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Timely Advice

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Comment from dragonpoet
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This is a bit sarcastically funny. I think this was good advice, but I think the present Nooboo was looking for advice on not to get bloody in the future. Although the blood and entrails could be a metaphor for the spaghetti and sauce.
Congrats on the third place finish in the contest.
Keep writnig and stay healthy
Joan

 Comment Written 20-Oct-2021


reply by the author on 20-Oct-2021
    . Here is a little background:

    Professor Kendrick had recently discovered that the Gem of Bosco Bay, brought back from a mining expedition on the far side of the moon, was an adequate power source for the interdimensional destabilizer.

    After building the anti-contourilator and having both the gem and a fragment of swiss quartz aligned in the wisp beam, he initiated a test to break through to the fifth dimension.

    He may have been successful, but during the experiment he was vaporized, leaving his legally joined partner without an LJP, and also his son, Nooboo, without a father.

    It so happened that on that same day, Nooboo, who had just finished his spaghetti dinner, walked by the anti-contourilator, which was still on and looked to be a fun toy with which to play. He pressed a button and immediately disappeared.
reply by dragonpoet on 20-Oct-2021
    Thanks for the backgroud.
    Joan
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
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Congrats on your prize Bill! This is so clever--blood and entrails. Ingenious set-up for the punch. Fine work in a flash. The alien name adds a touch of whimsy. Cheers. LIZ

 Comment Written 13-Oct-2021


reply by the author on 13-Oct-2021
    Thank you, Liz. I wrote a brief backstory afterwards that explains the situation a bit more.
Comment from C. Gale Burnett
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Oh, my gosh. I missed seeing this awesome write about Nooboo (love that name) showing up at the dinner table. Great flash, as my mind had been drawn in a different direction up until the ending paragraphs. The last line was a hoot. Short, decisive, wise advice, to the point. A great read!

 Comment Written 13-Oct-2021


reply by the author on 13-Oct-2021
    Thank you, CG
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2021
    Thank you, CG
reply by C. Gale Burnett on 14-Oct-2021
    You are very welcome.
Comment from Jerome Goldberg
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Bill - This is truly profound. Many say use both a fork and a spoon and curl it. And, others say use both a fork and a knife and cut it. But you have cut to the quick and said go for it. Hope there are lots of napkins nearby - Jerry

 Comment Written 06-Oct-2021


reply by the author on 06-Oct-2021
    Here is a little background:

    Professor Kendrick had recently discovered that the Gem of Bosco Bay, brought back from a mining expedition on the far side of the moon, was an adequate power source for the interdimensional destabilizer.

    After building the anti-contourilator and having both the gem and a fragment of swiss quartz aligned in the wisp beam, he initiated a test to break through to the fifth dimension.

    He may have been successful, but during the experiment he was vaporized, leaving his legally joined partner without an LJP, and also his son, Nooboo, without a father.

    It so happened that on that same day, Nooboo, who had just finished his spaghetti dinner, walked by the anti-contourilator, which was still on and looked to be a fun toy with which to play. He pressed a button and immediately disappeared.
reply by Jerome Goldberg on 07-Oct-2021
    Bill - Thanks for all the back ground - I guess that I missed a few exciting episodes - Jerry
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2021
    No, I added this backstory for a member who couldn?t grasp the story.
Comment from juliaSjames
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This made me giggle. I believe the idea is to anchor the fork with the spoon as you twirl the spaghetti then pop it into your mouth! Doesn't work for me. I'm reduced to slurping and biting and using a zillion paper napkins.

Seems that Nooboo used the direct approach and ate his doggy style. Lololol

Fun write with a bit of a twist. Wouldn't it be great if our doppelganger appeared from time to time to help us avoid egregious mistakes?

Good luck!

Stay safe and blessed

Julia

 Comment Written 05-Oct-2021


reply by the author on 05-Oct-2021
    Thank you, Julia
Comment from nancy_e_davis
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I'd say that is good advice, Bill. I'd like to see you eat that meal with a spoon. It would take all day! HA HA
This was indeed timely advice.
Well done.
Nancy:)

 Comment Written 05-Oct-2021


reply by the author on 05-Oct-2021
    Thank you, Nancy
Comment from BethShelby
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I am supposed to get from this that Nooboo used the spoon on his own spaghetti and got it all over his face. Come to think of it, it probably would be hard to pick up spaghetti with a spoon.

 Comment Written 05-Oct-2021


reply by the author on 05-Oct-2021
    Then there?s time travel.
Comment from Mary Vigasin
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Interesting and fun read. Would'nt be interesting to have your future self give
Advice?
Here inspite of being covered in blood the future tells him just to use a fork.
Nuts but fun.
Regards
Mary

 Comment Written 05-Oct-2021


reply by the author on 05-Oct-2021
    He?s actually covered in spaghetti. : )
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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Ha ha ha, you made me smile with this magical write Bill, very inventive and I just loved it, no sixes left, but this deserves one, you entertained me here, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 05-Oct-2021


reply by the author on 05-Oct-2021
    Thank you, Dolly
Comment from Jay Squires
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... as opposed to following the pie-eating contest rules of using no utensils but only his face. I'm curious, though, whether Nooboo from the future won the spaghetti eating contest. That would have been incentive enough. LOL, good luck with the contest, Bill.

 Comment Written 04-Oct-2021


reply by the author on 04-Oct-2021
    Thank you, Jay. If there had been a contest, Nooboo would have won it.
reply by Jay Squires on 04-Oct-2021
    Wthout a doubt!