Haiku (shortcomings of fall)
When daylight comes up short -57 total reviews
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Greetings fellow fan. Spot-on for the season that heralds the encroaching darkness--witty whimsy in the punchline--clever play on mood/moody--this is a contender for sure.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2021
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Greetings fellow fan. Spot-on for the season that heralds the encroaching darkness--witty whimsy in the punchline--clever play on mood/moody--this is a contender for sure.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2021
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Hi Elizabeth,
Oh thank you so much! Glad to hear from you? I thought I was already a fan and noticed that I wasn?t much to my chagrin! So solved that problem real quick :)) Also found you on Medium, so will stalk you there too ;-)
Thanks for the nice review and can?t wait to read more of your excellent works.
All the best,
Senyai
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Cool! I thought we were fans too. I'm posting some of last year's work on medium--after substantially reworking them.
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Ok, I?ll take a look :))
Comment from Begin Again
Amen to that! I hate getting up in the dark and having dinner in the dark as well before slipping off to bed. i can understand why the bears hibernate... forget the cold and the dark.
Carol
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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Amen to that! I hate getting up in the dark and having dinner in the dark as well before slipping off to bed. i can understand why the bears hibernate... forget the cold and the dark.
Carol
Comment Written 26-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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Hi Carol,
Thank you so much for an amusing and informative review! Yes, us ?bears? like to hibernate when days grow short and daylight does too :))
Have a great Monday and coming week, Carol
Always,
Senyai
Comment from pharp
Senyai,
You have penned an excellent Humorous Haiku.
The artwork chosen is perfect, as is your last line.
Since I have retired, I am not as moody; I just sleep longer.
I pray you and your family are doing well; have a blessed weekend
sending lots of love and hugs.
Portiað???ð???ð???
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2021
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Senyai,
You have penned an excellent Humorous Haiku.
The artwork chosen is perfect, as is your last line.
Since I have retired, I am not as moody; I just sleep longer.
I pray you and your family are doing well; have a blessed weekend
sending lots of love and hugs.
Portiað???ð???ð???
Comment Written 24-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2021
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Hi Portia,
So glad to hear from you again! We are doing well. Hoping the same for you and your family.
Fall is upon us now as the equinox has passed and days are shortening. I love the fall with colorful leaves, pumpkins and turkey :)). Even with the darkness lasting longer, I just be sure and take my vitamin D3 LOL
Thank you much for a wonderful review?
Bless you, dear Portia. Have a wonderful weekend and stay safe ❤️
Always,
Senyai
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Hi Portia,
So glad to hear from you again! We are doing well. Hoping the same for you and your family.
Fall is upon us now as the equinox has passed and days are shortening. I love the fall with colorful leaves, pumpkins and turkey :)). Even with the darkness lasting longer, I just be sure and take my vitamin D3 LOL
Thank you much for a wonderful review?
Bless you, dear Portia. Have a wonderful weekend and stay safe ❤️
Always,
Senyai
Comment from Cristine22
I enjoy the lightness of the last line, and the picture works well. I like that the poem has a nice smooth rhythm as fits a haiku, but then it's still humorous. Very nice!
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2021
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I enjoy the lightness of the last line, and the picture works well. I like that the poem has a nice smooth rhythm as fits a haiku, but then it's still humorous. Very nice!
Comment Written 24-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2021
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Hi Cristine,
Oh thank you so much! I appreciate your warm and encouraging review. Glad it gave a chuckle :))
Have a great weekend,
Senyai
Comment from tfawcus
A humorous take on the very real correlation between shorter winter days and depression. At the very least, the days when we go to work in the dark and come back in the dark have an adverse effect on our mood.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2021
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A humorous take on the very real correlation between shorter winter days and depression. At the very least, the days when we go to work in the dark and come back in the dark have an adverse effect on our mood.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2021
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Hi Tony,
Thank you for an astute review and interesting thoughts! Yes, shorter days with less sunlight are upon us in the Northern Hemisphere now as the fall Equinox has just passed? so on with the pumpkins and turkey LOL and oh yes, colorful falling leaves?
