Lesson from a Wise Old Bird
Inspired by the Idiom of The Wise Old Owl24 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Shauna,
This poem teaches two important lessons. Old people are really wise some times. And, listening is a good habit to have. You will find and keep more friends listening than talking or gossiping.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Congrats on winning the contest.
Joan
  |
Hi Shauna,
This poem teaches two important lessons. Old people are really wise some times. And, listening is a good habit to have. You will find and keep more friends listening than talking or gossiping.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Congrats on winning the contest.
Joan
Comment Written 18-Jan-2023
Comment from Janice Canerdy
It's so easy to see why this poem won the contest! You have told a great story with a powerful moral, a lesson all need to learn about exercising the mouth less and the ears more. :-)
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2021
|
It's so easy to see why this poem won the contest! You have told a great story with a powerful moral, a lesson all need to learn about exercising the mouth less and the ears more. :-)
Comment Written 26-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2021
-
Thanks so much for your kind review, Janice! This was a fun one to write. Sending good wishes as we wrap November!
Comment from Tina Crute
I remember that old wise poem. You did a great job of representing that same theme of holding our tongues. Although the rhymes are appreciated and commended, I could easily see this written as a story, a fable of sorts. I used to love those when I was a kid. I always looked forward to the moral of the story. I love how you included that at the end!
Well done!
Tina
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2021
|
I remember that old wise poem. You did a great job of representing that same theme of holding our tongues. Although the rhymes are appreciated and commended, I could easily see this written as a story, a fable of sorts. I used to love those when I was a kid. I always looked forward to the moral of the story. I love how you included that at the end!
Well done!
Tina
Comment Written 25-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2021
-
Thank you for your nice review, Tina! Oh, good idea! I will have to try writing a fable sometime. I used to love reading those, too. Sending good wishes your way as we wrap November!
Comment from bob cullen
Truly wonderful. What a pity our politicians don't practice Ollie's wisdom. The rhyme and meter here flowed beautifully. I wish more poetry on Fanstory was this good.
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2021
|
Truly wonderful. What a pity our politicians don't practice Ollie's wisdom. The rhyme and meter here flowed beautifully. I wish more poetry on Fanstory was this good.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2021
-
Dear Bob, thank you so much for your very kind review! It is so fun to work with words. I appreciate your taking the time to read and review my little poem. Sending good wishes your way as we wrap November!
Comment from Pantygynt
this is a fine expansion of the old owl poem. I first heard of it when teaching in England and the final line went 'Why can't I be like that wise old bird'. As I remember the English version as the owl sat in an oak but effectively it is the same poem. Congratulations on winning the contest.
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2021
|
this is a fine expansion of the old owl poem. I first heard of it when teaching in England and the final line went 'Why can't I be like that wise old bird'. As I remember the English version as the owl sat in an oak but effectively it is the same poem. Congratulations on winning the contest.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2021
-
Thank you so much for your kind review! I appreciate your taking time to read it. Sending good wishes your way as we wrap November!
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This General Children's Poetry, based on old fables or idioms, inspired by the idiom of the wise old owl, old people changing the world contest entry, speaks simply exemplary lessons from a wise old bird with a moral, that old people can also change the world good lessons; well said, well done, thanks 4 sharing this and nice reviewing this legible post on white background, post more, fast, time is limited, precious, rare (good) gift, I, DR, wrote 114 books, R 123300/N21. ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2021
|
This General Children's Poetry, based on old fables or idioms, inspired by the idiom of the wise old owl, old people changing the world contest entry, speaks simply exemplary lessons from a wise old bird with a moral, that old people can also change the world good lessons; well said, well done, thanks 4 sharing this and nice reviewing this legible post on white background, post more, fast, time is limited, precious, rare (good) gift, I, DR, wrote 114 books, R 123300/N21. ALCREATOR
Comment Written 24-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2021
-
Thank you for your kind review! Wow, 114 books--I better get busy!!
Comment from Liz O'Neill
This is a striking image: ""Now hold on," Grandpa said one day. He stopped his rocker quick." I love wordplay. This one is fun: "what a hoot!" I can see why this won: "Though Ollie's gramps was no spring chick and long of beak, it's true." I need to take this advice seriously: ""Try list'ning more and talking less about your friend. This is well done.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2021
|
This is a striking image: ""Now hold on," Grandpa said one day. He stopped his rocker quick." I love wordplay. This one is fun: "what a hoot!" I can see why this won: "Though Ollie's gramps was no spring chick and long of beak, it's true." I need to take this advice seriously: ""Try list'ning more and talking less about your friend. This is well done.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2021
-
Dear Liz, thanks so much for your kind and thoughtful review. This is a fun surprise! This contest challenged me to think about well-known idioms, and the wise old owl popped to mind. Thank you for reading!
Comment from CL Huth
Aw, this is so cute! And so true! Sometimes we're so focused on us and our response that we forget about other people and how to listen. Great job on this piece! Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2021
|
Aw, this is so cute! And so true! Sometimes we're so focused on us and our response that we forget about other people and how to listen. Great job on this piece! Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2021
-
Thank you so very much for reading and for your review! It was a fun challenge to think about idioms I know. The wise old owl just popped to mind! Happy Thanksgiving to you!
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written poem you have penned for the Old People Changing the World writing prompt. You used very good descriptive and very true words. Very nice imagery and very good moral, especially for this day and age. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2021
 |
This is a very well written poem you have penned for the Old People Changing the World writing prompt. You used very good descriptive and very true words. Very nice imagery and very good moral, especially for this day and age. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
Comment Written 22-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2021
-
Dear Teri, thanks so much for reading and for your kind review and stars! It was a fun challenge, and the wise old owl just popped to mind. Sending Thanksgiving greetings your way!
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
You sure deserve an excellent rating on your poem. Liked reading it. The grandpa gave very good advice in this poem. If we listened more to each other, probably life would be better.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2021
|
You sure deserve an excellent rating on your poem. Liked reading it. The grandpa gave very good advice in this poem. If we listened more to each other, probably life would be better.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2021
-
Thanks so much, Rosemary, for your kind review and stars! It was a fun challenge to think about well-known idioms, and the wise old own jumped to mind. Sending wishes for a wonderful Thanksgiving!