Our Last Job
Assassinate Me A Thriller contest entry5 total reviews
Comment from Liz O'Neill
This line sets the tone: "Failure was not an option or surely there would be a hefty price on our heads as well." But then things change. Are they too confident? Is this a foreshadowing of things to happen: "We knew though, like countless times before, the job would go flawlessly." But then the weirdest twist. It was as if all of this was distraction for the reader. The real story was in this last line: "Thank you, Mr. Trump." Ooooof. Great work.
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2021
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This line sets the tone: "Failure was not an option or surely there would be a hefty price on our heads as well." But then things change. Are they too confident? Is this a foreshadowing of things to happen: "We knew though, like countless times before, the job would go flawlessly." But then the weirdest twist. It was as if all of this was distraction for the reader. The real story was in this last line: "Thank you, Mr. Trump." Ooooof. Great work.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2021
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Lol. Yes, that was the whole thing, distract them until the last line told the real meaning of the story. Haha. I like doing that sometimes. Thank you so much for the fantastic review and generous stars, Liz. I'm glad you liked this silly little tale.
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Ron
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Comment from LisaMay
i'm sure your writing was judged more for its political content than its excellent writing ability. You maintain suspense well and the details sound so authentic I had my heart in my mouth, knowing you would be successful in your deed. i bet you didn't get to enjoy your island retreat though - it seems that everyone who works for Trump ends up in jail - they certainly deserve to!
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2021
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i'm sure your writing was judged more for its political content than its excellent writing ability. You maintain suspense well and the details sound so authentic I had my heart in my mouth, knowing you would be successful in your deed. i bet you didn't get to enjoy your island retreat though - it seems that everyone who works for Trump ends up in jail - they certainly deserve to!
Comment Written 06-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2021
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Lol. Yeah, I figured that would happen. No matter how much Biden drags the US toward communism, people still hate Trump even more. Lol. Thank you for the great review, Lisa. I'm glad you liked the writing aspect of it. That's mainly what I was going for even though I know I shouldn't have went the route I went with it. Lol. I hope everything is going well on your side of the world.
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Ron
Comment from writer723
I very much enjoyed reading your excellent story. It really drew me in and captured my attention from start to finish. I found myself rooting for the main character all the way and wishing the best for the individual. Your depiction of this situation was quite emotional and touching to me. Your descriptive skills are exceptional and you express yourself very well.
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2021
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I very much enjoyed reading your excellent story. It really drew me in and captured my attention from start to finish. I found myself rooting for the main character all the way and wishing the best for the individual. Your depiction of this situation was quite emotional and touching to me. Your descriptive skills are exceptional and you express yourself very well.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2021
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Thank you so much for the fantastic review, Writer723. I dearly appreciate the gracious stars and kind comments. I'm glad you liked my little story. I hope you have yourself a great night. Thank you again.
Comment from Zhen Xuan Liu
This is a great general fiction! This flows amazing! Conversations are well-embedded and descriptions are on point. The scene is very vivid and I can really feel the tension. Keep up the great work!
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2021
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This is a great general fiction! This flows amazing! Conversations are well-embedded and descriptions are on point. The scene is very vivid and I can really feel the tension. Keep up the great work!
Comment Written 02-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2021
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Thank you for the fantastic review, Zhen. I really appreciate the generous stars and kind comments. I'm glad you liked the piece.
Comment from oliver818
Ooof controversial stuff here. I won't get political, so I'll just discuss the writing. It's good. Your style is lively and interesting and you did a good job of bringing these characters to life. Thanks for sharing this and have a great day
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2021
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Ooof controversial stuff here. I won't get political, so I'll just discuss the writing. It's good. Your style is lively and interesting and you did a good job of bringing these characters to life. Thanks for sharing this and have a great day
Comment Written 02-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2021
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Thank you for the fantastic review, Oliver. Yeah, I was hoping reviewers would just take it on the writing rather than political aspect. Lol. I really appreciate the stars, friend. Have yourself a great rest of your weekend.
