Hope
A 3-7-5 poetic form13 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
What a perfect remedy for "winter's gray mood" that can take over us when it stays gray everyday! But we can remember Spring and have hope for the light and blooms to come.
Sorry I missed this - must have been for an anonymous contest.
Congratulations again on winning the Cinquain Contest!
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2021
What a perfect remedy for "winter's gray mood" that can take over us when it stays gray everyday! But we can remember Spring and have hope for the light and blooms to come.
Sorry I missed this - must have been for an anonymous contest.
Congratulations again on winning the Cinquain Contest!
Comment Written 23-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2021
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Hi Helen.... yes, "Hope" was for a contest. Sometimes when I am reading through the listings in a contest, something jumps out at me and I respond by entering... LOL. Thanks so much, my friend!!
Melissa
Comment from Dawn Munro
Ahhh, Spring, my favorite time of year! Your words evoke imagery that is so real, I'm shivering at the thought of what is to come very soon. (LOL) Best of luck in the prompt!
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2021
Ahhh, Spring, my favorite time of year! Your words evoke imagery that is so real, I'm shivering at the thought of what is to come very soon. (LOL) Best of luck in the prompt!
Comment Written 11-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2021
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Hello Dawn. Thank yo for your lovely words :)
Melissa
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Hi, Melissa! You're very welcome.
Comment from Wendy G
A well-chosen title for this piece, as it encapsulates what you are saying. The image is a perfect choice to accompany your poem. Best wishes for your entry in the contest.
Wendy
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2021
A well-chosen title for this piece, as it encapsulates what you are saying. The image is a perfect choice to accompany your poem. Best wishes for your entry in the contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 08-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2021
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Thank you Wendy.
Comment from Toni Newell
The title reflects the content. When reading this I felt hope. Spring is a season of renewal and growth. It represents more than a season. I enjoyed reading your piece.
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2021
The title reflects the content. When reading this I felt hope. Spring is a season of renewal and growth. It represents more than a season. I enjoyed reading your piece.
Comment Written 08-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2021
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Thank you Toni!
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You are welcome
Comment from Bill Schott
This 3-7-5, Hope, has the right set up and reminds the readers that even in the coldest, darkest times, there is a shining day waiting.
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2021
This 3-7-5, Hope, has the right set up and reminds the readers that even in the coldest, darkest times, there is a shining day waiting.
Comment Written 08-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2021
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Thank you Bill.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Good play on words in your satori.
Your poem is short, succinct and descriptive. Good syllables count and connection between lines. Good imagery.
Gypsy
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2021
Good play on words in your satori.
Your poem is short, succinct and descriptive. Good syllables count and connection between lines. Good imagery.
Gypsy
Comment Written 08-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2021
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Thank you Gypsy.
Comment from Sally Law
Me, too. I don't have much of a winter here, but I remember my younger years up north, and the ache for warmth and blooms at winter's end.
Sending you my best today as always, and best wishes for the upcoming contest,
Sally :))
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2021
Me, too. I don't have much of a winter here, but I remember my younger years up north, and the ache for warmth and blooms at winter's end.
Sending you my best today as always, and best wishes for the upcoming contest,
Sally :))
Comment Written 08-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2021
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Thanks so much Sally!
Comment from dragonpoet
Melissa,
This haiku expresses how the memory and hope of Spring gets us through the Winter. This seems like and ekphrastic poem. If not you were luck to find such approriate artwork.
Keep writng and stay heatlhy
Joan
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2021
Melissa,
This haiku expresses how the memory and hope of Spring gets us through the Winter. This seems like and ekphrastic poem. If not you were luck to find such approriate artwork.
Keep writng and stay heatlhy
Joan
Comment Written 08-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2021
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Hi Joan... I was lucky to find it after I had written the poem. :). Thank you.
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You're very welcome.
Joan
Comment from Partha Banerjee
Excellent thoughts. Recently, one of my poems also had a similar message. I would structure the words in a different way (and everyone has their own way, and this is my personal suggestion): the first word does not need to stand alone. Just a thought. The picture is perhaps a little too extreme. I would find something less graphic. Just a few snow flakes would do it.
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reply by the author on 07-Oct-2021
Excellent thoughts. Recently, one of my poems also had a similar message. I would structure the words in a different way (and everyone has their own way, and this is my personal suggestion): the first word does not need to stand alone. Just a thought. The picture is perhaps a little too extreme. I would find something less graphic. Just a few snow flakes would do it.
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Comment Written 07-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2021
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Thank you Parthia.
Comment from dellsworthpoet
The poem meets the requirements. The flow is good. The message is concise. The poem stays on point. The picture adds to the feeling of the poem.
A good read. Thanks for sharing and good luck.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2021
The poem meets the requirements. The flow is good. The message is concise. The poem stays on point. The picture adds to the feeling of the poem.
A good read. Thanks for sharing and good luck.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2021
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Thanks so much.
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You are welcome