Autumn's Serenade
ABC poetic form43 total reviews
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Congrats on your prize for this stunner--you merit extra credit for ABCDE--I don't know why few people take on the challenge. Glorious piece--vividly evocative! Cheers. LIZ
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2021
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Congrats on your prize for this stunner--you merit extra credit for ABCDE--I don't know why few people take on the challenge. Glorious piece--vividly evocative! Cheers. LIZ
Comment Written 08-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2021
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Hi Liz. Thanks so very much for your thoughts. I love Autumn and had fun writing this one. :). Hugs.
Melissa
Comment from MissMerri
I just love this, and wish it had won the blue ribbon, but congratulations for taking second, at least. It really is a beauty, not only for the creative and lovely descriptions of Autumn, but you wrote it in rhyme and with a musical meter that matches the poem's words perfectly. I don't see how this could possibly be any more beautiful or how any poem could be a better entry in the ABC poem contest, but unfortunately the judges did not ask me for my opinion. LOL I think this poem is exceptional, and you are very talented. MM
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2021
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I just love this, and wish it had won the blue ribbon, but congratulations for taking second, at least. It really is a beauty, not only for the creative and lovely descriptions of Autumn, but you wrote it in rhyme and with a musical meter that matches the poem's words perfectly. I don't see how this could possibly be any more beautiful or how any poem could be a better entry in the ABC poem contest, but unfortunately the judges did not ask me for my opinion. LOL I think this poem is exceptional, and you are very talented. MM
Comment Written 07-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2021
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Hello Adonna. You have put a smile on my face, dear friend, and I sincerely thank you for your words of encouragement. I really like writing in meter and I liken it to music that I am creating with stressed and unstressed syllables. Your writing is so lovely in this way too... you have mastered meter and rhyme perfectly. Thank you so very much!!
Melissa
Comment from patricia dillon
Autumn seems to be a season that gives rise to much inspiration. Your take on the subject is interesting. The image of leaves as making music is picturesque.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2021
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Autumn seems to be a season that gives rise to much inspiration. Your take on the subject is interesting. The image of leaves as making music is picturesque.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2021
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Thank you so much for your lovely comments.
Melissa
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You're welcome
Comment from Mark D. R.
Melissa,
One gets a good feeling from your ABC entry. Each line contains such a nice musical imagery. Always have problems with capitalizing or not the names of our seasons. It is an easy choice when it starts a sentence (-;
You also selected a most appropriate photograph to complement your words.
Mark
P.S. Intentional or not, the extra return before your e-line?
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2021
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Melissa,
One gets a good feeling from your ABC entry. Each line contains such a nice musical imagery. Always have problems with capitalizing or not the names of our seasons. It is an easy choice when it starts a sentence (-;
You also selected a most appropriate photograph to complement your words.
Mark
P.S. Intentional or not, the extra return before your e-line?
Comment Written 04-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2021
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Hi Mark... yes, the extra line is intentional and I wish I had indented it for emphasis. Thanks for your wonderful comments. This one was fun because I am soooo in the mood for Autumn.. Fall. The Brits and others do not use the term "Fall", hence the use of Autumn. Thanks again.
Melissa
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Melissa,
I think this is one of the best ABC poems I've ever read. You describe the Fall nicely, in colors, mood, weather, noises. Nice rhymes as well, and the near rhyme of "leaves" with "keys/melodies". Striking word use for Autumn... "mellow/dulcet/dusky/earthy/golden"
The only change I would make would be "crackling" instead of "quaking".
Your poem reminds me of my hunting days. I always enjoyed walking through the woods between mid-October and mid-November. A hunter looks for deer or partridge, but appreciates the colors and smells every bit as much.
Nicely penned!
Good Luck in the contest!
Hugs,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2021
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Hi Melissa,
I think this is one of the best ABC poems I've ever read. You describe the Fall nicely, in colors, mood, weather, noises. Nice rhymes as well, and the near rhyme of "leaves" with "keys/melodies". Striking word use for Autumn... "mellow/dulcet/dusky/earthy/golden"
The only change I would make would be "crackling" instead of "quaking".
