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Yes, It's True

A child's unusual Halloween

18 total reviews 
Comment from John Ciarmello
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I enjoyed this story. I'm a huge fan of the supernatural. I don't do much with it except watch it on TV. I'm a chicken and am afraid something will attach and come home with me. I would have been one of those kids across the street avoiding the big old house from a safe distance. lol. It was a fantastic story. Btw, in what way was the house haunted?

 Comment Written 20-Jan-2022


reply by the author on 21-Jan-2022
    We never really knew. It was a sense of the house itself having presence and of different rooms having a stong "go away" vibe. That and the old gentlemen himself was the last of his family--and dressed as an attorney (which he was) would have dressed a couple of generations before I was born. A kind of "time stopped" atmosphere.

    Thanks for reading and the review
Comment from rockinm76233
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What a wonderful Halloween story. What a wonderful memory from childhood, to have known a real haunted house and to have such a friend was the making of a very good memory.

 Comment Written 23-Oct-2021


reply by the author on 23-Oct-2021
    Thank you.
Comment from royowen
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I've enjoyed reading about haunted locations over the years by the talented authors on fanstory. And this one-off gem, it is so different any story I've ever read, and very refreshing in its own way. You've done a very good job of this, good luck in the contest my friend, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 08-Oct-2021


reply by the author on 09-Oct-2021
    Thank you
reply by royowen on 09-Oct-2021
    Bless you
Comment from Partha Banerjee
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Very nice. Brings back my old memories, and also a "ghost story" from one of Andy Griffith shows back in the sixties. The image you created through your words is truly "haunting," if I may say it :-) The opening paragraph could have been split in two.

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 Comment Written 07-Oct-2021


reply by the author on 07-Oct-2021
    Thank you for your suggestions.
Comment from pookietoo
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A wonderful Halliween story and contest entry. Keep up the great work writing poems. Have a wonderful night. Keep smiling, others will too. Best wishes

 Comment Written 05-Oct-2021


reply by the author on 06-Oct-2021
    Thank you
reply by pookietoo on 06-Oct-2021
    Welcome.
reply by pookietoo on 06-Oct-2021
    Welcome.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
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I love this story of the truly haunted house and the old gentleman that lived there. You told the story well from the POV of the house inviting selected children in. Good luck in the contest, a great read.

 Comment Written 05-Oct-2021


reply by the author on 06-Oct-2021
    Thank you
Comment from Jan Anderegg
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I just love this story. Is there a reason why it is listed as fiction instead of non-fiction? What wonderful memories to have of that house and the kind old man who must have been delighted to have the company of children like yourself.

Your title has a spacing issue.

Yes,It's true

Should be

Yes, It's true

I would actually suggest you capitalize all three words. (Per Title Case Converter.com)

Yes, It's True

Otherwise, I love it. All the best in the contest. Thank you for sharing these wonderful memories with us.
Jan


 Comment Written 05-Oct-2021


reply by the author on 05-Oct-2021
    Thanks. Icalled it fiction since I cannot speak for the feelings of the characters (or even the house's)So I imagined those--hence fiction. Than you for the corection.
Comment from nomi338
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Real recognizes real. This story is intriguing in so many ways. I find it very interesting that a house that should be frightening to children was on the night for fright, the house was actually welcoming to the children, as if it, the house loved children as much as the old gentleman caretaker of the house.

 Comment Written 04-Oct-2021


reply by the author on 05-Oct-2021
    When it was built, the house was home to eleven children and their parents, tutors,caretakers and so on. Personally, I always thought it missed the family was lonely. On the night when the veil between this world and the next is said to be thinnest, it was able to reexperience it's early days by once again housing happy children, however briefly. Haunting can be remnants of pain and loss as much or more than real evil.
reply by nomi338 on 05-Oct-2021
    I totally agree. It is my firm belief that only the living have the capacity for true evil.
Comment from LJbutterfly
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This is a delightful but scary well written story. Your introductory caption says it is general fiction, but it is written with such detail, feeling, and emotion, that it sounds like a non-fiction piece. Either way, there is great imagery and a bit of suspense. Well done. Best wishes in the contest.

 Comment Written 03-Oct-2021


reply by the author on 03-Oct-2021
    Thank you. It is embellished truth.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
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I enjoyed reading this contest entry. It had an interesting twist on a haunted house. I liked it. Good luck.

Then the door stood ajar and it felt that we were invited by the house itself. I would say that the activity was shared word of mouth--but I don't remember who told me or my telling anyone else. (You can remove both 'that'. They are unneeded extra words. There are a few more in this post.)

 Comment Written 03-Oct-2021


reply by the author on 03-Oct-2021
    Thank you for your comments--I appeciate that kind of note. And thanks for the stars.