Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Poor Don. It seems he's an easy suspect to a small town since he's a newcomer. It does seem rather suspicious that as soon as the power is out two people get injured. Maybe the future posts could have fewer characters? It was a little hard to keep track of all of them and remember who was who.

 Comment Written 04-Oct-2021

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reply by the author on 04-Oct-2021

Thanks so much for your review and comments. It's hard for me to keep track of everything, too. I should make a chart. There will be more about Don in the next scene. He isn't exactly who he appears to be. judi

Comment from Robert Zimmerman

Excellent

Hello Judi.

It appears that all of the actors in the play have put on their sleuth clothing and they're all attempting to solve the crime. In the meantime, two other suspected crimes turn out not to be crimes.

Search the care of says that everybody will be saved, that tells me something's going to be happening very soon.

Robert

 Comment Written 03-Oct-2021

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reply by the author on 03-Oct-2021

Thanks so much for your review and comments. I'm working on that right now. judi

reply by Robert Zimmerman on 03-Oct-2021

You're welcome.

Comment from Judy Lawless

Excellent

Lou is right, this case is getting stranger and stranger, judi. :) This melodrama is full of mystery. There are so many questions unanswered, but I'm sure you will soon reveal some of them. Great job in keeping us engaged.

 Comment Written 03-Oct-2021

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reply by the author on 03-Oct-2021

Thanks so much for your review and comments. The information will continue to dribble out. I'm working on the next scene now. judi

Comment from Elizabeth Emerald

Excellent

Brisk pace, colorful characters, and snarky banter--very punny--a stab in the dark--I hope you can post the next scene soon so as to keep up the momentum. Well done.

 Comment Written 03-Oct-2021

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reply by the author on 03-Oct-2021

Thanks for your review and specific comments. I'm working on the next scene now, so it shouldn't be much longer. judi

Comment from Jay Squires

Excellent

I agree with Lou. The case IS getting stranger and stranger. Madge's injury was just that, Madge's injury, But Barry's clunk on the head had an outside cause. (God, I'm good at the obvious!)

I've been wondering about this play. I figured I might have simply overlooked its posting, but when I read it today, it seemed like there was no progress in the investigation.

I do get a kick out of this play.

 Comment Written 02-Oct-2021

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reply by the author on 03-Oct-2021

Thanks so much for your review and comments. I hadn't added a scene to this for a while. I'm working on the next scene, and there will be some progress in it. I'm glad you're enjoying. judi

Comment from aryr

Excellent

Wow, the suspense just seems to build higher and higher, judiverse. The police plan to monitor the play. Prints will be taken off the candlestick. You paint an interesting picture. Only time will tell. Great job, wonderful suspense, fantastic picture and very much enjoyed.

 Comment Written 02-Oct-2021

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reply by the author on 03-Oct-2021

Thanks so much for your review and comments. There will be more information in the next scene, which may add to the confusion. judi

reply by aryr on 04-Oct-2021

You are so very welcome, judi. Mmm what is a little more confusion? lol.

reply by the author on 04-Oct-2021

I hope things will begin to get cleared up in the scenes to come. judi

Comment from royowen

Excellent

It's funny when funny things start to happen, even the cast are starting to accuse an "out of Towner" anything but themselves, a smart-fart like Arlo doesn't help either. You're building an excellent case here Judy, and writing a fine script, as always, well done, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 02-Oct-2021

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reply by the author on 02-Oct-2021

Thanks so much for following the script. It's going slowly, but I have to get things worked out. judi

reply by royowen on 02-Oct-2021

I?m sure it will be great

Comment from robyn corum

Excellent

Judi,

It's clear that your mystery 'whodunnit' script is going well. I think you've got THIS reader hooked as well as completely confused. I have no idea who may be the guilty party.

I always enjoy these pieces - keep it up!

 Comment Written 02-Oct-2021

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reply by the author on 02-Oct-2021

Thanks so much for your review and comments. I'm glad you're following the script. What if there's more than one person? judi

Comment from lancellot

Excellent

Very good. Classic who done it stage play.

notes:

[Don: ] (He looks at BARRY'S head.) He's bleeding a bit. I'll see what I can do. (He puts some antiseptic on BARRY's head and puts a bandage on.) That'll do for now, but you both should see a doctor.

[(Clint:] I don't know what I'm gonna do with you people.

- edit

[Don:] That's the candleholder that goes on the table in Mrs. Dogood's living room.
- edit

 Comment Written 02-Oct-2021

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reply by the author on 02-Oct-2021

Thanks so much for your review and comments. I appreciate you for following the script. I have no control over what the characters are doing. judi

Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear

Excellent

This Chapter, Act 2, Scene 1 of the Script speaks in continuation thru the narrative taletelling theme about the murder at the melodrama, thru plot fostered by dialogues appropriately realistic, dramatically expressed; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR

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 Comment Written 02-Oct-2021

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reply by the author on 02-Oct-2021

Thanks for giving my script a look. Thanks for your review and comments. judi