Reflections
Reflections of an old man26 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
That's sad, especially if it's true. It would be so terribly lonely to be 92 and without anyone. I liked the scene that you set with the honeybees around the Russian sage. I guess he didn't actually drive? (It said: "now he'd had too much to drink to risk driving.") Was he only daydreaming the meeting with T. Ames while driving?
It seems that Bud died of alcohol poisoning? The hallucinating of the times past seems to indicate that.
reply by the author on 19-May-2022
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That's sad, especially if it's true. It would be so terribly lonely to be 92 and without anyone. I liked the scene that you set with the honeybees around the Russian sage. I guess he didn't actually drive? (It said: "now he'd had too much to drink to risk driving.") Was he only daydreaming the meeting with T. Ames while driving?
It seems that Bud died of alcohol poisoning? The hallucinating of the times past seems to indicate that.
Comment Written 18-May-2022
reply by the author on 19-May-2022
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Actually, Bud died from a massive coronary. I edited and cleared up the portion of the story where Bud pulled out after the patrol car had left, thanks for noticing that. Sometimes I get si caught up in writing the story that.. well, you know.
irish
Comment from joann r romei
This was a touching story of this respected mans last day. I enjoyed the flash fiction and the sentiment. the authentic dialogue flowed, young whippersnapper, lol
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2022
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This was a touching story of this respected mans last day. I enjoyed the flash fiction and the sentiment. the authentic dialogue flowed, young whippersnapper, lol
Comment Written 21-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2022
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I am humbled that you went this far, thank you again for taking the time, and your penetrating observations! I look forward to reading your portfolio!
irish
Comment from VJWild
I love this story. It's perfect length, it's characters, it's easy nature. I am a police dispatcher, so this was a touching, beautiful story to read. Your work (and even your reviews) are positive and inspiring! Thank you for that! :)
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2022
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I love this story. It's perfect length, it's characters, it's easy nature. I am a police dispatcher, so this was a touching, beautiful story to read. Your work (and even your reviews) are positive and inspiring! Thank you for that! :)
Comment Written 08-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2022
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Wow, thank you for reading, your great insight, and all the stars!
Don't know if I told you, I worked for the Sparks, Nevada PD for five years, took my lumps, drove an ambulance for another 5, then worked in the California Prison system for 22+ years, so I can relate to you and your profession!
Cheers, irish
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No way! I worked as an EMT/Paramedic for 10 years in the suburbs of Pittsburgh PA! Too crazy! How did you work in the prison for THAT long... how did you work in a prison, period! Wow, I can't even imagine.
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Yeah, it was interesting at times, we had a Level 4 Yard (The worst of the worst), a Level 3 Yard (Gang Bangers and Druggies) a Level 3 PC Yard,(Protective Custody, Pedophiles) and a Level 1 Yard (Pre-Parole).
Lots of action on the Level 4 yard.
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Wow, how did you do it for so long? Guess you have to just leave it at the door when your shift is over.
Comment from LovnPeace
Well, it seems I have found another exceptional writer here on FanStory. It was a pleasure reading this honor, to one of our brave members in Blue. Blessings, Barbara
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Well, it seems I have found another exceptional writer here on FanStory. It was a pleasure reading this honor, to one of our brave members in Blue. Blessings, Barbara
Comment Written 17-Jan-2022
Comment from Alaskastory
"Reflections" is a fine story that so clearly shows the thoughts of the main character. Every reader is likely to be given the picture of beloved friends who pass away and leave sentimental thoughts. Lovely story.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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"Reflections" is a fine story that so clearly shows the thoughts of the main character. Every reader is likely to be given the picture of beloved friends who pass away and leave sentimental thoughts. Lovely story.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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Hi There,
Thank you for reading, your kind comments, and all those stars!
Big controversy over the images the dying see, real, or just the subconscious mind? I like real.
