Undaunted
she is his wonderland44 total reviews
Comment from mermaids
Yes, "he traces her" is a strong use of words that captured a powerful feeling of love. You have created a romantic poem in only six words, quite a challenge but you did it. Best wishes for the contest.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2021
Yes, "he traces her" is a strong use of words that captured a powerful feeling of love. You have created a romantic poem in only six words, quite a challenge but you did it. Best wishes for the contest.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2021
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Hi Mermaids,
Oh, thank you for your perceptive and intuitive review on my cryptic six lines!
I appreciate your take on my words.
Thanks for reading and assessing my work :))
Senyai
Comment from Jasmine Girl
Initially I see a leaf chasing another leaf. But then I think you definitely mean human, a man chasing a woman with your pronouns.
Well done and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2021
Initially I see a leaf chasing another leaf. But then I think you definitely mean human, a man chasing a woman with your pronouns.
Well done and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2021
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Hi Lisa,
Thank you for a super review! I appreciate your perception which is spot on.
Didn?t you know leaves could be sensual when they twirl just so in the wind?lol
Have a great Thursday :))
Senyai
Comment from Terry Broxson
very interesting. I have no suggestions of how to make it better. The thing about good poetry, even only 6 words, is that it can be interrupted in several ways. My take is that it is a love poem. Good Job.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2021
very interesting. I have no suggestions of how to make it better. The thing about good poetry, even only 6 words, is that it can be interrupted in several ways. My take is that it is a love poem. Good Job.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2021
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Hi Terry,
You are spot on. It is a love poem. I have had every interpretation under the sun on my cryptic six words lol. It has been eye opening for sure :))
Thanks for a great review and thoughts on my poem (if you can call six words a poem)
Always,
Senyai
Comment from Possummagic
Wow the artwork blew me away. I enjoyed your six word poem it was short and succinct and packed a powerful punch. Good luck in the contest, i certainly think you have a good chance. PM
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2021
Wow the artwork blew me away. I enjoyed your six word poem it was short and succinct and packed a powerful punch. Good luck in the contest, i certainly think you have a good chance. PM
Comment Written 13-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2021
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Hi Possummagic,
Thank you for a super review and encouraging words on my cryptic six words. I appreciate you time to read and assess my work. Means so much :))
Have a great week,
Senyai
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You are most welcome.PM
Comment from Hitcher
Well, no holds barred tells me someone is going for it with some enthusiasm. He traces her... my mind is now going down the sensual path so I'm thinking a passionate encounter awaits. But that of course is my mind and it tends to wax sensual. Nice! good Luck
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2021
Well, no holds barred tells me someone is going for it with some enthusiasm. He traces her... my mind is now going down the sensual path so I'm thinking a passionate encounter awaits. But that of course is my mind and it tends to wax sensual. Nice! good Luck
Comment Written 13-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2021
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Hi Hitcher,
You pegged it right?thanks for your perception. I appreciate your approach to reviewing and thank you for your time to read and assess my poem, short though it may be?
Have a great Wednesday down in NZ,
Senyai
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Hi Hitcher,
You pegged it right?thanks for your perception. I appreciate your approach to reviewing and thank you for your time to read and assess my poem, short though it may be?
Have a great Wednesday down in NZ,
Senyai
Comment from lyenochka
The word "undaunted" and the expression "no holds barred" speak to me about total abandon and focused commitment. The "he" and "her" speak of a relationship. It could be about devotion or it could be even about Creator and creation, or an artist and his art.
Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2021
The word "undaunted" and the expression "no holds barred" speak to me about total abandon and focused commitment. The "he" and "her" speak of a relationship. It could be about devotion or it could be even about Creator and creation, or an artist and his art.
Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 12-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2021
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Hi Lyenochka,
You are spot on, on both accounts! Thanks for your perception on the scant six word poem (if you can call it a poem :))
Have a wonderful Wednesday,
Senyai
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Hi Lyenochka,
You are spot on, on both accounts! Thanks for your perception on the scant six word poem (if you can call it a poem :))
Have a wonderful Wednesday,
Senyai
Comment from harmony13
The author's words are unique, interesting, clear and creative. I found
these words thought provoking. I pondered on the theme of this
poem. The artwork goes well with words and theme of this poem.
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2021
The author's words are unique, interesting, clear and creative. I found
these words thought provoking. I pondered on the theme of this
poem. The artwork goes well with words and theme of this poem.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2021
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Hi Harmony,
Thank you for your review and thoughts on my six word offering. It is a bit cryptic on purpose to leave the interpretation up to the reader.
Have a wonderful Wednesday :))
Senyai
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Hi Harmony,
Thank you for your review and thoughts on my six word offering. It is a bit cryptic on purpose to leave the interpretation up to the reader.
Have a wonderful Wednesday :))
Senyai
Comment from pookietoo
A very nice six words. That photo is very beautiful. I wish you a lot of luck in the contest. I hope all is well with you. I hope you have a wonderful day and keep writing.
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2021
A very nice six words. That photo is very beautiful. I wish you a lot of luck in the contest. I hope all is well with you. I hope you have a wonderful day and keep writing.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2021
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Hi Pookietoo,
Thank you for your review and thoughts. Both are greatly appreciated. I?m doing well, thanks. And you?
Have a wonderful week,
Senyai
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Hi Pookietoo,
Thank you for your review and thoughts. Both are greatly appreciated. I?m doing well, thanks. And you?
Have a wonderful week,
Senyai
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I am doing well.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your contest entry is in great form, I enjoyed reading it. The image sets the tone for your well-chosen 6, as required, words. It is eerie and creepy at the same time. I believe you are saying that a man will stop at nothing to get what he wants--the woman.
Best wishes in the contest.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2021
Your contest entry is in great form, I enjoyed reading it. The image sets the tone for your well-chosen 6, as required, words. It is eerie and creepy at the same time. I believe you are saying that a man will stop at nothing to get what he wants--the woman.
Best wishes in the contest.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 12-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2021
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Hi Jan,
My cryptic 6 words are what ever the reader gleans from them. It has been interesting to see what that is. Your interpretation is valid and I value your perception. Thanks for that :))
Have a wonderful week,
Senyai
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Hi Jan,
My cryptic 6 words are what ever the reader gleans from them. It has been interesting to see what that is. Your interpretation is valid and I value your perception. Thanks for that :))
Have a wonderful week,
Senyai
Comment from Boogienights
This six word poem is, for some reason, incredibly sensual to me. I'm not sure you intended it that way, but it really hit me on an emotional level. A great image to accompany it, best of luck in the contest. :)
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2021
This six word poem is, for some reason, incredibly sensual to me. I'm not sure you intended it that way, but it really hit me on an emotional level. A great image to accompany it, best of luck in the contest. :)
Comment Written 12-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2021
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Hi Boogienights,
Ahh, you are the first one to pick up on that aspect of my short poem ( if you can even call, 6 words a poem lol)
It was in my mind when I wrote this and few sensed this because,I suppose there were two juxtapositional ideas presented. Many felt it creepy and thought this woman was being traced or chased?but my cryptic words can be taken any way the reader gleans from them.
Thanks for your keen perception. I appreciate it.
Have a great evening :))
Senyai
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Hi Boogienights,
Ahh, you are the first one to pick up on that aspect of my short poem ( if you can even call, 6 words a poem lol)
It was in my mind when I wrote this and few sensed this because,I suppose there were two juxtapositional ideas presented. Many felt it creepy and thought this woman was being traced or chased?but my cryptic words can be taken any way the reader gleans from them.
Thanks for your keen perception. I appreciate it.
Have a great evening :))
Senyai