Comment from Hitcher

Excellent

And here we are with the spring equinox doing the opposite here in New Zealand : )) I enjoyed both your poem and the humor of the accompanying
artwork friend. A great example of the haiku form.

 Comment Written 22-Sep-2021

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reply by the author on 22-Sep-2021

Hi Hitcher,

Oh thank you very much for your encouraging review and thoughts on my silly haiku for Gypsy Blue Rose?s club event. Trying to get the "hang of haiku"
LOL.

Have a great rest of your week down in beautiful New Zealand. Always wanted to visit your country! :))

Senyai

reply by the author on 22-Sep-2021

Hi Hitcher,

Oh thank you very much for your encouraging review and thoughts on my silly haiku for Gypsy Blue Rose?s club event. Trying to get the "hang of haiku"
LOL.

Have a great rest of your week down in beautiful New Zealand. Always wanted to visit your country! :))

Senyai

reply by Hitcher on 22-Sep-2021

It is a stunningly beautiful country to visit, even better to settle in : )) Hitch

reply by the author on 22-Sep-2021

Yes, I hear great things about the gorgeous two islands. Are you living on the North Island?

reply by Hitcher on 22-Sep-2021

in the center of the North, Taupo : ))

reply by the author on 22-Sep-2021

Oh ok? thank you. I bet it?s lovely this time of year, too.

Comment from Midi O'Rourke

Excellent

This is a fun and funny Haiku. Very well written too. Funny, I think it's two thirds Haiku, because of the structure and reference to nature, and one third is comedy. Moods get moodier. Funny. The artwork you chose is perfect. THANKS for sharing this with us.

 Comment Written 22-Sep-2021

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reply by the author on 22-Sep-2021

Hi Midi O,

Oh thank you for your encouraging review and thoughts on my silly haiku.
Gypsy Blue Rose asked for a humorous haiku for her Club event so? here it is. LOL

Have a wonderful rest of your week,
Senyai

reply by the author on 22-Sep-2021

Hi Midi O,

Oh thank you for your encouraging review and thoughts on my silly haiku.
Gypsy Blue Rose asked for a humorous haiku for her Club event so? here it is. LOL

Have a wonderful rest of your week,
Senyai

reply by Midi O'Rourke on 22-Sep-2021

Well, I think you hit it! You have a good week too. Keep writing!

reply by the author on 22-Sep-2021

You too, Midi! ? and keep that great humor of yours :))

reply by Midi O'Rourke on 22-Sep-2021

haha. will do! -Midi

Comment from Wendy G

Excellent

I like it, especially "moods get moodier"! Quite humorous as is the cartoon. An excellent Haiku for the club event. Well considered and expressed.
Wendy

 Comment Written 21-Sep-2021

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reply by the author on 22-Sep-2021

Hi Wendy,

Trying to get the "hang of haiku" LOL. Thank you kindly for an encouraging and thoughtful review.

Have a wonderful week, Wendy :))

Always,
Senyai

reply by the author on 22-Sep-2021

Hi Wendy,

Trying to get the "hang of haiku" LOL. Thank you kindly for an encouraging and thoughtful review.

Have a wonderful week, Wendy :))

Always,
Senyai

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

Haiku (shortcomings of fall)
by Senyai

Hah hah hah l love it! It's funny and on point with the Haiku Club event. Good play on words, satori. Good syllables count and connection between lines. Excellent presentation. I'm proud of you.

 Comment Written 21-Sep-2021

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reply by the author on 22-Sep-2021

Hi Gypsy,

Oh thank you so much! I hope I?m getting the hang of haiku somewhat.

But one question, can haiku ever rhyme? If the haiku is even a so called contemporary haiku is that form acceptable to rhyme?

One more question?Does a haiku always have to refer to a season or nature?

Thanks, Gypsy for your encouragement. I appreciate it very much!

