Skewed point of view
Reflecting (Author Notes)47 total reviews
Comment from Eternal Muse
A thought pondering poem touching on many different issues.
Life and death. Some say, life is only a short moment between your past and your future. It flies so fast.
Yes, we will all die some day. It is scary but inevitable.
A very good imagery, visuals and artistic presentation.
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2021
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A thought pondering poem touching on many different issues.
Life and death. Some say, life is only a short moment between your past and your future. It flies so fast.
Yes, we will all die some day. It is scary but inevitable.
A very good imagery, visuals and artistic presentation.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2021
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Many thanks...John
Comment from amahra
Great writing and a nice pick of the artwork.
I like the below stanza as a great wrap-up of your poem.
Communicate is what we do
Filling in blanks with our discourse
Soon, you are me and I am you
Eternally bound to our source
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2021
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Great writing and a nice pick of the artwork.
I like the below stanza as a great wrap-up of your poem.
Communicate is what we do
Filling in blanks with our discourse
Soon, you are me and I am you
Eternally bound to our source
Comment Written 30-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2021
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Many thanks for your review and kind words...John
Comment from rama devi
Hello! I enjoyed this - the meaning, the simple rhymes and rhythmic flow. I think it works fine with the no punctuation style you've chosen.
Favorite lines:
No tomorrow nor yesterday
Forever Now is our just due
One spag nit - NOR should be OR, I believe.
Pitch perfect closing:
Soon, you are me and I am you
Eternally bound to our source
Fine work.
Warmly,
rd
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2021
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Hello! I enjoyed this - the meaning, the simple rhymes and rhythmic flow. I think it works fine with the no punctuation style you've chosen.
Favorite lines:
No tomorrow nor yesterday
Forever Now is our just due
One spag nit - NOR should be OR, I believe.
Pitch perfect closing:
Soon, you are me and I am you
Eternally bound to our source
Fine work.
Warmly,
rd
Comment Written 30-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2021
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Many thanks for your review and kind words...John
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Blessings!
Comment from Seshadri_Sreenivasan
LIFE is a four-letter word that is complicated enough that no one will ever decode its true meaning. Whether you were born into a wealthy family or a poor one, your life will be full of ups and downs. The goal in life is to minimize the down's and live a happy and inspiring existence. I enjoyed your thought-provoking poem on spirituality vs materialism. Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2021
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LIFE is a four-letter word that is complicated enough that no one will ever decode its true meaning. Whether you were born into a wealthy family or a poor one, your life will be full of ups and downs. The goal in life is to minimize the down's and live a happy and inspiring existence. I enjoyed your thought-provoking poem on spirituality vs materialism. Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 30-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2021
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Many thanks for your review and kind words...John
Comment from Mary Shifman
I think some of this is a bit above my head but it flows smoothly and I think I get part of it. It makes me think you're saying we're in some sort of holodeck program. It also brings to mind the poem from the Sanskrit:
"Look to this day!
For it is life, the very life of life.
In its brief course lie all the
Varieties and realities of your existence;" and so forth.
I'm poabably way off base here, but I'm trying.
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2021
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I think some of this is a bit above my head but it flows smoothly and I think I get part of it. It makes me think you're saying we're in some sort of holodeck program. It also brings to mind the poem from the Sanskrit:
"Look to this day!
For it is life, the very life of life.
In its brief course lie all the
Varieties and realities of your existence;" and so forth.
I'm poabably way off base here, but I'm trying.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2021
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You understand it best so far.. Excellent insight!...John
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Wow! Thanks. I have to go back and read it again!
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Cogitator,
Nice piece of Self Improvement Poetry having impressive phraseology, smooth flow throughout from the beginning to the end with lovely rhyming scheme, and beautifully depicting the source of joy i.e. we can enjoy the life perfectly only by making the best use of our present, and without bothering much about past and future
5th stanza is particularly noteworthy.
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2021
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Hello Cogitator,
Nice piece of Self Improvement Poetry having impressive phraseology, smooth flow throughout from the beginning to the end with lovely rhyming scheme, and beautifully depicting the source of joy i.e. we can enjoy the life perfectly only by making the best use of our present, and without bothering much about past and future
5th stanza is particularly noteworthy.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2021
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Glad my favorite reviewer approves...John
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John, Most Welcome!
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Thanks for treating me as your favorite reviewer.
With best wishes,
~ RP
Comment from Sanku
I liked the word you used-.pointillist. geometrically or realistically points are very important.we live to air our points of view and refute others .Ultimately it is all the same as you pointed out .interesting. food for thought.
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2021
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I liked the word you used-.pointillist. geometrically or realistically points are very important.we live to air our points of view and refute others .Ultimately it is all the same as you pointed out .interesting. food for thought.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2021
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Thank you...John
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Living for day has never been more poignant as through the pandemic as we never know if we have a tomorrow and when we die our past dies with us, we rely on family to remember us, but they too die in time and so the cycle of life continues, a poignant sentiment here, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2021
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Living for day has never been more poignant as through the pandemic as we never know if we have a tomorrow and when we die our past dies with us, we rely on family to remember us, but they too die in time and so the cycle of life continues, a poignant sentiment here, love Dolly x
Comment Written 30-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2021
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Many thanks for your thoughts...John
Comment from kahpot
"finding family in each other" "forever now is just our due" so many wonderful lines in here, I will read this a few more times and I think understand, I am so intrigued at which direction your poem is taking me-"space" "geometry" an excellent read it gets the mind working****kahpot
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2021
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"finding family in each other" "forever now is just our due" so many wonderful lines in here, I will read this a few more times and I think understand, I am so intrigued at which direction your poem is taking me-"space" "geometry" an excellent read it gets the mind working****kahpot
Comment Written 30-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2021
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Many thanks for your thoughts...John
Comment from Wendy G
This is a interesting and thought-provoking piece, perhaps particularly the last stanza with consideration of the various aspects of points. Time of course will be irrelevant in eternity; as for time on earth - yes we only have the present moment, and no promise of more time. Time past can never be revoked. But - important to find family in each other for our present duration.
Wendy
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2021
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This is a interesting and thought-provoking piece, perhaps particularly the last stanza with consideration of the various aspects of points. Time of course will be irrelevant in eternity; as for time on earth - yes we only have the present moment, and no promise of more time. Time past can never be revoked. But - important to find family in each other for our present duration.
Wendy
Comment Written 30-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2021
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Many thanks for your thoughts...John
