Ticking clock
A modified Ottava rima63 total reviews
Comment from kahpot
What an excellent read and message within, it is most likely me but I thought one line missed the flow "there are many gaps in grains on the beach" I am not questioning the master-though I did stumble there, I may need some help with that little bit, very well presented poem****kahpot
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2021
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What an excellent read and message within, it is most likely me but I thought one line missed the flow "there are many gaps in grains on the beach" I am not questioning the master-though I did stumble there, I may need some help with that little bit, very well presented poem****kahpot
Comment Written 03-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2021
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Thanks for these terrific comments and a very kind review, blessings Roy
Comment from Patty Palmer
This poem is very good. Of course, most of your poetry is pretty and usually brings some kind of message that helps lift the spirit up and reminds us of our Savior's love that he gives today, yesterday, and always tomorrow. Thanks for sharing this with us.
Patty
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2021
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This poem is very good. Of course, most of your poetry is pretty and usually brings some kind of message that helps lift the spirit up and reminds us of our Savior's love that he gives today, yesterday, and always tomorrow. Thanks for sharing this with us.
Patty
Comment Written 02-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2021
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Thanks again Patty, for these exceptional comments and a excellent review, blessings Roy
Comment from Katrina White
One day we will die. When your time is up, there is nothing you can do about it. While that is a simple fact, losing a loved one is never easy, no matter how much time you had to prepare or the years after the loss. The pain is there, just in the background for each soul that has gone before you. You are a great poet who should continue writing and creating new poems.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2021
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One day we will die. When your time is up, there is nothing you can do about it. While that is a simple fact, losing a loved one is never easy, no matter how much time you had to prepare or the years after the loss. The pain is there, just in the background for each soul that has gone before you. You are a great poet who should continue writing and creating new poems.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2021
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Thanks Katrina for these excellent comments and review, blessings Roy
Comment from rspoet
Hello Roy,
Your modified Ottava Rima is nicely done with the aabbccdd scheme.
That ticking clock is a fascinating theme for poets,
time simply is, perhaps an invention of mankind
to lend order to existence.
I agree that the pen sometimes has a mind of its own.
I've written many a poem that's gone far from original thought.
Beautiful art work choice.
Best wishes.
Robert
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2021
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Hello Roy,
Your modified Ottava Rima is nicely done with the aabbccdd scheme.
That ticking clock is a fascinating theme for poets,
time simply is, perhaps an invention of mankind
to lend order to existence.
I agree that the pen sometimes has a mind of its own.
I've written many a poem that's gone far from original thought.
Beautiful art work choice.
Best wishes.
Robert
Comment Written 02-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2021
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Thanks Robert, for these terrific comments and a very kind review, blessings Roy
Comment from Teri7
Roy, This is a very beautiful and very well written modified Ottava Rima poem you have penned about the ticking clock of time. You used great descriptive words and very interesting imagery that went well with your words. Thank you for sharing. Blessings, teri
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2021
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Roy, This is a very beautiful and very well written modified Ottava Rima poem you have penned about the ticking clock of time. You used great descriptive words and very interesting imagery that went well with your words. Thank you for sharing. Blessings, teri
Comment Written 02-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2021
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Thanks Teri, for these marvellous comments and review, blessings Roy
Comment from nandimandisa
On my, what a wonderful read! That first line really blew it out of the water, " Betwixt all the ticks and the tocks of a clock..." How smoothe and poetic, the words flow seamlessly to the melody of the octava Rima...flawless. Keep on allowing the Lord to use you in this way, simply astounding! Be blessed and good luck in your writing!!
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2021
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On my, what a wonderful read! That first line really blew it out of the water, " Betwixt all the ticks and the tocks of a clock..." How smoothe and poetic, the words flow seamlessly to the melody of the octava Rima...flawless. Keep on allowing the Lord to use you in this way, simply astounding! Be blessed and good luck in your writing!!
Comment Written 02-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2021
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Thanks for these exceptional comments and a great review, blessings Roy
Comment from Raul1
You have made good use of your rhyming patterns. I can understand reading it. I see no mistakes in your poem. Excellent work! I like your poem. Good job! Thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2021
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You have made good use of your rhyming patterns. I can understand reading it. I see no mistakes in your poem. Excellent work! I like your poem. Good job! Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 02-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2021
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Thanks Raul, for these terrific comments and a very kind review, blessings Roy
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You're welcome!
Comment from Frank Jauregui
Blessings my friend and thank you for this wonderful insight into, God; eternity, and his creation first enclosed and then released back into his presence. It has a surreal feel to it that I especially enjoyed.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2021
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Blessings my friend and thank you for this wonderful insight into, God; eternity, and his creation first enclosed and then released back into his presence. It has a surreal feel to it that I especially enjoyed.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2021
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Thanks again for these exceptional comments and excellent review, blessings Roy
Comment from Eunice Amero
Now this is something else you wrote that I love. It's so good. Where do you get all your words. That's amazing how good you can write. I mean everything. You keep up that good stuff and thank you for sharing. Good Luck
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2021
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Now this is something else you wrote that I love. It's so good. Where do you get all your words. That's amazing how good you can write. I mean everything. You keep up that good stuff and thank you for sharing. Good Luck
Comment Written 02-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2021
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Thanks Eunice, for these terrific comments and a very kind review, blessings Roy
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You are so very welcome.
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Roy,
In the light of Author Note, it's a nice piece of poetry meeting the desired norms, having impressive phraseology, enchanting flow throughout from the beginning to the end with lovely rhyming scheme, and beautifully depicting its theme.
As a matter of fact, its each couplet is worth noting.
Remarkable Indeed!
[ It deserves to be honored with Six Stars. Would that it were around Sunday!]
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2021
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Hello Roy,
In the light of Author Note, it's a nice piece of poetry meeting the desired norms, having impressive phraseology, enchanting flow throughout from the beginning to the end with lovely rhyming scheme, and beautifully depicting its theme.
As a matter of fact, its each couplet is worth noting.
Remarkable Indeed!
[ It deserves to be honored with Six Stars. Would that it were around Sunday!]
Comment Written 02-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2021
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Thanks RP, for these terrific comments and a very kind review, blessings Roy
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Roy, Most Welcome!
With best wishes,
~ RP
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Bless you
