Falling from Grace
6 word6 total reviews
Comment from Patty Palmer
Sadly, Autumn comes and the leaves turn beautiful and colorful. Eventually, they're all brown and dead piled up across everybody's lawn, even if you don't have a tree in your yard you still don't get out of raking them out of your yard.
Good luck with the contest.
Patty
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Sadly, Autumn comes and the leaves turn beautiful and colorful. Eventually, they're all brown and dead piled up across everybody's lawn, even if you don't have a tree in your yard you still don't get out of raking them out of your yard.
Good luck with the contest.
Patty
Comment Written 27-Sep-2021
Comment from Carlos' girl
This is an Interesting poem of six words. The leaves have fallen and so could we but for the grace of God. Nice thought provoking sixer that is open to interpretation.
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This is an Interesting poem of six words. The leaves have fallen and so could we but for the grace of God. Nice thought provoking sixer that is open to interpretation.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2021
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice artwork
and presentation.
-A good title and
good use of your
six words to describe autumn.
-Effective images show
the impact of the tree
losing its leaves in the fall;
maybe that's how that term
came about, too.
-Good luck in the contest.
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-Very nice artwork
and presentation.
-A good title and
good use of your
six words to describe autumn.
-Effective images show
the impact of the tree
losing its leaves in the fall;
maybe that's how that term
came about, too.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2021
Comment from phill doran
Hello Anon,
It is often (mostly) very difficult to 'review' something as brief as this, but I must compliment you in that you have tried to add another dimension (with the alliteration) to what often comes across as a mere 'statement'.
In passing, I offer that you might replace 'the' with 'limp' (i.e., 'limp limbs') and go the whole hog!
I do not envy those who have to judge this type of competition, but perhaps in offering something a little more imaginative, as you have, you will do well.
Stay safe.
cheers
phill
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2021
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Hello Anon,
It is often (mostly) very difficult to 'review' something as brief as this, but I must compliment you in that you have tried to add another dimension (with the alliteration) to what often comes across as a mere 'statement'.
In passing, I offer that you might replace 'the' with 'limp' (i.e., 'limp limbs') and go the whole hog!
I do not envy those who have to judge this type of competition, but perhaps in offering something a little more imaginative, as you have, you will do well.
Stay safe.
cheers
phill
Comment Written 26-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2021
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Thanks for your review and the very good suggestion. Poem now changed.
Comment from Zhen Xuan Liu
I like the feel of this 6 word poem - each word forms a line. It hit me hard with the last 2 words: "life lost". For limbs, I suggest you could change it to twigs or sprig because limbs to me feels like the large branches on a tree, which usually don't have a lot of leaves on them. But good job, nonetheless.
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I like the feel of this 6 word poem - each word forms a line. It hit me hard with the last 2 words: "life lost". For limbs, I suggest you could change it to twigs or sprig because limbs to me feels like the large branches on a tree, which usually don't have a lot of leaves on them. But good job, nonetheless.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2021
Comment from RodG
Your six-line poem captures the essence of Fall when all trees lose their leaves. I like your use of L-alliteration.
And you could not have chosen a more appropriate picture.
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Your six-line poem captures the essence of Fall when all trees lose their leaves. I like your use of L-alliteration.
And you could not have chosen a more appropriate picture.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2021
