Looming Darkness
Evil & Hate have consequences27 total reviews
Comment from Elijah Schwartz
This poem really reminds me of traditional european witchcraft. It carries an air that feels reminiscent of Isobel Gowdie and that her and others were faced with. The poem gives this feeling of the innate infernality in humanity that is so often described in mythological works and ancient hymns. It reminds of the Orphic Hymns and how from the blood of Zagreus and ash of the Titans, Humanity came. The Orphics believed that the ash of the Titans was represented in our animalistic instinct, and that Zagreus' blood represented our capacity to do good and find ourselves in Elysium (via the Orphic Mysteries). Thank you for this poem!
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This poem really reminds me of traditional european witchcraft. It carries an air that feels reminiscent of Isobel Gowdie and that her and others were faced with. The poem gives this feeling of the innate infernality in humanity that is so often described in mythological works and ancient hymns. It reminds of the Orphic Hymns and how from the blood of Zagreus and ash of the Titans, Humanity came. The Orphics believed that the ash of the Titans was represented in our animalistic instinct, and that Zagreus' blood represented our capacity to do good and find ourselves in Elysium (via the Orphic Mysteries). Thank you for this poem!
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Comment Written 06-Oct-2021
Comment from dragonpoet
Yes hate is something that seems to be growing now a days. It is sad and should change. Hate keeps a person from growing into best person he/she can be. It also hinders the chance of world peace.
Congrats on the honorable mention in the reviewing contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
dp
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Yes hate is something that seems to be growing now a days. It is sad and should change. Hate keeps a person from growing into best person he/she can be. It also hinders the chance of world peace.
Congrats on the honorable mention in the reviewing contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
dp
Comment Written 05-Oct-2021
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I would like to see people unify but the love of freedom, and then find ways to make it work together. (AMEN!!!)
I enjoyed reading your contest entry. The rhyming scheme is very good and made for an ease of reading. Thank you for sharing and good luck.
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I would like to see people unify but the love of freedom, and then find ways to make it work together. (AMEN!!!)
I enjoyed reading your contest entry. The rhyming scheme is very good and made for an ease of reading. Thank you for sharing and good luck.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2021
Comment from Cogitator
You certainly have a gift. Although I seldom read fiction, I do check on your work. This piece is definitely one of your best. I cannot suggest anything resembling an improvement...John
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You certainly have a gift. Although I seldom read fiction, I do check on your work. This piece is definitely one of your best. I cannot suggest anything resembling an improvement...John
Comment Written 28-Sep-2021
Comment from Seshadri_Sreenivasan
The darkness isn't wrong. It's part of life, a backdrop for the stars at night, the space between what you know. Darkness has a way of reminding you of the light you've been given on all those other days. I enjoyed your unusual, well-written poem. Good luck in the contest!
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The darkness isn't wrong. It's part of life, a backdrop for the stars at night, the space between what you know. Darkness has a way of reminding you of the light you've been given on all those other days. I enjoyed your unusual, well-written poem. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 28-Sep-2021
Comment from Wendy G
There is a good development in the poem from the "natural" beast to the beast of hatred and division. People need to rethink what freedom really means: personal freedom and societal freedom are intertwined, and they cannot be easily separated without significant individual and community loss. Better to find common ground via respect and tolerance. "Freedom" is not necessarily the road to happiness.
Wendy
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There is a good development in the poem from the "natural" beast to the beast of hatred and division. People need to rethink what freedom really means: personal freedom and societal freedom are intertwined, and they cannot be easily separated without significant individual and community loss. Better to find common ground via respect and tolerance. "Freedom" is not necessarily the road to happiness.
Wendy
Comment Written 28-Sep-2021
Comment from pookietoo
A great entry into the no rules poetry contest. It us an interesting subject too. I loved how you rhymed throughout the poem. Have a nice night and keep smiling.
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A great entry into the no rules poetry contest. It us an interesting subject too. I loved how you rhymed throughout the poem. Have a nice night and keep smiling.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2021
Comment from Zhen Xuan Liu
Another great poem today! I love it! I love the detailed description in the simple lines. I can see the effort you put into this. Vocabularies are nicely chosen and intriguing, while the background and word color fit the theme well. Good job and best of luck on the contest!
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Another great poem today! I love it! I love the detailed description in the simple lines. I can see the effort you put into this. Vocabularies are nicely chosen and intriguing, while the background and word color fit the theme well. Good job and best of luck on the contest!
Comment Written 26-Sep-2021
Comment from Eternal Muse
You did an excellent job with this poem. Loved your creative imagery, visuals and presentation.
Very much liked your color scheme - with green on a black background. Enhances the theme and presentation.
Liked the mystical aura of it - well done, good luck in the contest.
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You did an excellent job with this poem. Loved your creative imagery, visuals and presentation.
Very much liked your color scheme - with green on a black background. Enhances the theme and presentation.
Liked the mystical aura of it - well done, good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2021
Comment from Patty Palmer
I agree. It would be wonderful if we could all band together as one and stand united against our common foe at the moment. He has divided our country worse than slavery ever did, and that's pretty bad. Great job on the poem.
Patty
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2021
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I agree. It would be wonderful if we could all band together as one and stand united against our common foe at the moment. He has divided our country worse than slavery ever did, and that's pretty bad. Great job on the poem.
Patty
Comment Written 26-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2021
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Thank you!