Oh wait! Your spring is upon you, isn?t it? Australia or New Zealand? Longer days for you now :))
I appreciate your generous rating.
Always,
Senyai
Comment from Sanku
That is true .We need to get up only as per daylight. I loved the cartoon. Apt picture fort the haiku.The last line is brilliant .The moods get moodier! all the best for the contest.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2021
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That is true .We need to get up only as per daylight. I loved the cartoon. Apt picture fort the haiku.The last line is brilliant .The moods get moodier! all the best for the contest.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2021
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Hi Sanku,
Thank you for a wonderful and encouraging review and thoughts. Bring on the colorful leaves, pumpkins and turkey! Even in the dark :))
All the best,
Senyai
Comment from angel123
I enjoyed reading your Humorous Haiku Poem. Your message flows well with humor and your artwork choice enhances your message with wit and cleverness in your presentation. Best wishes!
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2021
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I enjoyed reading your Humorous Haiku Poem. Your message flows well with humor and your artwork choice enhances your message with wit and cleverness in your presentation. Best wishes!
Comment Written 24-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2021
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Hi Angel,
Oh my! Thank you so very much for a wonderful review and comments. The gift of six made my evening!
Your encouragement was so welcome ❤️
Always,
Senyai
Comment from lyenochka
That cartoon is hilarious! I agree that it affects our moods to have so little sunlight. Best stock up on vitamin D supplements! Good use of alliteration in the second line and the funny "moods get moodier" ending!
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2021
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That cartoon is hilarious! I agree that it affects our moods to have so little sunlight. Best stock up on vitamin D supplements! Good use of alliteration in the second line and the funny "moods get moodier" ending!
Comment Written 23-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2021
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Hi Iyenochka,
Thank you so much for a perceptive and encouraging review and thoughts!
Maxine never disappoints, LOL. Love her grumpy frumpy self ❤️ I appreciate your input and am so glad you got a kick out my silly haiku for Gypsy?s Club.
Have a wonderful weekend, Iyenochka ?Btw, does your beautiful name start with an I or an L?wanted to clear that up :))
Have a good weekend,
Always,
Senyai
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Hi Iyenochka,
Thank you so much for a perceptive and encouraging review and thoughts!
Maxine never disappoints, LOL. Love her grumpy frumpy self ❤️ I appreciate your input and am so glad you got a kick out my silly haiku for Gypsy?s Club.
Have a wonderful weekend, Iyenochka ?Btw, does your beautiful name start with an I or an L?wanted to clear that up :))
Have a good weekend,
Always,
Senyai
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Hi Senyai,
You can call me Helen. In Russian class, my teachers would call me by the diminutive for Lena - Lyenochka. I added the Y to get that "yeh" sound for the Russian E. Thanks for asking!
Comment from Michele Harber
As one who used to suffer from Seasonal Affective Disorder, this poem hit home. I like your use of alliteration in the second and third lines. While I'm not sure I truly consider this "Humorous Haiku," the last line did make me smile.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2021
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As one who used to suffer from Seasonal Affective Disorder, this poem hit home. I like your use of alliteration in the second and third lines. While I'm not sure I truly consider this "Humorous Haiku," the last line did make me smile.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2021
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Hi Michele,
Oh thank you for a perceptive review and thoughts! Yes, I love fall with its bright leaves, pumpkins and turkey, but the shorter days and less sunlight
can bring out a sad mood at times.
Take care :))
Senyai
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You're very welcome, and at least we can commiserate.
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Yes!
Comment from Eternal Muse
A very nice haiku with good imagery and visuals. My only peeve is that you use "mood" twice (in different variations) in the poem that short. Perhaps, an alternate word can be found.
Good job though.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2021
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A very nice haiku with good imagery and visuals. My only peeve is that you use "mood" twice (in different variations) in the poem that short. Perhaps, an alternate word can be found.
Good job though.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2021
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Hi Eternal Muse,
Thank you for a great review and suggestion! I was trying for a bit of humor here for Gypsy?s Haiku Club event. I?ll consider an edit? thank you for your perceptive eye :))
Always,
Senyai
