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C Short Walk

a script

8 total reviews 
Comment from pookietoo
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That is a short script. I guess you meant it that way. Keep smiling and best wishes. Hope all is well with you. Take care, and good luck with whatever you write.

 Comment Written 13-Oct-2021

reply by the author on 13-Oct-2021
    Thanks, Pookietoo
reply by pookietoo on 13-Oct-2021
    Welcome.
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2021
    Thanks, Pookietoo
reply by pookietoo on 13-Oct-2021
    Welcome.
Comment from kahpot
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Excellently written, I like the way you have given "Talker" lot longer parts when speaking and it is good to here from Pons again, a wonderful read****kahpot

 Comment Written 10-Oct-2021

reply by the author on 10-Oct-2021
    Thank you, kahpot.
Comment from nomi338
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Did all that conversation drain you? Too much talk can develop a sense of boredom. People's minds start to drift and some might even fall asleep. You must put some pep in your step to make things a bit more lively.

 Comment Written 10-Oct-2021

reply by the author on 10-Oct-2021
    Drink many coffees.
Comment from lyenochka
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Lol. Well, I forgot that Felix is so ill-mannered. I wonder how the Fine Detective agency is doing.
Enjoyed the allusion the the white rabbit from Alice in Wonderland as well as Grace Slick's song...

Suggestion:
is worst than a PBS segment on cat manners. (worse)

 Comment Written 10-Oct-2021

reply by the author on 10-Oct-2021
    I cannot seem to present anything to you without a misspelling of something. I'm curst.
reply by lyenochka on 10-Oct-2021
    Sorry! You want me to stop?
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2021
    Just kidding.
reply by lyenochka on 10-Oct-2021
    😊💞
Comment from BethShelby
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Is this all the same short walk or is it many little short walks? Some of these character are very insulting. Fox is one of the but I do believer that Talker may be even worse.

 Comment Written 10-Oct-2021

reply by the author on 10-Oct-2021
    People! Am I right?
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
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This script feels a bit as though I am diving into the middle of an uncharted stretch of water, with a few indications, but not the most essential ones. I checked for previous scenes, but couldn't find any trace of them. Am I missing something here?

 Comment Written 10-Oct-2021

reply by the author on 10-Oct-2021
    C Short Walk follows B Short Walk which follows ?
    A Short Walk.
reply by Katherine M. (k-11) on 10-Oct-2021
    Ha ha ha. Silly me! Sorry, I will look harder!
Comment from patricia dillon
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This is a very amusing series. Talker sounds as though he would be phenomenal as a reviewer on Fanstory. He would never struggle to make up the 150 characters. Did he quote the White Rabbit?

 Comment Written 10-Oct-2021

reply by the author on 10-Oct-2021
    He says a lot and yes it was from the song. Thanks for taking a look.
reply by patricia dillon on 10-Oct-2021
    You're welcome
Comment from Sally Law
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I liked the wonderland references here and the lateness of the hour. In my past life, I looked just like Alice. The rabbit hole continues.... Lots of harried fun, dear Bill. Sending you my best today as always,
Sal XOs

 Comment Written 10-Oct-2021

reply by the author on 10-Oct-2021
    Thank you, Sal