Football - A Novel
Viewing comments for Chapter 55 "Football Chapter 29 part 1"A mother faces life's struggles.
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Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Barbara,Wilkey,
Lengthy, of course, but Interesting!
Author Note makes the picture crystal clear. Earlier I was thinking where about 'Football?"
It's a lovely piece of Romance Fiction having captivating flow throughout from the beginning to the end. The story is moving ahead depicting live 'Football Match as well as Romance!"
These lines are Particularly noteworthy: "He did deserve it, but..........He winked at Katherine. "We'll talk at home."
Entertaining as well as Educative!
SUPERB!!
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2021
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Hello Barbara,Wilkey,
Lengthy, of course, but Interesting!
Author Note makes the picture crystal clear. Earlier I was thinking where about 'Football?"
It's a lovely piece of Romance Fiction having captivating flow throughout from the beginning to the end. The story is moving ahead depicting live 'Football Match as well as Romance!"
These lines are Particularly noteworthy: "He did deserve it, but..........He winked at Katherine. "We'll talk at home."
Entertaining as well as Educative!
SUPERB!!
Comment Written 06-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2021
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Thank you for the encouragement.
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Barbara.Wilkey, Most Welcome!
With best wishes,
~ RP
Comment from Ric Myworld
It's always a pleasure to read another of your feel good chapters every week. And I seldom have anything to offer but praise. However, this week, I have a question. When would a football game ever end in a score of 8 to 0? I mean, that would have meant that on the games only touchdown, they went for two points rather than kick a field goal. Which would never happen. Just a thought. Have a wonderful week!
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2021
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It's always a pleasure to read another of your feel good chapters every week. And I seldom have anything to offer but praise. However, this week, I have a question. When would a football game ever end in a score of 8 to 0? I mean, that would have meant that on the games only touchdown, they went for two points rather than kick a field goal. Which would never happen. Just a thought. Have a wonderful week!
Comment Written 06-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2021
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I have seen it happen. Thank y ou fir the kind review.
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I'm sure you have, but it would be foolish to go for 2 and not get it. Which would leave you with 6, only taking a touchdown and an extra point to beat you. I'm not being critical. I just coached football for over 40 years and I'm trying to be helpful. Have a great rest of your week!
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You're correct. Gabriel is known for taking risks. He did it in the first game too.
Comment from tfawcus
A fast-moving episode with plenty of romance woven into the game and some humour, too. These are an engaging set of characters. Glad to hear the wrist is getting better - I hope you won't need surgery. All good wishes, Tony
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2021
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A fast-moving episode with plenty of romance woven into the game and some humour, too. These are an engaging set of characters. Glad to hear the wrist is getting better - I hope you won't need surgery. All good wishes, Tony
Comment Written 06-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Cogitator
I seldom read fiction or comment on it, but you deserve kudos for a good write. The content is good. Very imaginative and creative. I will check again in the future...John
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2021
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I seldom read fiction or comment on it, but you deserve kudos for a good write. The content is good. Very imaginative and creative. I will check again in the future...John
Comment Written 05-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2021
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Thank you! I hope you do return.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Thanks for the update, barbara.
-I am glad to here that things are better.
-I don't see how you do all of this typing.
-I enjoyed the story and the continuing
relationship of Gabe and Katherine.
-I like their approach to things and
their honesty about their feelings.
-The football game segment was great,
and that coach sure had a nerve.
-I wonder if you ever experienced
a situation like that with your sons
or at one of the football games in general
where a coach goes ballistic.
-I thought Gabe gave a very good
answer to Jeremy's question.
-I also liked how the boys stepped
up to protect Jordan.
-I enjoyed reading it.
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reply by the author on 04-Oct-2021
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-Thanks for the update, barbara.
-I am glad to here that things are better.
-I don't see how you do all of this typing.
-I enjoyed the story and the continuing
relationship of Gabe and Katherine.
-I like their approach to things and
their honesty about their feelings.
-The football game segment was great,
and that coach sure had a nerve.
-I wonder if you ever experienced
a situation like that with your sons
or at one of the football games in general
where a coach goes ballistic.
-I thought Gabe gave a very good
answer to Jeremy's question.
-I also liked how the boys stepped
up to protect Jordan.
-I enjoyed reading it.
