Football - A Novel
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Comment from Wendy G
An excellent chapter! Full of interest and making the reader want more. Are those dogs free to search for the intruder? Exciting game and consequences. Looking forward to the next.
Wendy
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2021
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An excellent chapter! Full of interest and making the reader want more. Are those dogs free to search for the intruder? Exciting game and consequences. Looking forward to the next.
Wendy
Comment Written 03-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from judiverse
I hope your wrist is mending nicely. You're brave to try to do the typing. Lots of problems in this chapter. Putting Jordan in the game so soon after his injury was risky, but it turned out all right except for the other coach having a fit. Gabriel was wise not to take the bait and get into a fight. Shows he has matured since his days as a pro player. Low batteries in the cell phone and a flat tire add to the problems. I'm wondering what happened to the spare tire and the jack. How did it happen they were missing? The open mike thing was an embarrassing, but that sort of thing does happen. Great work. I hope your wrist continues to improve. You're brave to try writing by finger typing. judi
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2021
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I hope your wrist is mending nicely. You're brave to try to do the typing. Lots of problems in this chapter. Putting Jordan in the game so soon after his injury was risky, but it turned out all right except for the other coach having a fit. Gabriel was wise not to take the bait and get into a fight. Shows he has matured since his days as a pro player. Low batteries in the cell phone and a flat tire add to the problems. I'm wondering what happened to the spare tire and the jack. How did it happen they were missing? The open mike thing was an embarrassing, but that sort of thing does happen. Great work. I hope your wrist continues to improve. You're brave to try writing by finger typing. judi
Comment Written 03-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2021
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Thank you for the kind review. Many new cars come without a jack and a spare. It happened to me and didn't find out about it until I had a flat. I called the car dealer and was told they rarely do it any more.
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Thanks so much for your review and comments. The car I have is about 15 years old now, so I have no experience with the new ones. I couldn't imagine a car not having a jack and a spare tire. That certainly added to the complications. judi
Comment from Judy Lawless
With all the excitement you've put into this chapter, the length goes unnoticed, Barbara. I like how you put a stop to the kissing to avoid further escalation. :) The football game was a real surprise, as was the flat tire. Well done.
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2021
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With all the excitement you've put into this chapter, the length goes unnoticed, Barbara. I like how you put a stop to the kissing to avoid further escalation. :) The football game was a real surprise, as was the flat tire. Well done.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ben Colder
I did not know you hurt your wrist. Your story is as always good and you did get the two together now to settle the future. My prayers for you. Good one, Barb
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2021
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I did not know you hurt your wrist. Your story is as always good and you did get the two together now to settle the future. My prayers for you. Good one, Barb
Comment Written 03-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Begin Again
Katherine sent a text Gabriel. (to)
sorry about your wrist, Barbara. Hope they can somehow fix it without surgery. Take care of yourself. In the meantime, the story was absolutely terrific as usual. I love how the every day things are bringing them closer and how Gabriel is giving it his best to not be the person Katherine shuns.
Well done! I enjoyed it very much. Hugs, Carol
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2021
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Katherine sent a text Gabriel. (to)
sorry about your wrist, Barbara. Hope they can somehow fix it without surgery. Take care of yourself. In the meantime, the story was absolutely terrific as usual. I love how the every day things are bringing them closer and how Gabriel is giving it his best to not be the person Katherine shuns.
Well done! I enjoyed it very much. Hugs, Carol
Comment Written 03-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2021
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Thank you for the kind review and understanding.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Barbara, I have somehow miscalculated, so no six left over for this wonderful chapter. I'm so sorry. I hope they can soon show the world what they feel for each other. It's about time. I only found a minor thing:
Katherine sent a text Gabriel. = Katherine sent a text to Gabriel.
Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2021
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Hi Barbara, I have somehow miscalculated, so no six left over for this wonderful chapter. I'm so sorry. I hope they can soon show the world what they feel for each other. It's about time. I only found a minor thing:
Katherine sent a text Gabriel. = Katherine sent a text to Gabriel.
