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Undaunted

she is his wonderland

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Comment from Eternal Muse
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This was very, very interesting. Thanks for the author notes explaining certain words. Wonderful imagery, visuals and a terrific artwork to compliment your (6) words (smile).

Best of luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 15-Oct-2021

reply by the author on 15-Oct-2021
    Hi Eternal Muse,

    Thank you this lovely review and thoughts! Always value your input, thank you again for reading and assessing my work :))

    Have a wonderful weekend.

    Always,
    Senyai
Comment from Janetsue
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I like the bit of ambiguity presented in this short line of poetic thought. Sincere and deep love for another leads to a number of paths from which someone might choose to follow. The rippled graphic is an excellent accent to the poem's message.

 Comment Written 14-Oct-2021

reply by the author on 15-Oct-2021
    Hi Spangle,

    Love your name btw :))?Thank you for a most complimentary review and thoughts, which are spot on. Much is left to the imagination here?the reader can take it anywhere as my varied reviews showed me ?

    Thanks so much for your time to read, your input is much appreciated.

    Have a great weekend, Spangle :))
    Senyai
Comment from Paul McFarland
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Six words is a tough challenge. I think I see where you are going with this but not sure. Are we talking about the physical act of love making here?

 Comment Written 14-Oct-2021

reply by the author on 14-Oct-2021
    Hi Paul,

    Yes. Need I say more? My cryptic six lines has been interpreted from A-Z lol. From creepy guy chasing (tracing) this woman to passion over the top or about an artist sketching this woman?

    It?s been entertaining and eye opening for sure. I had no idea this was going to happen when I posted it but can now see it could be taken so many ways, especially if they didn?t read the subtitle?

    Thanks for your perception, Paul :))

    All the best,
    Senyai
Comment from SMASH52
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She has given him permission to explore her body. The photo suggests this will do no harm to their relationship. They are destined to FALL in love and sail through life together.

 Comment Written 13-Oct-2021

reply by the author on 14-Oct-2021
    Hi Smash,

    Ahh, wonderful interpretation on my cryptic six words! Thank you for your perception :))

    Have a wonderful Thursday,
    Senyai
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2021
    Hi Smash,

    Ahh, wonderful interpretation on my cryptic six words! Thank you for your perception :))

    Have a wonderful Thursday,
    Senyai
reply by SMASH52 on 14-Oct-2021
    Thank YOU for the opportunity to bring my interpretation to the table.
Comment from Wendy G
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She is his wonderland, and "he traces her" speaks to me of a deep and sensual relationship, with no holds barred. Everything is done with great enthusiasm and no holding back, so I see this as full commitment, undaunted by anyone or anything which would seek to intervene in the relationship. Not sure if I am on the right track with this abstract one.
Wendy

 Comment Written 13-Oct-2021

reply by the author on 14-Oct-2021
    Hi Wendy,

    You are spot on, my friend! Thank you, thank you for your perception. My intention exactly when I wrote this cryptic six lines. :))

    Have a wonderful Thursday, Wendy,
    Senyai
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2021
    Hi Wendy,

    You are spot on, my friend! Thank you, thank you for your perception. My intention exactly when I wrote this cryptic six lines. :))

    Have a wonderful Thursday, Wendy,
    Senyai
Comment from Dawn Munro
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Wow, this is quite a profound little poem -- so many ways to read this! I enjoyed it very much, but I would love to know the author's interpretation, so if you don't object to conveying your own meaning, I'd love to hear what you thought as you wrote it. :)

Nicely done! Best of luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 13-Oct-2021

reply by the author on 14-Oct-2021
    Hi Dawn,

    Well, when I thought of it, I pictured a very sensual relationship that was on the threshold of deepening? she had become his wonderland - her body, her spirit, her mind and he would drink her in like an elixir to quench a deep thirst. No holds barred, nothing held back - the morning, the afternoon, the night would take them where it will.