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Comment Written 04-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2021
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I actually saw a coach once hit one of his own players, on an opposing team. He was arrested. Thank you for the kind review.
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You are welcome, barbara, and thanks for sharing. I guess it shouldn't be surprising, but it always is, and sad, too. Some people don't realize what they are doing to kids.
Comment from amahra
Another fine chapter! Like the way the story is moving along with the two main characters Katherine and Gabriel. Looking forward to more adventures with the next.
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2021
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Another fine chapter! Like the way the story is moving along with the two main characters Katherine and Gabriel. Looking forward to more adventures with the next.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I think you did a really good job typing all those words one handed. My posts were always that long, and no one complained, and I'm certainly not moaning about yours! It's good to have a good length to read. That was a good game, but I'm sure there will be some questions from Katherine, lol. Anther well written chapter, Barbara, well done!! :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2021
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I think you did a really good job typing all those words one handed. My posts were always that long, and no one complained, and I'm certainly not moaning about yours! It's good to have a good length to read. That was a good game, but I'm sure there will be some questions from Katherine, lol. Anther well written chapter, Barbara, well done!! :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 04-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2021
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Thank you for the kind review and understanding.
Comment from Sanku
The chapter is full of energy. The football game ,the outburst,Gabriel's wise reactions -and then the flat tyre.These incidents flow in a smooth and orderly fashion..
Hope you won't need surgery.
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2021
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The chapter is full of energy. The football game ,the outburst,Gabriel's wise reactions -and then the flat tyre.These incidents flow in a smooth and orderly fashion..
Hope you won't need surgery.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Jay Squires
I agree with Katherine that a two-point conversion was a stupid strategy. But they won anyway. A good chapter. The spelling things I pointed out were probably due to your hunt-and-peck method. No charge.
Once the ladies and the three boys found a seat in Viking Stadium, Katherine sent a texted Gabriel. [I'm sure you've corrected it by now, but "Katherine sent a TEXT TO Gabriel.]
As she bite her lower lip, Katherine texted Gabriel again. [As she BIT her lower lip,...]
He pulled a jack and spare tire from Gabriel's pick-up. [You might have Gabriel mention how lucky they were that the spare matched their flat tire. Some tires won't fit at all.]
Good job, Barbara! Get well.
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2021
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I agree with Katherine that a two-point conversion was a stupid strategy. But they won anyway. A good chapter. The spelling things I pointed out were probably due to your hunt-and-peck method. No charge.
Once the ladies and the three boys found a seat in Viking Stadium, Katherine sent a texted Gabriel. [I'm sure you've corrected it by now, but "Katherine sent a TEXT TO Gabriel.]
As she bite her lower lip, Katherine texted Gabriel again. [As she BIT her lower lip,...]
He pulled a jack and spare tire from Gabriel's pick-up. [You might have Gabriel mention how lucky they were that the spare matched their flat tire. Some tires won't fit at all.]
Good job, Barbara! Get well.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2021
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I have already made the corrections. I need to do something about the flat tire. You're the second person to mention it.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Barbra
This chapter has many places that makes your writing stand out.
Here is one of your parts that stood out---
Dad, we have a live mic." He turned and saw the Viking's coach grab Floyd's face mask and shook him. He ran, stood between the coach and the teenager, and ordered the boy to the sidelines. He locked his fingers behind his back and then yelled, "You can say or do whatever you want to me, but don't ever touch my player again."
A long with other parts that drew my attention
I saw errors through out, I believe you already know what they are.
I read what is going on with your broken wrist, please let us here on Fanstory know how you are doing
Gert
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2021
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Barbra
This chapter has many places that makes your writing stand out.
Here is one of your parts that stood out---
Dad, we have a live mic." He turned and saw the Viking's coach grab Floyd's face mask and shook him. He ran, stood between the coach and the teenager, and ordered the boy to the sidelines. He locked his fingers behind his back and then yelled, "You can say or do whatever you want to me, but don't ever touch my player again."
A long with other parts that drew my attention
I saw errors through out, I believe you already know what they are.
I read what is going on with your broken wrist, please let us here on Fanstory know how you are doing
Gert
Comment Written 03-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2021
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Thank you for the kind review. I think I've fixed most the errors.
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Barb you are so welcome
Gert
You are most welcome
