Weary
The consequences of working all the time2 total reviews
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a great job with your contest entry. I enjoyed reading it. Your poem has a strong message. Life is more than just work, work, work. You paint that picture well. Your rhymes are great and there's good flow. I could see everything you mentioned.
Best wishes in the contest.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2021
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You did a great job with your contest entry. I enjoyed reading it. Your poem has a strong message. Life is more than just work, work, work. You paint that picture well. Your rhymes are great and there's good flow. I could see everything you mentioned.
Best wishes in the contest.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 22-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2021
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Thank you for the review
Comment from Wendy G
I think many must feel this way, particularly as they work so hard for their families out of love, but at the same time they miss out on the special moments. As the body ages, the futility sets in, and the overall sense of weariness and disappointment, as you have well expressed here. A thoughtful and thought provoking piece.
Wendy
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2021
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I think many must feel this way, particularly as they work so hard for their families out of love, but at the same time they miss out on the special moments. As the body ages, the futility sets in, and the overall sense of weariness and disappointment, as you have well expressed here. A thoughtful and thought provoking piece.
Wendy
Comment Written 21-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2021
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Thank you for the review