Ulla:)))
Comment Written 03-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2021
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Thank you for the kind review. Not a problem with the six.
Comment from Sankey
So sorry I forgot about your wrist. In spite of everything, still a great read.
Just a couple of things to look at. that'd put you and (the??)boys in jeopardy."
EITHER Katherine sent a text (to)Gabriel.
OR Katherine texted Gabriel.
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2021
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So sorry I forgot about your wrist. In spite of everything, still a great read.
Just a couple of things to look at. that'd put you and (the??)boys in jeopardy."
EITHER Katherine sent a text (to)Gabriel.
OR Katherine texted Gabriel.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2021
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Thank you for the kind review and catching the errors..
Comment from Anne Johnston
Another great chapter, very well done, considering that you have a broken wrist. I hope you do not need surgery, but maybe that will be the answer.
I am used to reading a book in a few hours, so taking this chapter by chapter is good for me - helps my patience.
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2021
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Another great chapter, very well done, considering that you have a broken wrist. I hope you do not need surgery, but maybe that will be the answer.
I am used to reading a book in a few hours, so taking this chapter by chapter is good for me - helps my patience.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2021
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Thank you for the kind review and understanding.
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You are welcome
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
You nailed it again--brilliantly nuanced interaction.
typos:
Once the ladies and the three boys found a seat in Viking Stadium, Katherine [OMIT sent a] texted Gabriel.
Once Gabriel received the text he faced the visitor's stands and searched. [When he had eyes on ???], he grinned and waved.
Harold â?"
Gabriel â?"
Gabriel checked [it=>HIS] text.
As she bite=>BIT her lower lip
Sorry about your wrist--hadn't known that! How/when?
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2021
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You nailed it again--brilliantly nuanced interaction.
typos:
Once the ladies and the three boys found a seat in Viking Stadium, Katherine [OMIT sent a] texted Gabriel.
Once Gabriel received the text he faced the visitor's stands and searched. [When he had eyes on ???], he grinned and waved.
Harold â?"
Gabriel â?"
Gabriel checked [it=>HIS] text.
As she bite=>BIT her lower lip
Sorry about your wrist--hadn't known that! How/when?
Comment Written 03-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2021
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A week ago Friday. I put everything on last weeks post. I must have made the corrections as you were reading. Thank you for the support.
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Perhaps I missed last week's post --- will rectify!
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I'm caught up--sorry for the oversight!
Comment from AJ McCall
It's fine, Barbara. Do what you must in order to post but be safe at the same time. I can't wait until Gabriel and Katherine can be together by themselves!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! (Ugh, it's so annoying with how long this is taking lol. But I'm in for the ride.) I'm not much of a football fan, don't really watch the sport but I enjoyed this chapter. And let, me say I'm very glad Gabriel kept his cool. All men need to.
You do have several typos:
Katherine (sent a texted) Gabriel.
"Dad, do something about that (da)...stupid mic!
Harold (â?") "Son, what were you thinking?"
Gabriel( â?")
Once Gabriel received the text( )he faced the visitor's stands and searched. When he had eyes on(), he grinned and waved.
Can't wait for the next chapter!
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2021
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It's fine, Barbara. Do what you must in order to post but be safe at the same time. I can't wait until Gabriel and Katherine can be together by themselves!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! (Ugh, it's so annoying with how long this is taking lol. But I'm in for the ride.) I'm not much of a football fan, don't really watch the sport but I enjoyed this chapter. And let, me say I'm very glad Gabriel kept his cool. All men need to.
You do have several typos:
Katherine (sent a texted) Gabriel.
"Dad, do something about that (da)...stupid mic!
Harold (â?") "Son, what were you thinking?"
Gabriel( â?")
Once Gabriel received the text( )he faced the visitor's stands and searched. When he had eyes on(), he grinned and waved.
Can't wait for the next chapter!
Comment Written 03-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2021
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I have made the corrections. Thank you.
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You're welcome!
