In Memory
Senryu Poem6 total reviews
Comment from Wendy G
Yes, it is always very sad to see such memorials, especially if teddy bears are left for children. Well composed, thoughtful and meaningful. Best wishes for your entry in the contest.
Wendy
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2021
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Yes, it is always very sad to see such memorials, especially if teddy bears are left for children. Well composed, thoughtful and meaningful. Best wishes for your entry in the contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 23-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2021
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Thanks for your review. These were left in memory of a young lady who tragically got hit by a car last week
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written senyru you have penned for the writing prompt. You used very good descriptive words and very good imagery from the art work you chose. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2021
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This is a very well written senyru you have penned for the writing prompt. You used very good descriptive words and very good imagery from the art work you chose. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
Comment Written 21-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2021
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Thanks for your review Teri. This was written in memory of a young lady who recently died in a tragic accident
Comment from kahpot
Sadness at the loss of someone is a very destroying emotion, memories are all we are left with, very well written and presented, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2021
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Sadness at the loss of someone is a very destroying emotion, memories are all we are left with, very well written and presented, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 21-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2021
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Thanks very much for your review.
Comment from Paul McFarland
Nicely done. "the bouquet of memories' is a great line. We have seen all too many of these memorials along the roadside. Tens of thousands of people die in traffic accidents each year in the United States.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2021
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Nicely done. "the bouquet of memories' is a great line. We have seen all too many of these memorials along the roadside. Tens of thousands of people die in traffic accidents each year in the United States.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2021
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Thanks for your review. This was written in memory of a young lady who died last week.
Comment from susand3022
Hello Author,
I liked this poem. My only suggestion is to lose the capitals. Japanese poetry doesn't use them except for proper nouns, otherwise it's just right! Nice job! :)
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2021
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Hello Author,
I liked this poem. My only suggestion is to lose the capitals. Japanese poetry doesn't use them except for proper nouns, otherwise it's just right! Nice job! :)
Comment Written 21-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2021
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Thank you for your review and suggestions.
Comment from RodG
This sad poem brings back the memory of when a young local girl was killed crossing a train track and for years friends and family laid bouquets by the site. Your last line says it all. Rod
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2021
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This sad poem brings back the memory of when a young local girl was killed crossing a train track and for years friends and family laid bouquets by the site. Your last line says it all. Rod
Comment Written 21-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2021
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Thanks for your review. They really are sites of sadness.