Always,
Senyai

reply by the author on 22-Sep-2021

Hi Gypsy,

Oh thank you so much! I hope I?m getting the hang of haiku somewhat.

But one question, can haiku ever rhyme? If the haiku is even a so called contemporary haiku is that form acceptable to rhyme?

One more question?Does a haiku always have to refer to a season or nature?

Thanks, Gypsy for your encouragement. I appreciate it very much!

Always,
Senyai

reply by Gypsy Blue Rose on 22-Sep-2021

Haiku never rhyme.
Classic haiku always used a season (kigo)

Contemporary haiku don't need a kigo but it often does.

See definition bellow

Classic haiku
haiku is a Japanese poem that uses imagistic language to convey the essence of an experience of nature intuitively linked to the human condition. Created 700 years ago. It's one of the oldest poetic forms.

The essence of haiku is placing two images or ideas side by side in order to compare the two to show similarities. Both parts are separated by a dash

kigo-usually drawn from a saijiki, an extensive but defined list of such terms.


Kigo (season) seasons dictionary

https://wkdkigodatabase03.blogspot.com/2007/09/stars-hoshi.html?m=1

English haiku doesn't have to be 5/7/5, just 17 syllables OR LESS and as brief as possible. Japanese syllables are shorter than English syllables. source of rules

for example, a haiku written by haiku master, Matsuo Basho....

old pond
frogs jumped in
sound of water .................... In English, it's 2/3/4

Same haiku in Japanese....

furu ike ya
kawazu tobikomu
mizu no to ..................... In Japanese it's 5/7/5

source--haiku society of America
William J. Higginson Haiku society of America

Avoid poetic devices....
Alliteration.
Personification.
Puns.
Rhymes.
Metaphor.
Simile.

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Contemporary haiku
CONTEMPORARY HAIKU is an English adaptation of the Japanese classic haiku. It's written in one to four lines no strict syllables count but as brief as possible. Images are taken from nature. Seasonality is optional, though often featured. Alliteration and metaphor are okay. Never rhymes.

Here's an example:

in the woodpile
the broken ax handle

reply by the author on 22-Sep-2021

Oh thank you, Gypsy. This is just what I was looking for?

I will continue posting in your Haiku Club events to perfect this truly lovely poetic form ❤️ Thank you :))

Comment from mermaids

Excellent

Love the line "moods get moodier", so true of this time of year.vexcellent haiku form about a change of season and the emotions that come with it. I am sure many can relate to your words.

 Comment Written 21-Sep-2021

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reply by the author on 22-Sep-2021

Hi Mermaids,

Oh thanks so much for your encouraging and supportive review on my silly Haiku. It was a fun Club event with Gypsy Blue Rose.

Have a wonderful week :))
Senyai

reply by the author on 22-Sep-2021

Hi Mermaids,

Oh thanks so much for your encouraging and supportive review on my silly Haiku. It was a fun Club event with Gypsy Blue Rose.

Have a wonderful week :))
Senyai

Comment from Mary Shifman

Excellent

I always enjoy these cartoons and the poem goes very well with it. The shorter days is troublesome. I dislike driving in the dark and when it gets dark at four o'clock here during the winter, I don't go out unless I know I can home before nightfall. I'm sure many people agree with this clever poem.

 Comment Written 21-Sep-2021

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reply by the author on 22-Sep-2021

Hi Mary,

Oh thank you for a wonderful review and thoughts. I?m with you, I hate to drive in the dark these days. But I do love the fall with the bright fall leaves and holidays. So there?s that.

Have a great week, Mary :))

Senyai

reply by the author on 22-Sep-2021

Hi Mary,

Oh thank you for a wonderful review and thoughts. I?m with you, I hate to drive in the dark these days. But I do love the fall with the bright fall leaves and holidays. So there?s that.

