Dreary days
ABC poetry.21 total reviews
Comment from oliver818
This is a very nice poem, I enjoyed reading it. The imagery is vivid and evocative and brings the piece to life. Thanks for sharing this and have yourself a really great day
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2021
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This is a very nice poem, I enjoyed reading it. The imagery is vivid and evocative and brings the piece to life. Thanks for sharing this and have yourself a really great day
Comment Written 02-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2021
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Thank you very much
Comment from Hitcher
Groundhog day when it comes to those unfortunate enough to be in lockdown for long periods of time. Fortunately in the center of the North island of NZ that has not been an issue. I believe 8 weeks in total over the last 18 months would be it. Good luck!
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2021
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Groundhog day when it comes to those unfortunate enough to be in lockdown for long periods of time. Fortunately in the center of the North island of NZ that has not been an issue. I believe 8 weeks in total over the last 18 months would be it. Good luck!
Comment Written 01-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2021
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That is lucky .We In India has endured long lockdowns .Thanks for stopping by.
Comment from pookietoo
A very nice and poem, and it describes the photo so very well. Good luck to you in the contest .Enjoy the little things that matter most. Smile and others will too.
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2021
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A very nice and poem, and it describes the photo so very well. Good luck to you in the contest .Enjoy the little things that matter most. Smile and others will too.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2021
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Thank you very much.
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Welcome
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
Your message is loud and clear. Nothing is changing, it's the day following night following day, etc. You are so right about this pandemic.
Good luck!
Ralf
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2021
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Your message is loud and clear. Nothing is changing, it's the day following night following day, etc. You are so right about this pandemic.
Good luck!
Ralf
Comment Written 01-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2021
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Thank you very much for stopping by .Yes theses are dull days Though we are slowly opening up
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Dreary days indeed--apt for the ongoing reign of Corona--your poem expresses the monotony and demoralization.
Once more a day is slowly dying
Prologue to a new one will begin [SUGG OMIT "in the" (to keep the line break from sounding forced)]
Quiet moments of night
Rarely a change, the same act over and over
SUGG:
Shadows of sleep are stalking me--by starting with an S you may get extra credit for a 5-line sequence OPQRS.
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2021
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Dreary days indeed--apt for the ongoing reign of Corona--your poem expresses the monotony and demoralization.
Once more a day is slowly dying
Prologue to a new one will begin [SUGG OMIT "in the" (to keep the line break from sounding forced)]
Quiet moments of night
Rarely a change, the same act over and over
SUGG:
Shadows of sleep are stalking me--by starting with an S you may get extra credit for a 5-line sequence OPQRS.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2021
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I wrote the last line exactly like you suggested .Then I thought it HAD to be different ..Thanks for stopping by and thank you for the suggestions.
Comment from lyenochka
You captured the monotony of the days of lockdown due to Covid very well and anxiety and depression is fully expressed with the sense of "shadows of sleep stalking me." Your ABC poem is in great form and the lines flow naturally from one to another. Good use of metaphor (prologue) and personification (day is slowly dying). Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2021
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You captured the monotony of the days of lockdown due to Covid very well and anxiety and depression is fully expressed with the sense of "shadows of sleep stalking me." Your ABC poem is in great form and the lines flow naturally from one to another. Good use of metaphor (prologue) and personification (day is slowly dying). Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 30-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2021
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Thank you very mu ,Helen .I love to hear from you.
Comment from Anne Johnston
This is a good entry for the ABC contest. I know the last year and a half have been hard for many, but I have found things to keep me motivated and with the help of the Lord, have not found it lonely, even though I am alone most of the time.
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2021
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This is a good entry for the ABC contest. I know the last year and a half have been hard for many, but I have found things to keep me motivated and with the help of the Lord, have not found it lonely, even though I am alone most of the time.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2021
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Thank you very much.
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You are welcome
Comment from royowen
That's the wonderful thing in life, no matter what the last day was like, the new one brings new hope, and new challenges, but we should welcome, the old has passed, we are like a new creation! Beautifully written my friend, an excellent theme and entry. Good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2021
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That's the wonderful thing in life, no matter what the last day was like, the new one brings new hope, and new challenges, but we should welcome, the old has passed, we are like a new creation! Beautifully written my friend, an excellent theme and entry. Good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 30-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2021
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Thank you very much.
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Most welcome
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. I enjoyed reading. T do understand the melancholy feeling of this poem. I wonder if we will ever get back to normal. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2021
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Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. I enjoyed reading. T do understand the melancholy feeling of this poem. I wonder if we will ever get back to normal. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2021
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Thank you very much.
Comment from Paul McFarland
Nice one again. Good contest entry. Writing about the dying day and coming night has always been a favorite with me.
Dying is the day.
Each minute
Fading fast.
Gone is the featured play.
The actors now recast.
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2021
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Nice one again. Good contest entry. Writing about the dying day and coming night has always been a favorite with me.
Dying is the day.
Each minute
Fading fast.
Gone is the featured play.
The actors now recast.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2021
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Wow! that was a nice little poem. Thanks a lot.