    I hope that clarified my meaning, Dawn lol. I have gotten every kind of review under the sun from creeper stalker chasing (tracing) this woman to an artist sketching her portrait, to a much more sensual tone. Has been very interesting?I had no idea this would happen when I posted it.

    Thanks for an interesting review and for your perception!

    Have a wonderful Thursday,
    Senyai
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2021
    Hi Dawn,

    Well, when I thought of it, I pictured a very sensual relationship that was on the threshold of deepening? she had become his wonderland - her body, her spirit, her mind and he would drink her in like an elixir to quench a deep thirst. No holds barred, nothing held back - the morning, the afternoon, the night would take them where it will.

    I hope that clarified my meaning, Dawn lol. I have gotten every kind of review under the sun from creeper stalker chasing (tracing) this woman to an artist sketching her portrait, to a much more sensual tone. Has been very interesting?I had no idea this would happen when I posted it.

    Thanks for an interesting review and for your perception!

    Have a wonderful Thursday,
    Senyai
reply by Dawn Munro on 14-Oct-2021
    Oh, lovely! Thank you! :) (Very much as I interpreted it.) :))
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2021
    :))
Comment from Mark D. R.
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Hi Senyai!

With your chosen photo and poem title, your short poem has deep meaning. To suggest an alternative to be more in sync with your poem title, consider entrances** instead of traces.

Mark

** to carry away with delight, wonder, or rapture per my online Merriam Webster lookup

 Comment Written 13-Oct-2021

reply by the author on 14-Oct-2021
    Hi Mark,

    What a great suggestion - entrances her. Yes, to carry away with delight, wonder and or rapture? but if I?m not mistaken, wouldn?t that imply she is entranced by him? Carried away by him? Although, this is taking place I felt my poem revealed more from the man?s point of view. - she is his wonderland? he traces her body with his finger and more (no holds barred).. let the morning, afternoon, night take them where it will. Passion with consent.

    But hey, I am grateful for your suggestion? opened up a whole different take on my poem. You would be surprised how many varied interpretations I received. Eye opening for sure. I had no idea this would happen when I posted it lol

    Have a wonderful Thursday, Mark :))

    Senyai
reply by Mark D. R. on 14-Oct-2021
    Senyai,

    When a poem provides different meanings to readers, you have accomplished a lot. As a man, maybe I would prefer to ?touch? or ?stroke? her rather than ?trace? her LOL

    Mark
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2021
    Oh, I see?good to know 😉
Comment from Raul1
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I see no mistakes in your poem. It's beautifully written. You have written it well in six words. I did enjoy reading your poem. Excellent work! Thank you for sharing!

 Comment Written 13-Oct-2021

reply by the author on 14-Oct-2021
    Hi Raul,

    Thanks for such an encouraging review and warm welcoming thoughts on my poem!

    Have a great day, Raul :))
    Senyai
Comment from Sally Law
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Wow, who knew falling leaves could be so sensual? Six powerful words here in super short verse poetry. The art crowns your lovely work. A pleasure to review.

Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the upcoming contest,
Sally :))

 Comment Written 13-Oct-2021

reply by the author on 14-Oct-2021
    Hi Sally,

    Thank you for this welcoming and warm review! Leaves can be sensual when they twirl down from a tree at just the right angle, didn?t you know? lol

    I enjoyed your comments so much.

    Have a grand Thursday :))
    Senyai
Comment from rjuselius
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This is rather morbid and eerie piece of poetry dear senyai! It kind of gives me the chills. I think you made it for that?
Thank you for sharing!
Good luck!
Blessings and a larger than life hug!
Rebekka x

 Comment Written 13-Oct-2021

reply by the author on 14-Oct-2021
    Hi Rebekka,

    My cryptic lines are interpreted by the reader in whatever scenario they wish?. I am surprised at all the many varied meanings each reader has gleaned from just six words. It has been eye opening for sure :))

    Thanks for taking the time to read and review. I truly appreciate your time.

    Always,
    Senyai
reply by rjuselius on 14-Oct-2021
    My pleasure entirely dear friend <3