Dog Heaven
Phil tried to go to this Heaven.17 total reviews
Comment from Debbie Pope
I really like this, Raul. The issue of where do dogs go when they die is a serious one. They are such sweet, gentle, selfless animals. Exactly as humans should be. The deserve heaven much more than many humans.
It was smart of you to pick up on this in your flash. It's very original and I enjoyed it very much.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2021
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I really like this, Raul. The issue of where do dogs go when they die is a serious one. They are such sweet, gentle, selfless animals. Exactly as humans should be. The deserve heaven much more than many humans.
It was smart of you to pick up on this in your flash. It's very original and I enjoyed it very much.
Comment Written 16-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2021
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Thank you!
Comment from Sanku
Oh I am glad that there is a heaven for the exclusive purpose of keeping Dog's souls.I liked this simple story .may be God prefers dogs!.all the best for the contest
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2021
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Oh I am glad that there is a heaven for the exclusive purpose of keeping Dog's souls.I liked this simple story .may be God prefers dogs!.all the best for the contest
Comment Written 15-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2021
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Thank you!
Comment from Janet Foor
Fun story Raul. My husband has allergies so we don't have any doggies but I can just imagine pet lovers everywhere enjoying reading about Doggie Heaven.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2021
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Fun story Raul. My husband has allergies so we don't have any doggies but I can just imagine pet lovers everywhere enjoying reading about Doggie Heaven.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 13-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2021
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Thank you!
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Spot on at 75 words. This is a cute story.
sugg:
Phil tried to figure out [why. All=>why all] the dogs were in line to go to their Heaven.
sugg: skip a line put this punchline in its own paragraph for max impact:
He walked out pondered where to be next.
He walked out [pondered=>PONDERING] where to be next.
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2021
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Spot on at 75 words. This is a cute story.
sugg:
Phil tried to figure out [why. All=>why all] the dogs were in line to go to their Heaven.
sugg: skip a line put this punchline in its own paragraph for max impact:
He walked out pondered where to be next.
He walked out [pondered=>PONDERING] where to be next.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2021
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Thank you! Is this better?
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He walked out [pondered=>PONDERING] where to be next.
Otherwise--all set. Good tweak!
Comment from Hitcher
A dog heaven, I'm sure to dog lovers this would be a dream come true... but then they are turned away and not allowed to enter dog heaven, that would be a hard one to take, so why did his soul end up there. Interesting!
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2021
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A dog heaven, I'm sure to dog lovers this would be a dream come true... but then they are turned away and not allowed to enter dog heaven, that would be a hard one to take, so why did his soul end up there. Interesting!
Comment Written 13-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2021
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Thank you! They made a mistake.
Comment from Janetsue
This is a positive Flash Fiction entry because the reader continues to think about it after reading the final line. There is much to contemplate...the joy of there being a doggie Heaven, and the answer to Phil's pondered question about the locality of his final destination. Very well written, my friend!
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2021
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This is a positive Flash Fiction entry because the reader continues to think about it after reading the final line. There is much to contemplate...the joy of there being a doggie Heaven, and the answer to Phil's pondered question about the locality of his final destination. Very well written, my friend!
Comment Written 12-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2021
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Thank you!
Comment from Gert sherwood
Good one Raul,
I could picture in my mind of our five dogs waiting to enter heaven.
Let the owners of the dogs go first. Every one will be happy.
Best to you Raul in the contest.
Gert
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2021
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Good one Raul,
I could picture in my mind of our five dogs waiting to enter heaven.
Let the owners of the dogs go first. Every one will be happy.
Best to you Raul in the contest.
Gert
Comment Written 11-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2021
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Thank you!
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You are welcome Raul
Gert
Comment from LJbutterfly
This is a compelling idea...a special heaven for dogs only. The dialogue in your story was clear and realistic. Your story had a great surprise ending. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2021
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This is a compelling idea...a special heaven for dogs only. The dialogue in your story was clear and realistic. Your story had a great surprise ending. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 11-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2021
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Thank you!
Comment from l.raven
HI Raul, LOL my sweet friend...I wouldn't mind
going to dog heaven...I am a true animal lover...
and I have a few of my best doggie friends will be there...
I believe God/Jesus will be there too...
I love your story told sweet guy...very well written Flash Fiction you...Good Luck in the contest...love Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2021
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HI Raul, LOL my sweet friend...I wouldn't mind
going to dog heaven...I am a true animal lover...
and I have a few of my best doggie friends will be there...
I believe God/Jesus will be there too...
I love your story told sweet guy...very well written Flash Fiction you...Good Luck in the contest...love Linda xxoo
Comment Written 11-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2021
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Thank you!
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your so very welcome...always...love xxoo
Comment from Ric Myworld
LOL. That sound like something I might do. Get lost and can't find my way to the right Heaven for human beings. Great job! Thanks thanks for sharing another fine read, Raul. I wish I had a six.
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2021
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LOL. That sound like something I might do. Get lost and can't find my way to the right Heaven for human beings. Great job! Thanks thanks for sharing another fine read, Raul. I wish I had a six.
Comment Written 11-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2021
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Thank you!