Cheers, irish
Comment from Zhen Xuan Liu
I love the conversations you included between the old man and the young officer. You signifies the different tone the two people used - one is more casual while the other is more serious, which I like. Overall, great story and keep up the amazing work!
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2021
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I love the conversations you included between the old man and the young officer. You signifies the different tone the two people used - one is more casual while the other is more serious, which I like. Overall, great story and keep up the amazing work!
Comment Written 26-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2021
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Thank you for reading, your kind comments, and all the stars! Just an amateur but still learning and trying for the best expression.
Cheers, irish
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Thank you for reading, your kind comments, and all the stars! Just an amateur but still learning and trying for the best expression.
Cheers, irish
Comment from Badger_29
Dear Irish, I found this to be a poignant and moving account of a life well lived.
, I would like to share that you evoke deep emotions with your writing; I am ever learning this craft which is worked out but never perfected.
Loved the reference to Glenfiddich single malt scotch, at least the old man had good taste. A fitting tribute to a full life, well lived.
Blessings,
Brother Badger Cull
Darren
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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Dear Irish, I found this to be a poignant and moving account of a life well lived.
, I would like to share that you evoke deep emotions with your writing; I am ever learning this craft which is worked out but never perfected.
Loved the reference to Glenfiddich single malt scotch, at least the old man had good taste. A fitting tribute to a full life, well lived.
Blessings,
Brother Badger Cull
Darren
Comment Written 26-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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Wow, I am humbled! Of course, you read more in-depth than most, and see the motivation behind the story.
Yes, how about that Glenfidich!
Cheers, irish
Comment from humpwhistle
These two posts have a similar feel to them, irish. Both leave me with a sense of longing, and maybe, time slipping away. I think you've caught Bud perfectly. Life can play dirty tricks even upon the truest of men.
His death strikes me as an act of generosity bestowed upon a man deserved some relief.
I hope these two posts are harbingers of things to come.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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These two posts have a similar feel to them, irish. Both leave me with a sense of longing, and maybe, time slipping away. I think you've caught Bud perfectly. Life can play dirty tricks even upon the truest of men.
His death strikes me as an act of generosity bestowed upon a man deserved some relief.
I hope these two posts are harbingers of things to come.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 25-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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Hi Lee, thank you for all the stars, I am humbled! This story was taken from real life here in my small town, of course embellished, but this man was a true humanitarian.
Cheers, irish
Comment from Sherry Asbury
I am crying so hard - what a beautiful story!!! Oh, my, perfectly written and filled with pathos and heart-rending sweetness. One of the dearest stories I have read...I have no people either and think about dying alone unless my Main Coon hangs in there. Oh my, I need more tissue!!
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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I am crying so hard - what a beautiful story!!! Oh, my, perfectly written and filled with pathos and heart-rending sweetness. One of the dearest stories I have read...I have no people either and think about dying alone unless my Main Coon hangs in there. Oh my, I need more tissue!!
Comment Written 25-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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Hi Sherry, Gee, didn't mean to make you cry! Thank you for reading, your very kind comments, and all the stars! Bud was a real humanitarian, much loved in my small town.
Cheers, irish
Comment from Senyai
Hi Irish,
This is such a tearjerker of a post! Bud Emmons went out quietly in his lawn chair, memories calling him to come 'home' that day in May. Perfect account of a living person in your town.
The way you presented the story was brilliant, weaving back and forth from memory to the present. I feel I now know Bud too by the time I finished reading...
Great stuff :))
Always,
Senyai
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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Hi Irish,
This is such a tearjerker of a post! Bud Emmons went out quietly in his lawn chair, memories calling him to come 'home' that day in May. Perfect account of a living person in your town.
The way you presented the story was brilliant, weaving back and forth from memory to the present. I feel I now know Bud too by the time I finished reading...
Great stuff :))
Always,
Senyai
Comment Written 25-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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Wow, thank you for reading, your great comments, and all the stars!
Bud was a great humanitarian, loved by many. Good crowd at his graveside service.
Cheers, irish
