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Comment from C. Gale Burnett
I wish I had a six :(
Your title was perfection for, indeed, we are each a work in progress.
Your heart and spirit really showed through in your free verse poem. I love your confidence as you claim to be a child of God's and though you are not perfect, He loves you for who you are and where you are.
Your poem expresses your perfection being made in the likeness of Christ. I understand perfection being spiritual growth and maturity. We cannot change without God's strength and direction, and I like how you expressed your dependence on Him, absorbing His light and sharing it with others.
I also love very much your words of confidence
Romans 12:1 was an excellent choice of scripture to quote, and your chosen artwork is the perfect accompaniment.
The best thing I can say about your poem is that if someone were to doubt God's love is real, your free verse testimony could have them pondering in a good way. You made your poem about you and was not preachy or trying to convert someone.d
sorry for all the babbling ... I'm a wee bit overly tired tonight :)
Great contest entry :)
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2021
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I wish I had a six :(
Your title was perfection for, indeed, we are each a work in progress.
Your heart and spirit really showed through in your free verse poem. I love your confidence as you claim to be a child of God's and though you are not perfect, He loves you for who you are and where you are.
Your poem expresses your perfection being made in the likeness of Christ. I understand perfection being spiritual growth and maturity. We cannot change without God's strength and direction, and I like how you expressed your dependence on Him, absorbing His light and sharing it with others.
I also love very much your words of confidence
Romans 12:1 was an excellent choice of scripture to quote, and your chosen artwork is the perfect accompaniment.
The best thing I can say about your poem is that if someone were to doubt God's love is real, your free verse testimony could have them pondering in a good way. You made your poem about you and was not preachy or trying to convert someone.d
sorry for all the babbling ... I'm a wee bit overly tired tonight :)
Great contest entry :)
Comment Written 07-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2021
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Gale, thank you so much for this super encouraging review. It is very much appreciated, as your comments indicated that you understood perfectly my thoughts.
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You are so welcome, dear friend, and I meant every word.
Comment from tfawcus
It looks as if you have followers the contest rules to the letter in producing this self-improvement poem. The positive 'I' statements are just what are needed to propel one out of the doldrums at times.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2021
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It looks as if you have followers the contest rules to the letter in producing this self-improvement poem. The positive 'I' statements are just what are needed to propel one out of the doldrums at times.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2021
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Thank you so much. I greatly appreciate your fine review.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Being comfortable with who we are and accepting our flaws gives us some self esteem and confidence. We are not perfect, but as long as we do our best, then we can be proud of ourselves, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2021
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Being comfortable with who we are and accepting our flaws gives us some self esteem and confidence. We are not perfect, but as long as we do our best, then we can be proud of ourselves, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x
Comment Written 07-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2021
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Absolutely true. Thank you so much for reviewing. Appreciated.
Comment from SMASH52
How profound! You've given a wonderful "short list" about how good our God is. I am because He's the Great I Am; I can because He says I can do all things He's called me to do; I will because of His will, not mine.
Consider getting all the "am"s together, etc. in order of the last three lines.
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2021
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How profound! You've given a wonderful "short list" about how good our God is. I am because He's the Great I Am; I can because He says I can do all things He's called me to do; I will because of His will, not mine.
Consider getting all the "am"s together, etc. in order of the last three lines.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2021
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Thank you for review and advice. Greatly appreciated. I did consider that but then decided to keep it this way so the topics would be together. But I'll take another look. Many thanks.
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You're welcome.
Comment from Cogitator
The only way I know how to get my ego to capitulate to the truth is by not attaching meaning to things. Self-improvement is just removing lies from the truth we are all born with. The Christ Nature is in all of us, if we are to believe Jesus of Nazareth...John
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2021
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The only way I know how to get my ego to capitulate to the truth is by not attaching meaning to things. Self-improvement is just removing lies from the truth we are all born with. The Christ Nature is in all of us, if we are to believe Jesus of Nazareth...John
Comment Written 05-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2021
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Thank you so much for your thoughtful - and thought-provoking - review. Much appreciated. The issue is how to remove lies from the truth of course.
Comment from Mary Shifman
This is an intriguing poem and an interesting way of looking at things. I think that if we are truly living and not stagnating, we are works in progress. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2021
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This is an intriguing poem and an interesting way of looking at things. I think that if we are truly living and not stagnating, we are works in progress. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2021
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Thank you very much Mary. You are exactly right. Thoughtful review, much appreciated.
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You are very welcome.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This Self-Improvement Free Verse Poem writing prompt entry speaks your state of living is in progress, you will try to renew your mind; what you can you will do and grow; well said; well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2021
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This Self-Improvement Free Verse Poem writing prompt entry speaks your state of living is in progress, you will try to renew your mind; what you can you will do and grow; well said; well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR
Comment Written 05-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2021
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Thank you very much for your thoughtful review. Always appreciated.
Comment from Livia Lynch
Amazing contest entry that respects the assignment.
I genuinely adore the pace and the message. Keep up the good work and best of luck!
Hope you are having a wonderful day.
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2021
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Amazing contest entry that respects the assignment.
I genuinely adore the pace and the message. Keep up the good work and best of luck!
Hope you are having a wonderful day.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2021
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Thank you so much for this super review. Greatly appreciated!
Comment from Paul McFarland
You've covered all the bases here. I think St. Peter is going to wave you right on through the express lane. This should do very well in the contest.
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2021
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You've covered all the bases here. I think St. Peter is going to wave you right on through the express lane. This should do very well in the contest.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2021
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Lol. Mind you, if he?s at the door he will remember that he stuffed up quite a few times during his time on earth. He was also a work in progress like the rest of us! Thanks so much for reviewing. How?s Patrick coming along?
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Patrick will be back in a week or two if things go right.
