
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2021
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I love this poem of marriage and devotion. I have this with my husband of 46 years. A wonderful life. Beautiful offering for the upcoming contest. I wish you my best.
Sal :))
Comment Written 13-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2021
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Thanks.
Comment from Mary Shifman
This is a charming poem that speaks well of love between two individuals. It rhymes well and has good imagery. The Acrostic aspect of it works too. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2021
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This is a charming poem that speaks well of love between two individuals. It rhymes well and has good imagery. The Acrostic aspect of it works too. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2021
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Thank you.
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You are welcome,