Your poem reminds me of my hunting days. I always enjoyed walking through the woods between mid-October and mid-November. A hunter looks for deer or partridge, but appreciates the colors and smells every bit as much.
Nicely penned!
Good Luck in the contest!
Hugs,
Kimbob
Comment Written 03-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2021
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Hello KB. Thank you so very much for the lovely comments. I liked your suggestion for the word "crackling". It would make that line jump with implied sound. I hope you are doing well and enjoying your granddaughter!! Thanks again, my friend.
Melissa
Comment from Debbie Pope
Your words are lyrical in their beauty. I love the sound imagery. I particularly like your reference to sounds changing key. As our season changes into fall, I love the notion of the season sounds changing key. That's spot on in accuracy and lovely to think about.
Ok. This one has become my new favorite of yours.
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2021
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Your words are lyrical in their beauty. I love the sound imagery. I particularly like your reference to sounds changing key. As our season changes into fall, I love the notion of the season sounds changing key. That's spot on in accuracy and lovely to think about.
Ok. This one has become my new favorite of yours.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2021
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Hi sweet Debbie. I am chuckling at your last sentence... you always make me smile.. thank you, dear friend, for the lovely words of encouragement!!!
Melissa
Comment from Ulla
Melissa, this is beautiful and so professionally written. You have such a wonderful talent. It was such a great joy to read. I hope it will do very well in the contest. What a great entry. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2021
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Melissa, this is beautiful and so professionally written. You have such a wonderful talent. It was such a great joy to read. I hope it will do very well in the contest. What a great entry. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 02-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2021
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Hi Ulla. Thank you for your heartwarming words of confidence!! You have made my day! Hugs, my friend.
Melissa
Comment from Anne Johnston
Great entry for this contest. The picture you have chosen certainly depicts the splendours of Autumn and your well-chosen words fit perfectly with your title - Autumn Serenades.
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2021
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Great entry for this contest. The picture you have chosen certainly depicts the splendours of Autumn and your well-chosen words fit perfectly with your title - Autumn Serenades.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2021
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Hello Anne. Thank you so very much! I love this time of year and can hear the music when the leaves change color and there is a raspiness in the leaves. :).
Melissa
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You are welcome
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hello Sugarray, this is an absolutely superb ABC poem. A true melodic melody of words. It surely has to do well in the contest. Good use of enjambment throughout and a gorgeous picture. True poetic talent. Good Luck in the contest - warm regards Dorothy x
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2021
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Hello Sugarray, this is an absolutely superb ABC poem. A true melodic melody of words. It surely has to do well in the contest. Good use of enjambment throughout and a gorgeous picture. True poetic talent. Good Luck in the contest - warm regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 02-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2021
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Dorothy, your lovely comments warm my heart!! I am delighted you liked it and enjoyed reading it. Thank you so much, my friend.
Melissa
Comment from tempeste
Ciao Sugarray!
Such a poetic piece.. I love autumn and you describe its magic so sweetlyâ?¦
Mellow serenade
Cantatas flow from quaking leaves
I imagine the crunch of autumn leaves and twigs snapping .. a creek gurgling,
reading the last two verse.
Also Golden melodies has a smart double reference:
A. yellow leaves singing in the wind
B. Famous old songs of the past.
This entry will place on the podium. I certain
Well done!
Keep safe!
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2021
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Ciao Sugarray!
Such a poetic piece.. I love autumn and you describe its magic so sweetlyâ?¦
Mellow serenade
Cantatas flow from quaking leaves
I imagine the crunch of autumn leaves and twigs snapping .. a creek gurgling,
reading the last two verse.
Also Golden melodies has a smart double reference:
A. yellow leaves singing in the wind
B. Famous old songs of the past.
This entry will place on the podium. I certain
Well done!
Keep safe!
Comment Written 02-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2021
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Hello sweet Franca. Thank you for your lovely comments and appraisal of my ABC poem. I a delighted you enjoyed it and liked it. :). You warmed my heart with your words!
Melissa