Have a great week, Mary :))

Senyai

Comment from zanya

Excellent

Yes and this is one of the disadvantages, I guess that the arrival of Autumn brings - the days darken earlier - not my favourite season!! too much darkness -

 Comment Written 21-Sep-2021

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reply by the author on 22-Sep-2021

Hi Zanya,

Fall has many things to offer once we get acclimated to it. Its the change that?s hard. Yes, the shorter days can cause a lot of grief for some and does affect us, at least it does me. But holidays and fall colors are awesome!

Have a great week :))

Senyai

reply by the author on 22-Sep-2021

Hi Zanya,

Fall has many things to offer once we get acclimated to it. Its the change that?s hard. Yes, the shorter days can cause a lot of grief for some and does affect us, at least it does me. But holidays and fall colors are awesome!

Have a great week :))

Senyai

Comment from LisaMay

Excellent

I like your humorous approach to how the darkness of shortened daylight can make us grumpy. Maybe the old lady in the cartoon should take her sunglasses off to lighten up what is available.
Happily for me, we are approaching summertime daylight hours here in NZ.

 Comment Written 21-Sep-2021

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reply by the author on 22-Sep-2021

Hi Lisa May,

Hahaha? yes taking off her sunglasses might help LOL. That?s right, NZ is just getting into spring now. I marvel at the fact a 23.5 degrees tilt to the earth?s axis can make such a change in the two hemisphere?s weather.

Thank you for an interesting review and comments on my silly Haiku?

Have a great week way down in beautiful New Zealand! :))

Senyai

reply by the author on 22-Sep-2021

Hi Lisa May,

Hahaha? yes taking off her sunglasses might help LOL. That?s right, NZ is just getting into spring now. I marvel at the fact a 23.5 degrees tilt to the earth?s axis can make such a change in the two hemisphere?s weather.

Thank you for an interesting review and comments on my silly Haiku?

Have a great week way down in beautiful New Zealand! :))

Senyai

Comment from karenina

Excellent

Hah. Loved it. S.A.D. is the perfect acronym for Seasonal Affective Disorder---and these loopy changes of early nights descending can play havoc with even the sanest of us (of which I sadly do not qualify I hasten to add!)--- LOVE Fall....hate the breaking of my Circadian Clock!

Karenina

 Comment Written 21-Sep-2021

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reply by the author on 21-Sep-2021

Hi Karenina,

You are so right! My thoughts exactly. My circadian clock is slightly busted anyway and add SAD to it? as my grandmother used to say about waking up on the wrong side of the bed?

"I feel like a stewed witch and cross as two sticks"

What a picture! Anyway I thank you for a wonderful review, Karenina.

Take care, my dear lady :))

Always,
Senyai

reply by karenina on 22-Sep-2021

Ok
I am going to shamelessly borrow your grandmother's amazing saying! At least one person will be treated to that unique description in the next twenty-four hours! --

Katenina

reply by the author on 22-Sep-2021

Karenina, hahahah! Yes, you are most welcome to use my MeeMama?s saying. She would be proud :))

It really drives it home with the image of that stewed witch who is cross as two sticks . Bless you. Take care ❤️

reply by karenina on 22-Sep-2021

It is a great image!

Karenina

reply by the author on 23-Sep-2021

:))

Comment from Sherry Asbury

Excellent

Oh, so true!! I go to bed at 5:00 pm and read for hours - then it is dark at 4:00 am when I get up to write. I think there might be light out there, but you couldn't prove it by me. I just love Maxine - she is my sister old lady and you have presented a great humorous piece of work here.

 Comment Written 21-Sep-2021

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reply by the author on 21-Sep-2021

Hi Sherry,

Ahh, I hear ya! Maxine never disappoints :)). Thank you for a great review and chuckle?Prescription for S.A.D.(Seasonal Affective Disorder) is sunlight through your eyelids at noon on any day the sun is shining or use a light box? I was told it really helps the grouchies..

Have a wonderful week, Sherry,

Always,
Senyai