Comment from Elizabeth Emerald

Excellent

Heads up--free verse is not supposed to have a consistent rhyming scheme--sugg: save this compelling and thought-provoking poem for another contest and swap in something else.

 Comment Written 08-Oct-2021

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reply by the author on 09-Oct-2021

I think of free verse as con-verse-ation. Thanks for the review...John

Comment from royowen

Excellent

The on gift I have had all my life is, I can be honest with myself, (humans struggle with truth, it is way too inscrutable for us) but I don't kid myself that my talent will save me...it won't! Chance is a vehicle we fly by, and it's very fickle, I'm not afraid of life or its consequences, but I need hope, and that still need no variables, and what I have is absolutely perfect, I'm not, but IT is. I'm wondering why you enter a very good ballad style poem in a free verse contest? Beautifully written thought, good luck, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 08-Oct-2021

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reply by the author on 09-Oct-2021

I think of free verse as con-verse-ation...John

reply by royowen on 09-Oct-2021

Well done

Comment from Goodadvicechan

Excellent

Good choice of picture - everything is in our mind.

We are misled by our society's misinformation or so called hidden truth as said in the poem: "The truth's still here 'neath life's rubble
Society covers it well..."

Our country will be perfect if everyone follows what you said: Scrap all our lies and find our being. We live in God's own perfection.."

Thanks for sharing

 Comment Written 07-Oct-2021

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reply by the author on 08-Oct-2021

Many thanks

Comment from Jerome Goldberg

Excellent

Dear Mystery Poet - your verse is excellent and your message is clear and relevant. May the election be fair and the winds of good fortune blow your way. - Jerry

 Comment Written 07-Oct-2021

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reply by the author on 07-Oct-2021

Thanks

Comment from amahra

Excellent

Great Free Verse Self-improvement entry. I really liked the entire poem and below are my favorite lines. I believe them wholeheartedly.

Scrap all our lies and find our being
We live in God's own perfection [I love these two lines.]

 Comment Written 07-Oct-2021

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reply by the author on 07-Oct-2021

Thanks

Comment from RPSaxena

Excellent

Hello Friend,
Nice Free Verse Poem, but as General Fiction in Prose Section! It matters little.
You have beautifully depicted where the life's perfection lies. Soul/Spirit and not the body is the reality.
The last stanza is particularly noteworthy.

 Comment Written 07-Oct-2021

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reply by the author on 07-Oct-2021

Thank you much

reply by RPSaxena on 08-Oct-2021

Welcome!

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Great reflection on how we can keep improving ourselves if we are not deceived by "ego." We can keep learning each day, and seek God's Truth and find that we are fully accepted and valued in Him.
Best wishes in the contest!

 Comment Written 07-Oct-2021

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reply by the author on 07-Oct-2021

Thanks

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

Your poem reads well, Mystery Author, with great imagery and truth. The lines flow smoothly with attention to detail. You give readers much to ponder. The rules are vague--'some rhyming' use words like 'I am, I will, I can.' I know you started with the "I' part. I read much rhyming--I hope the judges don't think there is too much--based on the vagueness of the rules. Your poem tells it like it is. We all become blind to the real truth. We become so ensconced in what we want, believe, and perceive--without looking at the whole picture.
Best wishes in the contest.
Respectfully, Jan

 Comment Written 06-Oct-2021

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reply by the author on 06-Oct-2021

Thanks

Comment from pookietoo

Excellent

Nice poem about perfection, nice rhyming, but I was hoping you would use the words I am, I can, I will more in your poem. Have a wonderful day. Take care.

 Comment Written 06-Oct-2021

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reply by the author on 06-Oct-2021

Thank you

reply by pookietoo on 06-Oct-2021

Welcome.

Comment from Wendy G

Excellent

Your views are interesting and different - and thought provoking. Your poem has been written with thoughtfulness and care, and I wish you well for the contest.
Wendy

 Comment Written 06-Oct-2021

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reply by the author on 06-Oct-2021

Thank you